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I proved my namesake in a duel of honour. The crayon never stood a chance.

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This story contains 100% saturated sugar. Exposure may induce diabetes.


Once upon a time there were three filly sisters. They were a unicorn, a thestral and a changeling, but that was perfectly normal. They had also adopted a human for a father, which they thought was awesomely normal. Their lives seemed perfect, but their father felt there might be room for more; A mother's touch, perhaps? Enter the slightly accidental but otherwise perfect nannies, Luna, Cadence and Celestia...uh...Dark Side, Sweet Heart and Sunrise Splendour. Though the question remains; Will these three successfully infiltrate their little family and achieve their top secret mission bring the much-needed maternal touch, or will they end up a victim to the fillies' devious matchmaking schemes?

Well, it would have helped if the three nannies didn't lose their memories on their first day, for a start.


Written to the sound of BlackGryphon's Cutie Mark Crusader Theme Are We There Yet and Taking Off

Cover Art: I swear this began as me doodling a bowl of sugar.

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 168 )

As soon as I saw the influence of Aria in this story, I knew that I had to fave and like this. I'm a sucker for that series.

This is the bat-stest thing I've read all day

How did you make your cover art from a bowl of sugar?

My cuteness meter just overloaded from the sheer cuteness those three give off, not to mention my curiosity of what the three alicorns are speaking about.
*boom!* Sigh.:facehoof: And it just broke, it's going to take me weeks to fix that up.

After I finished recovering from my sugar-induced cardiac arrest, I found that there's one thing I'm confused about: are Tia, Lulu, and Cadie the fillies or the guests?

4683597 Thanks for the comment! 'Tia' is the fanon nickname for Celestia and 'Lulu' is Luna's. It was implied that the three little fillies were named after 3 of the Alicorn princesses, Celestia, Luna and Cadence. However, for convenience, they've been using nicknames. 'Cadie' isn't a common nickname for Cadence, which is why Celestia chose to use it on Cadence as a little joke of sorts at the end.

The guests who visited were Celestia and her human companion. The two other 'unicorns' outside were Luna and Cadence. They were all referred to as 'Unicorns' as their wings were obscured by their clothes. Why clothes? Probably to fit in as they're on Earth after all.


4682882 Thanks for your comment! Mission accomplished. My job here is done. :pinkiehappy:


4682692 Thanks for the comment. I was so bored that morning I began doodling the stuff on the breakfast table in front of me including a bowl of sugar on my tablet. Then my cousin knocked it over and I complained at how it's ruined the composition. One solidified block of sugar resembled a pony. Things spiraled out of control from there.


4682631 Thank you for the comment. You are becoming one with the bat puns already.


4682170 Thank you for the comment. You, sir, are a person of great tastes. I approve.

4683718 This is a complement. You're a bloody natural with stories.

4683718
So the correct answer is both, but the fillies are just named after the princesses, thanks for clearing that up

Curious to see how they adopted their daddy. Cute story.

.... dang, this is a feel happy and fluffy fic if ever I've seen one. So are the Princesses no longer Alicorns??? I can't wait to learn how our three adorable little fillies met their daddy and became a family.

Oh, it's titles like these that support the Oxford Comma, my friend.

Another good chapter and I might follow. This is really good, I loved it!

Unnng the cuteness, it hurts so much yet I want to see more >3< . My tombstone shall read , died of cuteness overload and diabetes. But really awesome pilot chapter!

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gr...



DDAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!

i am soooo confused why is cadnce, luna, and tia in it when its 3 totally diff fillya?

Computing Cute factor........ computing impossible, Cute Factor Exceeds Calculable Range :twilightsmile:

4690479
I think that he named the three after the princesses.

cute. :twilightsmile:

4690545 yup and omg the diabetes oozes from those 3. Hooray for sugar rush overload!

Wonder why he name them after the three princess? And on a whole other note, my cute meter is stable, barely.

Silver Octave 1997-2014
Death by diabetes

I only came back to the grave to tell you I love this. TIME TO STALK YOU!:heart:

I swear my cuteness shield Is gonna malfunction and kill me with cuteness overload. I await more while my shield is repaired.

4690479 Read the first chapter, friend. They're named after the princesses, that's all.

God this is too adorable for words.

So I went to the doctors after I read this I have cutabetes I wonder how I got them

I think thoughts of this chapter are going to help keep a smile on my face all day long:pinkiehappy: So adorable.

4689760 Quick get the insulin!! He's going into diabetic shock!!

4689778 WE got another!!! its an epidemic!!

*Reads the fic* Oh, i see why now.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

What the hell did you do to your title? People like you are why the Oxford Comma should be non-negotiable. This is no longer a matter of "mere style", this is a matter of "you done fucked up", OP.

FIX IT.

... I think my heart has exploded.

Oh, the daws and bat puns, I like this!

DAAAAAWWWWW!!!!
Out of all the cute stories that I've read on this site (which is quite a few mind you), yours is the one that is going to give me diabetes. Congratulations on that, amigo!

Daaawwww!!:twilightsmile::twilightsmile: This story is soooooo cute!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::yay::yay:

So the three puffs of pure diabetes and cuteness and snuggles are young Celestia, Luna, and Cadence, but different species, or are they just named that?

