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I read, I stalk, I Write, and one day one of my stories will be featured. That is all

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Nice story looking forward to more of this btw how many chapter your gona make if you dont mind also i dont mined any spelling erros you can edit it if you want i dont mind so much about it ^_^

7107767 I dont know how many chapters, It is not going to be a short fic. I have an editor, but they haven't got to it yet, I like to let people read it a soon as I can. I can always fix it later thanks for the comment.

before she started clapping her hands together,

Lyra, what have you done...?!!! :pinkiegasp: :rainbowlaugh:

Huh, this is an interesting pairing... :twilightsmile:

Reading center-aligned text takes much more work for the brain to handle. Please, please left-align your writing.

:pinkiecrazy: I want to see where the next part leads.

I'll admit, I do enjoy the occasional story like this. Lets see where you take this :pinkiesmile:

Pinkie pie would never let her friend be unhappy.

It Pinkie Pie. :pinkiehappy: That's Pinkie :derpytongue2:

Just a quick note you don't have to say Pinkie Pie all the time Pinkie will do just fine also mayne try something like The party pony said, or the orange farmer stated, she wondered. Just throwing ideas at ya, because reading Applejack said, Applejack looked at Pinkie Pie it sort of got a bit annoying, sorry if that sounded a bit mean, just being honest and helping ya.

7121850 I agree it just that some people hate the purple unicorn syndrome as they call it , I will keep that in mind

Well that was a nice start :pinkiesmile: It makes me very curious to see where pinkie will take this in their future sessions. AJ is perfect for the role of pet considdering shes normally such a take charge kinda pony. It makes the whole power exchange more intense too :applejackunsure:

7122369 thank you and I agree when I thought of this I thought making Applejack submissive would add a challenge

Im really liking this story so far really wanting to read the next chapter soon. Good luck and please keep writing.:pinkiehappy::ajsmug:

Applejack was always the one in control. But sometimes too much control can lead to an unhappy life. Pinkie Pie would never let her friend be unhappy. So maybe all she needed was to teach her how to let loose some of that, pent up tension. And maybe, just maybe, Pinkie will learn something about herself.

Some errors in your description:
Add an o in 'to'.
Add 'let' between 'to' and 'loose'.
Add a comma after 'just maybe'.

I really enjoy this please continue! :pinkiehappy:

I lurve this story:ajsmug: I really like everything about it. (dont get a lot of BDSM ponies do ya?) anywho, good work!:heart::heart:

Oh well done. :twilightsmile: The whole internal conflict that Applejack is feeling not only suits her personality, but is a very common feeling for those who first get into this sort of thing.:applejackconfused: It lends a very nice touch of, dare I say, realism to the story. I for look forward to the next chapter. I wonder what Pinkie has planned this time. :pinkiecrazy:

Pinkie-as-dom feels really unusual... and I like it! :rainbowlaugh:

This is great! I can hardly wait for the next update! :heart:

a bit of pet play eh :pinkiehappy: maybe she should take applejack for walkies. ohh but what if somepony were to see :pinkiecrazy:

Good story, thanks for writing it. Pet play isn't really my thing, but you have a good style.

I can do some editing for you! I dont know about story, but I can help the conventions. Hit me up with a PM if youre interested:heart:

7289954 it's not always going to be pet play, Pinkie is just doing what she thinks Applejack needs for her situation, like I said in the tags their will be alot of other things. It's a building story.

Wow, this is gonna be clop.... But with an actual story!:raritystarry:

Also a submissive Applejack, I sense some edge in you, and I like that.

Mmm, yummy! I can already taste the naughty times!

Pinkie Pie has your attention. Entertain and please me.:ajbemused:

I've never seen this side of Pinkie! It gives me a Fluttershy/Rarity feel, they OBVIOUSLY (Or Twilight now that I'm thinking..Sorry, back to the writing!) seem like the type for this stuff! Mostly Rarity. Can't wait for Pinkie to get intimate! You can't spell intimate without MATE!

Mmm! My Pie is wet! Not baking, silly! The more..Intimate type. It's a really good story! :pinkiehappy:

7315149 well Im glad you like it. The next chap is in the works

I really wish there would've been most fighting in Applejack's stubborn side and her pride, we all know her stubbornness and pride are harder than the finest metal of all earth. (If that metal has a weak spot for friends.)

You could use a proofreader, but this is really sweet as well as being sexy. I hope you continue.:ajsmug:

7329350 You wont need to worry about quality too much in future chapters. I've been editing and back-editing this story for Huntersunday

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Should be allowed
"She wasted no more time, as she placed the brush in her pet’s main. Applejack only tensed for a second, before returning to her meal, not looking up from the food. Pinkie started to hum as she pulled the brush through her pet’s main."
main should be mane.
Without thoughts, the words came to Applejack as she screamed, “You are my master, my owner, you decide if A- her speech was cut short as another scream came through. Pinkie didn't need any more convincing, as she darted forward licking her pet’s folds.
You didnt end the quoatation marks, It should be after A-"

By the way i really like the story so far, if you want an editor i would be more than happy to help.

nice to see an update to this. :twilightsmile: there are a few spelling mistakes you might want to check for though. just a heads up :applejackunsure:

Yeah quite a few spelling errors, missing " here and there but other than that really good. Looking forward to where your going with it.

Got my editor on it but glad you guys like it

7634211 You are most welcome.

I really like the dynamic between AJ and Pinkie, and how Pinkie slowly brings AJ into this new world. It's nice to see how Applejack reacts to all of this and how she comes to terms with her inner thoughts, worries and desires; as well as her growing feelings for Pinkie. A lot of stories skip straight to the :heart:action:heart: and go all out right away. But this feel a lot more natural, and it's the journey that matters. It's not perfect ( no story is ) but it's a enjoyable ride. Looking forward to the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

I just love this story so much!:heart:

Yessssss..... let the terror of Pinkie rein over the farm!!! And by that I mean let kinkiepie take the reins!:pinkiehappy:

7806310 I like that kinkipie I hope to have a new chap up soon :pinkiehappy:

Loving this!:pinkiehappy:
Can't wait to see how far down the rabbit hole AJ can go?:applejackconfused:

this is a great story, but the grammar makes it extremely difficult to enjoy. i don't remember it being this bad in the earlier chapters.

7810940 my editor kinda disappeared on me still looking for a new one.

:pinkiegasp:Is this what I think it is?!

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