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Eeeeeeeeehhhhhhhhhh.... I suggest treading carefully with this story. Twilight is still an alicorn, and very smart. From what I've seen of ponies from saddle Arabia they're mostly earth ponies so their knowledge of magic wouldn't be too advanced. It just seems to me there is a lot of wiggle room for twilight to escape. Like, I think it'd take more then twenty four hours for Twi to reach an entirely new country. So in the middle of the journey, the pony who bought her is gonna have a very angry alicorn to deal with. Not to mention rarity in the future.
Just a little something that is slightly bugging me with this.
Also, why didn't twilight buck rarity during the times she got close? Seriously, just knock that bitch out.
*facehoof* WTF Hubo!
I know what I gotta do.
7756881 Oh, I agree. Give Twilight an hour or two to get over the shock and she will start working on a way out. And whoever is going to be shipping Twilight to Saddle Arabia is either going to have to keep her unconscious or heavily dosed with that tea, or both. Short of Twilight being conditioned into slavery, she will eventually break free and then payback is coming.
7756937 Yeah, not to mention that if Twilight falls asleep she could get in contact with Luna, from there Luna would tell Celestia and a entire army Battalion or Unicorns, Pegasus, Earth Ponies and both Celestia and Luna would appear in Ponyville and surround Rarity's shop. Not to mention that if Rarity tried using that tea on the other girls then they would all know something is is, Applejack could sense some kind of lie, Rainbow's Loyalty could sense something is wrong with the tea, Fluttershy could overhear opal meowing and he tells her what happened to Twilight and as for Pinkie, her Pinkieness would make it so she wouldn't be effected by the tea, heck I think she is related to Discord and Chaos Magic wouldn't be effected by that tea.
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Yeah, now I am more interested in seeing Twilight escape quickly, just to see how much crap Rarity is going to land in because of her little stunt. Because what she did just now would honestly be grounds for execution for high treason. Obviously wouldn't happen in the shown but then again the show doesn't have a sex slave trade either, so obviously we are dealing with a much darker and harsher place here. Which would probably spell the noose for Rarity, unless Twilight feels like intervening herself in that outcome.
Oh, and Equestria pretty much just gained a casus belli against Saddle Arabia as well, if they so wish. There is that minor detail too
This seems vaguely familiar. Did you preview this story somewhere?
FOr the love of God, don't do the standard ending to these stories, which is to have Twi and her friends spend the rest of their lives as slaves while Celestia and the Royal Guard suspect nothing about the one remaining friend living a life of luxury forever and ever because apparently they all drank lead paint as children. For once, let this end with the piece of shit getting their comeuppance.
7757160 Nope, However, I did get the idea from a story of Kaidan's called "Slaver Rarity". The thing is, that story doesn't have Rarity in it. So I got the idea of a story actually having Rarity in it and enslaving ponies. Where better to start with her friends.
7757122 Why?
I can understand it quite thoroughly if you don't like story. That's fair enough. But if you are going to tell someone to delete something they've written or downvote it, I think you owe them an explanation. After all, if you don't tell someone how they're screwing up, the odds are good they won't change their ways.
7757149 Well, we do have the episode canon where Rainbow Dash trades off Fluttershy for a book. While not sex slave territory it is trading off a pony as property in exchange for goods.
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I can pretty much guarantee that won't happen. A couple of them could go missing easily enough, especially for a few days, even a week. Beyond that, suspicions will be raised. Rarity better have a pretty good GTFO plan if she wants to avoid the long hoof of the law.
7757223 whatever happens, if this story ends with the old cliche of Rarity skipping away, heading off to eye even more mares for future enslavement, instant dislike. I'm sorry, but that is the oldest "shock" ending in the book, and I'm so tired of it.
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Then go away and don't read it? There are literally hundreds of thousands of other fics on this site you can read. Coming into the comments just to proclaim your dislike for the subject matter isn't constructive, and honestly makes you look like a complete tool.
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Defend what? I didn't defend anything. I just pointed out that you're acting like a child. Which you have only continued to do.
7757237 I don't know. I think the cliche of having the tables turned on her and ending up in slavery herself at the end is just as tired. Would be a more satisfying ending though.
7757632 infinitely more satisfying. I mean, a cool twist or something would be nice (short of "it was all a dream" or "it's all just roleplay", because those are even more overused), but I honestly I don't have much hope for that. I'll take a satisfying comeuppance any day.
