When Twilight Sparkle finds her usually brash and confident friend in tears how can she deal with the surge of emotions she feels and can two such opposites build a successful relationship?
Humanised characters in a mundane setting of small town America . I still hope to have a little fun with this. Inspired by the many fine works of art out there, particularly the cover image .
Oh and of course this is TwiDash, because it is best ship :D
-Note- 28th June 2017 - I am getting on to editing the first chapters, cleaning things up and all that. Hopefully that will get me to writing an ending to this. :)
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You're doing some interesting things here. Most fics I've read often depict Twilight as someone who can't hold her liquor if her life depended on it. The fact that this is humanized warrants a watch. You have piqued my curiosity and I would like to see where this goes.
However, I would advise you to go over and fix the dialogue. When I different character speaks, put that in a different paragraph. As it is now, following the conversation is kind of tricky. Just use a fine-tooth comb on this and you'll get something awesome.
your right twidash is best ship but not good enough for me to read humanized but the ship is good so seea and goodluck with the story
edit: i dont like humans not anything with humans in it is bad
Humanized..uhmm never read but lets try, looking foward for more
I totally cant stand humanized fics... But TwiDash caught my attention and I am pleasantly surprised where this is going. Good job sir and please continue
TwiDash? I shall read.
Oh yes. More Twidash. Because Twidash is indeed best ship ever. No matter what.
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120% agreed!
Please guys if you thumb down give the man a reason
703286 I believe Cirrus Sky is a girl. But I could be mistaken.
GILDA DID WHAT?! AW, HELL NAH!
*grabs shotgun*
You mam(?), should be proud of your work. This was my first look at humanized ponies, I am enjoying it. Although, I did notice some paragraphing errors.
You put both Twi and Dash spoken lines in the same paragraph. Just to help make it read smoother, start a new paragraph for a new speaker.
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"This is filler," said Twilight.
"Hey! That was my line!" Dash protested.
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Okay, okay, okay. I know it's irrelevant, but what's the car's model?
Urgh, last time I copy over a chapter from one document over to FiM just before I go to sleep! Any and all paragraphing errors are due to the switch from my word processor to the chapter format
Glad y'all are liking it
*some moments later*
Ok, should be sorted now. I actually got this one pre-read by a friend but of course page width changes had to mess it up!
Yes, Twidash is indeed the best ship.
The story seems interesting. I'l keep an eye on this.
Thanks Bailey for the heads up! I am the same way with her though being normally against human related stories but there are the few I like and this is one of them... Of course the TwiDash is most likely the deciding factor in this lol. Why? Because TwiDash is best pony
Good fic. FlutterDash is best ship though.
I've been looking for a good Humanized story for a while now, it's not exactly something you see very much of. I've always hated HiE stories, but outright Humanized ponies seems to have more potential as far as I'm concerned.
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... when Twilight and/or Spitfire are otherwise occupied.
I like.. you may continue.
thank you for not jumping into sex... I hate when stories do that.
hmmm i like this. can't wait for more
Moar of this would be lovely, dear author.
This is a good story (and I can never get enough Twidash), but a prereader or editor would be a good thing to have for this. I'd be happy to help.
I have two words for you, dear author...
Go on.
Look like you need to work on skipping lines when some one new talks, its a little hard to read the dialogue for two people ate once
Like it, the plot is nice and the story seems real. I just wish the chapters were longer.
Love it and
I think you should use this imagem as cover
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I was thinking of this picture when I started writing the story. You are right, I shall image it up later, busy getting ready for Brickworld in Chicago this week!
(Pegasister and AFOL, Cirrus Sky
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I'm loving this story.
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Yay.
this is a nice story, I like how its flowing.
743754 I can not agree more on either account sir.
The TwiDash is official!!
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Humanized? please ...
i have to read this ...
TWIDash? well it is best ship, but I’ve seen to many going wrong.
So i think i won't re....
the Author is who????dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_dayum.png
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now i read this. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png Like and Fav given.
But i heavily recommend working on the summary and putting up that pic you wanted, if i weren't a fan of yours already i would never have started to read this.
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Thanks for that feedback, sorted it out.
I have fans, this is cool
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), no question I’m not a writer(trust me i trieddl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_hmph.png ). But at last it gives a intro into the story without telling to much.
hmm the summary is better, but still not really good. Because it can be shorted to two words and still has the same impact: 'Humanized TwiDash'.
Try it more in this direction:
"Twilight Sparkle, a not so ordinary Girl, finds one of her best friends in tears and does her best to console her. The good thing is she is very successful, but is this gonna work? Or are they on the precipice of disaster?"
My summary is still bad(oh so bad
Dude you have 25 followers, of course you have fans.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png
I really can't imagine Twilight being a beer person. Good job!
Dat cover art is amazing
All of my wants
This story is amazing
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Lunar Justice
My thoughts upon discovering this story:
First thought: HOLY HARMONY HUMANIZED TWIDASH YES
Second thought: Oh no oh no it's only got a 32/5 rating oh please oh please oh please let the downvotes just be haters oh please let this actually be good
My thoughts upon finishing this story:
IT'S GOOD! IT'S GOOD! WOOHOO!
In all seriousness, I love humanization stuff, but while there's plenty of great humanized artwork out there, the pickings are pretty slim in the fanfiction department. I've read most of the stuff I could find around here that piqued my interest, but nothing's really struck me as being what I was really looking for. Yours... admittedly isn't quite perfect either, but it's definitely the one that comes closest. Not to mention that the story's only just beginning, and I have incredibly high hopes given what I've already read.
In summary: I LOVE THIS. PLEASE SIR, I WANT SOME MORE.
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I thinks is more realistic if she can hold her liqour, thus beter story about neon coloured ponies.
YES! New chapter!
An update? Awesome.
moreeee..... MOARRRRR!!!! This fic just passed Awesome by
can't wait for the next installment 
Nice chapter. I really like how you can keep Twilight as Twilight and have her use a fuller vocabulary.
But I don't like the Idea of Twilight's family already knowing. that woud have been a great chapter, and the way you write, it would have been fantastic.
D'aww
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Another excellent chapter I can’t wait to see what happens next.
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There is, as I discovered, a difference between saying so and turning up with a girlfriend or expressing attraction to someone of the same gender. That will be for another chapter.
*squee*
very nice
Dat family.
Spike thinks he's so grown up, but he has so much to learn...
“Good. So, what nights do you want me out of the house?”
"That is entirely up to you, kid. You making yourself scarce is entirely for your own peace of mind--you can rest assured that your presence will not hinder us in the slightest."
Eventually he'll look back on this time in his life with a sense of distilled horror, much as we all do. My parents certainly didn't care if I was in the house, and it wasn't until I was 17 that I realized just how often they ended up getting frisky in the room right next to me. Or in the kitchen. Or the living room. Or in the hall closet one time, apparently. They even ninja'd into other rooms to avoid my oblivious wandering on a number of occasions.
I could totally see RD and Twi doing that, too.
Happy that this seems to be maintaining a relatively high level of quality. One of the best "humanized alt-universe" fics I've read, and I've at least glanced at most of them.