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Okay, I'll bite.
7225477 Not too hard, please...
I tried to download the chapters and they were "DealExpress" instead of txt, this only happens to me? D:
I'm reading through this and intend to read more, but it looks as though you forgot to edit out that last bit--a conversation with your editor, perhaps?
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Doh. I need to stop doing that.
Thanks!
7225502 could be worse. There's still a kitty face in "Twilight Likes Weird Things" from Razed and I playin' around in the doc
I do like me some kinky stuff ;)
"these rooms, you see, and sometimes... they are open to allow people to-- Well! To enter and watch. They call it-- what happens in these rooms-- " I think you meant "ponies" instead of "people" here.
7225572 Whoop! Yes indeedy we did!
Thanks!
lies. There are no good kitties. They are cuddly and pointy and murderous.
Grotesque and yet exhilarating is about the best way to describe that, Rares.
7225572 I can't believe i missed that.
Sigh. I shall be a better editor when I grow up, someday. 
Oh, and this is a bit tricky: I don't know if you can directly link to the artist's tumblr, as it's considered NSFW, but crediting it would be good. Especially since I checked over there and she's been diagnosed with melanoma (!) and has to have an operation. She draws cute things. I just ordered a couple of prints to help her out.
Aww crap xD don't keep us waiting too long for the next chapter, please.
7225659 Lol, no worries, the things I've missed in my own stories.... well, they don't need repeating.
This is pretty good so far. Will read more tomorrow.
Mysterious man with ominous name comes in talking about 'local flavor?' Gee, that'll end well!
It is nice to see another writer that understands BDSM is not about abuse or torture. I like how your OC has taken the role of mentor and is the background. This leaves the focus on Rarity and Fluttershy.
Yeah, it looks interesting. I'll get to it later.
No anal play? buuu at least she could put it on the yellow section D:
The rest of the red stuff, i completely agree
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Easy mistake. I missed it too... (Actually, I'm combing over the fic again. Funny how excitement can make one blind to simple errors! I'm mostly just making the formatting uniform and squashing some word repetitions...)
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Tumblr...? Do you mean DeviantArt? I suppose it is a gray area as she has some risque stuff in her gallery, but anyone who has mature turned off wouldn't see it. DA isn't a NSFW site in of itself, so unless a mod informs me otherwise, I'll leave the source link up. I think she could use the signal boost.
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I'm hoping to get the next chapter done too! I'm just as eager to write it as you are to read it, believe me...
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Don't be scurred.
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Thanks! I've followed the BDSM community for years and dabbled here and there, but most of the kinky knowledge comes from Troublesome Beast.
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Come on. Do you REALLY see Rarity messing around with someone's poop chute anyway?
This story is excellent and I absolutely love it so far.
Any idea when the next chapter will be out?
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I wanted to start the draft for the next chapter today, but I really have to get to work on my other fics.
I also have a toddler, and he's REFUSING TO NAP, so my hands are tied atm.
With luck, we can get it out soon! I'm really dying to write it.
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Thank you!
7227198 Great! I'm looking forward to seeing it!
Discrete... if persistent.
OH GOD RIGHT IN THE FUZZY FEELS
BLACK CAT DOWN,
I REPEAT
BLACK
CAT
DOWN
7226245 I mean it's a famous guy, and I imagine she's probably at least met him somewhere before/
7227198 Ready when you are! o7
I like this. I like that it focuses on the fact that BDSM can be just as loving as any other kind of sex. Too many BDSM fics I've encountered focus too much on the pain...
Oh my god.
I love this.
I can't say much save what others have before... This is simply delightful. The truly positives of the BDSM lifestyle, the SSC rules, the very genuine handling of it all; every so often something gets so much of it right. I'll definitely look forward to more of this.
An interesting take on the start and stop of play, and I can't find any fault with that as each partner works that out themselves. I'm more used to the sub doing something 'naughty' and the dom becomes the dom till they feel the play should end. Unless the sub ends it with their safe word. Maybe kitty will be naughty in the future. After all there is a lot in Rarity's boutique for a kitty to play with.
This was absolutely fantastic.
I laughed WAY too hard at that.
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That was my favorite line out of this whole thing, and it was ALL Troublesome Beast.
I adore this paragraph! It's clear to me that you're one of the few BDSM writers on this site that actually understands what it means to be in a relationship of this nature.
7235697 I thought it was pretty perfect in the pass, too. All NineCaliber and an excellent summation at that.
7234949 Nuuuu. I deal poorly with praise. It's just a quippy suggestion! @.@
7236353 YOU'LL TAKE MY PRAISE AND LIKE IT
Aww, that was utterly adorable and very hot at once.
However, you did use one particular clichée of the genre, namely the "Choosing of the Safeword" as if it was necessary for all types of bdsm play, and treated as if it was just a peculiar habit or ritual of the bdsm subculture, when in fact the safeword has a very specific use and function: depending on the type of scene two (or more) people intend to engage in, it may be desirable for the sub to be able to say, "No! Stop! Please don't throw me in the briar patch!", when they actually mean, "Yes! More! Bring on the briar patch!" and let the scene continue unabated. That's what the safeword is for, namely a signal that unequivocally means "No" in a situation where an actual "No" may mean "Yes". For the same reason it should preferably be something simple and most importantly something that you'll never ever forget or have to grope for, something that'll always be at the top of your mind, even when in a blind panic, hanging upside down, and disoriented.
