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Comrade Bagel Muffin


I'm the reason when you search Quibble you'll find Scootaloo too. PM me if you want to talk about anything one on one.

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How far would you go to get home?

Inspired by Imploding Colon's Epic.

(only the Chapter titles are in French. The story is entirely in English.)

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You're not one of those authors, are you? The kind that doesn't respond to comments?

8627079
I respond to comments when I can, why?

If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like? Also, how many chapters long will this story be?

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I can't describe voices sorry, I'm just not that good I hear the voices but can't describe them I just read in that voice. Honestly I have absolutely no idea.

Is... is this what I think it is?

Looking into the chapter I can tell it's not. I thought at first that it was the story of the Guard we met in Austraeoh, or perhaps Gold Petals, though as we all know, Gold Petals is female, and she makes it all the way to Ponyville. Still, the premise was intriguing enough, without the added information that this was inspired by Austraeoh.

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It's not based on or off of the Austraeoh saga. It is only inspired by it. It wouldn't be that long of a trip for her maybe ten months if not less.

Ah, very well then. I shall allow it the chance to stand on its own legs.

Don't worry about writer's block.
Folks think that writing is a mindless task like pushing boxes all day.
It's not. Even folks who push boxes all day take breaks.
If you need a break, take it and relax.

9025956
Merci Beaucoup and After a month I think I'm finally back on track.
Hopefully

How far would you go to get home?

Inspired by Imploding Colon's Epic.

(only the Chapter titles are in French. The stories entirely English.)

story's

I'll read it and let you know.

I like how you use names like 'Mother' and 'Father' instead of 'his mother' and 'his mother', I think even in third person view, when being told by the perspective of someone, the words 'Mother' and 'Father' give off a nice ring to it. Plus it makes it less tiring to put 'his mother'. Other than that, your description of the landscape and Escutcheon's emotions are done beautifully.

Hey, pretty good. Liked and followed. What do the chapter titles mean?

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All of them

Also is Quete a misspelling of Cute or a foreign word?

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It was done because if you spell it right you have to spell it correctly in the search bar.

He quickly gulped him down.

Woah, is this a clop story?!
Also, unnecessary author's note is very unnecessary.

First of all, author's notes are meant to be used to explain things in the chapter that may cause confusion, or to explain a perspective; not to apologize when chapters are late or to tell the reader the chapter is done -when it isn't.

If I found three grammatical errors and you admit you haven't an editor or proof reader, then it isn't done. :trollestia:

On to the next!

'Escutcheon' is one of the most difficult names I've ever had to try to read in a story about ponies. Why is it such a complicated sounding name?

Ech-üt-ch-eon?

Maybe it's just us colonists, but that's hard to enunciate.

This chapter is chock full of problems and doesn't really move the story anywhere. You could cut over half of it and use it to start the next chapter.

So I'm a few chapters in and I don't know what's happening, who escatauean is, what he's doing, where he's doing it, and where he's going except that he's lost and going home to a home that isn't there.

Well here's to chapter 5.

Really?! I didn't know. I feel so enlightened now. :moustache:

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This is done on purpose. All in good time I promise.
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I just use them to log my thoughts as you've noticed. Sorry.
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Merci hopefully there won't be many more. I don't know I think it gives him direction.

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