This is a very bat-tastic story you got here.

I don't think I will ever be able to like it enough.

Aw, this is adorable! :rainbowkiss:
I found it interesting that Tia was in a wheelchair. There should be more disabled ponies in MLP fanfics.

I'm amused that the three little fillies are basically OC's with names based on the fan-nicks of Celestia, Luna, and Cadance. I'm also amused on you never actually mentioning the three's status as alicorns. You keep them unicorns in the perspective of the story. Maybe they're half disguised?

4683731 Many thanks. I wouldn't say I'm a 'natural' at storytelling. It's more like comedy and adorable are all I'm good at if you look at my repertoire. :twilightsheepish:


4684156 Many thanks. Me too!


4685231 Many thanks. I'm curious too, actually. :twilightsheepish:


4685256 Many thanks for that. Happy and fluffy's exactly what I was going for. :pinkiehappy: The alicorn princesses are still alicorns. They are only 'unicorns' from the narrative's perspective. I'm experimenting with perspective third person narrative as opposed to factual third person. Perspective third person only reports what's apparent, in this case the three alicorns were wearing clothes that obscure their wings, thus to an outsider's perspective they are 'unicorns'.

And yeah, I can't wait to find out how they became a family too. :twilightsmile:


4688213 Unfortunately I'm so ignorant I wouldn't know what that is if it hit me on the head with a crowbar. :pinkiesad2: English isn't my first language unfortunately and I never studied English literature. :twilightsheepish:


4688651 Many thanks. :twilightsmile:


4689558 It's alright. My next objective is to produce sugar strong enough to raise the dead. :pinkiehappy: Just kidding, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:


4689760 :rainbowderp:


4689778 :pinkiegasp:


4690318 I agree. :pinkiehappy:


4690479 As I explained, their human father decided to name them after the tree alicorn princesses. Probably because he picked up the names in a book somewhere and decided they'd make good names for the fillies.


4690483 I wonder what the unit of measure for cute would be? It'd probably be something like 'Fluttershies' or Fs for short. Or Woonas.


4690545 Got it in one. :raritywink:


4690724 Weapons of Mass Diabetes. :pinkiehappy:


4690798 Probably something worth exploring in the future.


4690802 No! Don't go into the light! Come back! I've got more sugar for you! :twilightsheepish:


4691027 Your shield is strong, young one. :trollestia:


4691146 Pretty much, yes. Many thanks. :twilightsmile:


4691627 It wasn't me! :rainbowderp:


4691901 Glad to hear I've put a smile on someone's face. You've put one on mine now. Many thanks, friend. :pinkiehappy:


4692191 They shall forever remember this as....Fiction Zero. :rainbowlaugh:


4692306 As I said above, I wouldn't know what that is if it hit me on the head with a crowbar. I'm too ignorant, though my working excuse is English isn't my first language. :pinkiesad2:


4692377 Here, have a replacement. :heart: :twilightsmile:


4692379 Me too. :twilightsmile:


4692419 Many thanks. What other stories have you read? I'm on the lookout for stories like that myself.


4692657 Many thanks. Mission accomplished. :twilightsmile:


4692749 They were only named after the princesses. :twilightsmile: Also, pure diabetes? :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:


4692759 'Bat-tastic'? That's a new one. *Takes notes* :twilightsheepish: Many thanks. :twilightsmile:


4693272 Many thanks. I think disability is an interesting theme to explore, one not many attempt, even fewer succeed at correctly portraying. And that's understandable as it's not an easily relatable human experience. I recently broke my leg and I've been living with crutches for 2 weeks and I've only just started to appreciate the frustration and helplessness. I'm not about to say I understand disability entirely just yet as I've only had a fraction of the full experience. But what I've experienced thus far alone has been quite...something.

I recall one pony in a wheelchair in that episode 'Trade Ya'. Pony wheelchairs are quite different from ours, being more like wheel replacements for their hind legs. That's sort of what I envisioned for Tia.


4693523 MEDIC. :fluttershbad:


4694496 They are half-disguised as you say with their wings hidden by their clothes. So from the perspective of the narrative they were simply 'unicorns'.

4695337
Cuteness Diabetes. Cutebetes. Does this to you.
i.imgur.com/IzqUznE.gif

4695337
It is still wrong, if I assume that someone is both a changeling and a bat pony. It should be written as thus:

A Unicorn, a Changeling and a Batpony, and the Baker.

4695337 yus! I have been useful!

4695337
for the life of me, I can't remember at the moment. I'll get back to you on that and you are welcome!

4695337 Thank you. Too bad I'll be contracting "D'aww'ibeetus" from this story soon...

4695337 I wub this story.

Another! -Thor, 2000 and something.
Please sir, may I have some more? -Whatshisface the Orphan, some time a long time ago.
:twilightoops:

U almost ready 2 put up another chapter? :duck:

Clever. Though unsurprisingly I'm still immune to any amount of cute people have thrown at me. Let's see this next chapter then...

Very interesting. Might as well see where this goes.

This is so sweet it gave me a cavity just by thinking about it.

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