Just a quick note you don't have to say Pinkie Pie all the time Pinkie will do just fine also mayne try something like The party pony said, or the orange farmer stated, she wondered. Just throwing ideas at ya, because reading Applejack said, Applejack looked at Pinkie Pie it sort of got a bit annoying, sorry if that sounded a bit mean, just being honest and helping ya.
Well that was a nice start It makes me very curious to see where pinkie will take this in their future sessions. AJ is perfect for the role of pet considdering shes normally such a take charge kinda pony. It makes the whole power exchange more intense too
Applejack was always the one in control. But sometimes too much control can lead to an unhappy life. Pinkie Pie would never let her friend be unhappy. So maybe all she needed was to teach her how to let loose some of that, pent up tension. And maybe, just maybe, Pinkie will learn something about herself.
Some errors in your description: Add an o in 'to'. Add 'let' between 'to' and 'loose'. Add a comma after 'just maybe'.
I've never seen this side of Pinkie! It gives me a Fluttershy/Rarity feel, they OBVIOUSLY (Or Twilight now that I'm thinking..Sorry, back to the writing!) seem like the type for this stuff! Mostly Rarity. Can't wait for Pinkie to get intimate! You can't spell intimate without MATE!
Just a quick note you don't have to say Pinkie Pie all the time Pinkie will do just fine also mayne try something like The party pony said, or the orange farmer stated, she wondered. Just throwing ideas at ya, because reading Applejack said, Applejack looked at Pinkie Pie it sort of got a bit annoying, sorry if that sounded a bit mean, just being honest and helping ya.
7121850 I agree it just that some people hate the purple unicorn syndrome as they call it , I will keep that in mind
Well that was a nice start It makes me very curious to see where pinkie will take this in their future sessions. AJ is perfect for the role of pet considdering shes normally such a take charge kinda pony. It makes the whole power exchange more intense too
7122369 thank you and I agree when I thought of this I thought making Applejack submissive would add a challenge
Im really liking this story so far really wanting to read the next chapter soon. Good luck and please keep writing.
Some errors in your description:
Add an o in 'to'.
Add 'let' between 'to' and 'loose'.
Add a comma after 'just maybe'.
I really enjoy this please continue!
7126889 fixed thanks
I've never seen this side of Pinkie! It gives me a Fluttershy/Rarity feel, they OBVIOUSLY (Or Twilight now that I'm thinking..Sorry, back to the writing!) seem like the type for this stuff! Mostly Rarity. Can't wait for Pinkie to get intimate! You can't spell intimate without MATE!