But that's not what Fluttershy and Rarity are going for (at the moment), and there is nothing stopping Fluttershy from breaking character and saying, "Stop, Rarity. I'm getting scared/uncomfortable." in order to end the scene. Having them choose a safeword anyway, just because every bdsm story has to have that scene in it, makes it look like it's "just something those bdsm people do", a peculiar quirk of the subculture rather than a tool for a specific function.
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You raise a valid point, and it's something I was definitely aware of. I can say from personal experience that a safe word is as much about being able to keep the fantasy going without interrupting a scene via misunderstanding as it is maintaining a measure of safety.
But I would like to point out that the safe word isn't just for Fluttershy. It's also for Rarity. If Rarity somehow finds herself emotionally distressed to the point that she would need to stop the scene, she can make that immediately clear to Fluttershy by saying, "Cotton!" instead of freaking out and leaving her sub guessing as to whether her partner is still in the scene and just doing something new, or is clearly in need of help and comfort. It goes both ways. It's true that doms tend to not use safe words as often as subs, but there are situations in which they might feel the need to use it. Namely to end a scene swiftly without confusion. In this case, the "scene ends in a calm and natural way" is signaled by Rarity opening her fan and curtseying. If she hears her sister coming up the stairs and needs FS to snap out of it pronto, she would instead say "Cotton!"
Edit: I would also like to add that they're establishing their safeword not just for this scene, but for anything else they may do in the future. FS has already consented to things other than pure pet play where she would be able to speak like normal instead of acting like a kitten (and thus have the potential to miscommunicate should they lack a safe word)
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You bring up something that I tend to forget, namely that a safeword is just as much for the dom to use as for the sub, although when the dom says "Stop, no more!" it's not as open to misinterpretation as coming from the sub. I did note that the petplay was just what they were doing for now. In the case of playing subtle D/s games in front of the others, that only they recognise as such, more subtle signals may be in order, which can be used seamlessly during a public interaction; a subtle tap on the shoulder or a playful "Oh, stop it, you," work better in that regard than blurting out "Cotton!" out of nowhere.
Another situation where safewords should be mandatory, regardless of the intended scene, is in the context of shared spaces. When you run a club or "dungeon" or whatever you want to call it, it's imperative that everyone has a safeword, even if they think they don't need it for what they intend to do – because there will always be cocky idiots who don't know what they're doing. It could be a cocky sub who thinks "I don't need a stinking safeword; I can take anything!", and then a dom who doesn't know him very well uses a humiliation that reminds him of how daddy never loved him and it all ends in tears. Then there's the cocky dom, who thinks "I know exactly how far to take it and where the line is, 'cause I'm just that good," and next thing you know, you need to call an ambulance for the sub and psychotherapy for the dom.
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The likelihood for misunderstanding is less for a Dom, sure, but it can still happen. Again the safeword could be used in the instance a scene has to stop right that second. I'd even venture that it would be better for Rarity to use the safeword in the Sweetie Bell scenario instead of saying, "Oh no, my sister is coming!" or saying some other suspicious thing that could be overheard.
But I confess that's an exceedingly specific situation...
Regardless, the aim here is to maintain immersion in the fantasy. A sub mistaking a Dom for breaking scene is still a joy kill. These are beginners and they're playing it cautious-- as they should, IMO.
Though on further thought, a more subtle signal would be better to use in public interactions, sure.
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I completely agree. I was just explaining why I tend to forget that safewords are for doms to use as well, not exclusively for subs, like my original comment seemed to imply.
I also agree that it is smart for them to be more cautious than they'd strictly need to be, if they were already experienced. The only reason I commented on it at all is because I've seen a few too many stories where the safeword is treated as if it's a "ritual of entry" to the world of bdsm, instead of a practical tool for safety and immersion; call it a pet peeve. By now I'm entirely convinced that you know what the hell you're doing, so my concern is assuaged.
I also noticed that even in my second comment, I made it sound as if cockily eschewing a safeword endangers the sub only, which is far from true. It's just as possible for a dom to go in, thinking they're so in control, they'd never need a safeword, only for the scene to end with a pouting sub, miffed because the fish hooks stuck through her nipples didn't get enough weights hung from them, while the dom is shivering in the corner, vomiting.
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Fair enough!
Yikes! Sounds like something out of Ichi the Killer.
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There are so many different flavours and extremes thrown together under the umbrella term "bdsm", it makes safety and clear communication absolutely imperative.
I'm really liking how Rarity is written. Her voice seems just right
This story is reminding me of Sunstone, the way the characters and subject are handled. Which is good!
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I LOVE Sunstone!!
And thanks!
Oh, what is this? A rare gem of a story on this topic, without any of the cringeworthiness of so many others by an author who seems to know their stuff. Sunstone indeed. Original, totally in character and your use of language (and alliteration
) is delightful. Additionally, I was able to read all of the dialogue in the respective voices, well done.
I don't usually do this with unfinished stories, but have a favourite.
Oh, and I will have to steal the expression 'humming with liquid delight'. So much atmosphere and characterization in so few words.
I love the way Rarity's internal dialogue just goes off on a tangent sometimes
it just screams artist.
Great chapter, this is my most anticipated story right now.
7302648 Note added on that front. May or may not change it later during an additional editing sweep.