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Grand_Moff_Pony


Author & Pre-reader; Trance/EDM junkie; Trekkie; Chief Apprentice in Loyal's House of Fanfic

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Untold luxury and wealth. A place in high society. A life full of the finer things. All this and more await Fleur, but at what cost?

Now, Fleur must decide: Is love worth nothing, or is it a secret worthy of sacrifice? Can she be the mare she is and the mare she has to be?

A cipher, after all, can be anything— Or nothing at all.


Edited/Preread by Xepher, Winston, Noble Thought, and Jade Ring
Featured by The Royal Canterlot Library, EQD, The Royal Guard, & The Pleasant Commentator-Review Group
Cover art commissioned from Raikoh-illust

With a live reading by ABagOVicodin!
Also read by CrunchyMonkey!

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 99 )

This was very powerful, very beautiful and extremely well done! I was tearing up at the end and truly hoping she would run with him. This was filled with passion and is one of the best short stories I've read lately. Bravo!!

6321684 Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. :pinkiehappy:

[romance] + only one character tag?

Self-love?

6330180 An oversight on my part. I had hesitated to use that other tag at first, but your question tells me I should have second guessed myself there. It's been fixed. :)

By the way, I've been trying to give this story an up vote but it won't respond. What's up?

6330247 It's Fimfic's new voting screen. It won't let anyone up/down vote a story until it hits 15 or more views. (current view counter is a bit skewed, I think)

6330247 Looks like voting is available now, if the site is showing me an accurate picture now.

I was struck by the sacrifice of her memories, and what it meant to give up the mementos of a love that couldn't be.

A cautionary tale to all with a romantic heart: Attempting to fulfill a dream may shatter it instead, and bring heartache undreamt of.

I wonder what he will do with the pouch of mementos. It almost seemed a cruel thing to send him away with, he with all of her memories of him, she with nothing of his but a kiss.

Thanks. Still not taking my vote but will keep trying.

Got it! Vote for you!

Cute, but sad, and very well written...

6330674 Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

Beautifully written! Hell, I wish I could write as well. If this doesn't get featured, it'd be a shame.

6330740 Gosh, thanks so much!

And I'm hoping for that feature box! *prays to Celestia/Cthulu/anything* xD

All I can ask is to spread the word to folks you think might enjoy it as well. :)

Awh :fluttershysad:
Y U brake my hart liek dis?

Very nice though. I'm glad to have read something of yours again. It's been too long.

What a good couple those two are.

6330802 Thanks! Glad you liked it! :twilightsmile:

6330820 If only life had dealt them a better hand. ;)

...I'm not really sure how fitting this may or may not be, but the very first thing I thought of when I finished reading was the opening lyrics to Bon Jovi's "You Give Love A Bad Name":

Shot through the heart, and you're to blame!

6330873 Lol. Well, I'll take Bon Jovi over Creed lyrics any day. ;)

I'm glad you liked it! :)

6330944 Vielen Dank! :)

Really, I'm glad you liked it so much - especially since it's a bit outside of your 'go to story' zone! :)

I must wonder--how old is Fleur here that Princess Luna was at her first Gala? And when does this take place?

6331443 I'll admit, I created this in a bit of a vacuum, relative to the shoe's ongoing timeline. So, I can't say, 'well, this is before/after season x'. As for Fleur, she's 18 (prob. close to 19) here, as she's just about finished what would have otherwise been her senior year of high school.

As for the gala, I'd imagine that her upper class station would have afforded her a chance to attend the gala at a younger age (likely via family invitation) than perhaps many ponies, so she likely went when she was younger, perhaps 13-14 or so (freshman year in school terms)

Thanks!

No! Why did she sent him away??? Why didn't she flee with him??? They could have gone to the other end of the world!! :raritycry:
But it's still a beautifull story. I'm just somepony who loves Happy Ends! :twilightsmile:

6330747 WHY CTHULHU! He'll claim it's his own story. Self Serving jack ass calamari bitch.

6331795
So then how old was she when she was throwing herself over Fancy Pants, who's like 50? :applejackconfused:

Hey, I'm Gwen from The Acorn cafe.

Aaannnddd sold! To the guy with long ears!

6333013 and the lovely suede blazer. xD

Every. Single. Time.

I'unno how you do it, GMP, but you manage to hit a chord with every story you write.

Kudos, man. Serious kudos.

6334584 Aw, thanks! I'm glad you liked it! :twilightblush:

I don't always hit a home run, but I do try and make each thing enjoyable at least. ;)

Wow, that was a good read. Very dark. I really don't have much else to say.
Keep up the great work!
~Melly~

6343850 Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it! :twilightsmile:

6343966
You're very welcome! Have a like and a favorite!
~Melly~

This was really good. I wrote a review for it here if you'd like to read it.

Gotta say, it was tough to poke holes in this.

6355059 Thanks for the fave as well as the review! :)

Drat, I got the tails side of the coin! xD Seriously though, I appreciate your feedback, and I'm glad you liked the story overall!

Hard to pull this story off, or at least, to go through with it.
Could use your help on my own fics ;)

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Ahh, noble tragedy. :D And I do love the buildup of her regimented life as well. Good stuff!

6374871 Thank you very much! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

This story was extremely well made. Every single detail was written in a way to affect the viewer in a way to keep his attention and tension. You got so many well organised emotions in such a small fic. I am she that anyone who read this is affected by it and deeply impressed. Good job. This deserved to be placed on EqD.

Reminds me of Romeo and Juliet.

What you have written here is, at its heart, the oldest story in the book. The conflict between love and society is as old as society itself. Yet, what you managed to do with your ending, and the way you built the narrative with detail... I love it. You have the heart of a writer. Your recurring themes of codes and strings were masterfully woven together, and kept me on my toes throughout.

What struck me as even more beautiful was the fact that I knew the ending beforehand, as anyone who has paid close enough attention to cannon might be able to say the same. Even so, that only seemed to make the tension building through the singular scene more heartbreaking and visceral. Well done, GMP. Well done.

Please picture a 'sow clap' .gif here, if you would.

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