7757661 Good gods, no. I'm old enough to remember Bobby from the TV show, "Dallas". The producers of that show retconned an entire season with, "it was just a dream." No way.
7757222 Ay. If you can't handle subject matters like this, then turn off your mature switch in the settings. Only big boys and girls are allowed here.
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7757689 lol I remembered that, because they finally settled a dispute with the actor but they'd killed him off, so...
"It was all a dream"
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If it is against your morals (which morality is a petty thing anyway), why not do the smart thing? What is it, you might ask? Simply ignore and scroll down to the next fic.
Is there going to be an explanation for why Rarity suddenly is OK enslaving her friends? All these comments (other than the typical "I hope villain X dies in a fire") are asking about logical consequences to her actions, but frankly the most illogical thing is that she does it in the first place.
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The "long hoof of the law" sounds like a sexual position or toy.
7758154 If I push this story to its conclusion, yes, this will be explained.
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Interesting, horribly out of character for rarity, but still interesting
the power of friendship isn't what defeatd Chrysalis
Yeah, after all in the last chapter Chrysalis in Rarity's form left that note and everything, AJ will figure out that it's Chrysalis and not Rarity even if she hadn't wrote that note, after all AJ can tell when a pony lies to her and Chrysalis was lying to her while morphed like Rarity so they will find both Twilight and Fluttershy soon, after all Twilight is an Alicorn and once that drug wears off then she is going to blow her top and kill those buyers before heading off to kill those who bought Fluttershy too before returning home.
heh, I like this, Suri got what was coming to her. I do hope there is an ending where the changeling magic is found and Rarity is cleared tho. And I do hope the girls make it back on their own, Twilight's a capable mare by herself, thank you very much.
7773901 That was Suri, not Chrysalis, disguised as Rarity.
7773941 I see, well I got a bit confused and everything, well then I hope that Suri and Chrysalis both get captured and that the other Mane 6 and the Princesses find out that it was NOT Rarity who did this to Twilight, Fluttershy and Applejack.
id love to know how they are gone forever cause if you dont think luna or celestia will drop a star or solar flare to get them back your an idiot
7774024 You did read Chrysalis's reply...right?
I liked Fluttershy's capture a lot more; it felt more detailed. But her threats at the end were pure wut. They sounded nothing like Fluttershy, not even like her moments of strength in the show.
Oh, we suffered still. The corrections are waiting in Discord for you!
I like the villain revealed; she was the only one who could have been convincingly knowledgeable about fashion to pull that impersonation off.
The idea that framing Rarity will destroy their friendship is kind of flimsy; mostly because it's so out of character, and though they'll likely not realize Suri was involved they already know shapeshifters have it out for them.
7774146 Ya just couldn't let it be could ya. But thanks tho. I surprisingly learned quite a bit writing this.
7774145 I've always felt that in some ways Fluttershy is the strongest and most dangerous one of them all. It's poked out a few times during the show, where we've seen if Fluttershy has cause there is nothing that will stand in her way from what she feels is right.
I'm getting the feeling that Changelings are evolved in this...
So, did Suri really tell Applejack the truth about Twilight's and Fluttershy's location? If so, why? I have a feeling the truth will come out but like Chrysalis said, the damage has already been done. Equestria is going to need a new set of heroes because this team is basically dead.
Clever ending, though you had my hopes up all six of them would get some thorough training and follow-up chapters.
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It's not that she was strong, or even that she could be scary or make threats. It's that she sounded like an edgy anime OC or something.
7778673 Fair enough. I wanted Flutters to make it clear she was coming back, no matter what. I missed the mark on that.
I am sure that there are potions or spells that will force someone to tell the truth. All it would take is for Rarity to be forced to tell the truth, and Suri's whole plan would be destroyed.
7792783 Truth potions can only make you reveal what you know. Rarity has been unconscious all this time. She knows nothing...
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That's the point.
7793140 Exactly she knows that she has been kidnapped and has been out of the loop for some time. and know absolutely NOTHING of what has happened.
And sincerely... once Luna gets involved she COULD have checked the dreams of Rarity to see what was happening...
The implications of Dream Surfing are quite often underestimated
7822528 even so Rarity business would go down the drain. She wouldn't get another customer if the public finds out which they will and they friendship is broken and probably take a long time to fix if it ever does fix