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From the state of Ohio. I am 23 and a certified S.C.U.B.A Diver. I enjoy writing poetry and have intentions only to give support to writers and hope they will support me

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After an injury at work sends you to the hospital, your loving mare Rainbow Dash decides to pay you a visit.

Please Note That This Story Is Cute For The Sake Of Cute.
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The feels I got from reading that........this story is awesome
It also helps that red is my favorite character :)

This was wonderful something to help me sleep better since I haven't slept well in two days

Oh my... I just, I just can't fathom the feels. Oh it hurts my heart in a good way. :heart:

This is a sweet and heartwarming. Wonderful job.
I'm looking forward to seeing what else you write.

4576177 I actually worked on this off and on through the course of a year. It may have taken awhile, but it was well worth it.

Goddammit, man. Right in the feels.

Within half a second of seeing the title and the cover art I dawwed hard, not even joking. Commencing reading now!

ah my gawd its so romantic and adorable. definitely love when dash is written like this. i never get tired of these stories :pinkiesmile:

glad to see jay supported you! would love to see more of this, possibly longer?

Post-reading:

Well, I'm a pure sucker for anything humanxRD. This was so far up my alley that i'm pretty sure that alley crossed pluto's orbit. If there is one thing the world needs its more Dashlove and you sir have done your part tremendously well. I salute you my brother, may you cuddle Rainbow in your sleep.

4578718 :twilightblush: Thanks. Personally I kinda have a thing for Dash. I just took what my heart felt and put it into words.

very nice, I love second person romance stories, especially with Dash, Applejack or Twilight. :rainbowkiss:
I hope to see more :twilightsmile:

this is very very nice, i love it. After three or four till five romance fanfics with Rainbow Dash, i start to think the olny thing Das was able to do is having sex and well make out every night. I don´t know why, even if she is like Rainbow is, i don´t saw any reason to let her be a sex hungry pony.
It´s nice to see an other side form Rainbow Dash.:heart::heart::heart:

Hmm... While the story is sweet and all, Rainbow didn't really seem in-character. She was actually behaving more like Rarity than anyone else... Balling over a broken leg, being incredibly "sappy" without any character development. I would expect her to give Anon a tongue-lashing first before sobbing like a filly.

4581392 :rainbowlaugh: At least you're honest.:pinkiesmile: it was only meant to be cute.

Nice! Heartwarming indeed. You can consider your mission accomplished.

Rainbow dash seemed a tad bit out of character but I liked this. Overall it was great.

Verdict: *Fuzzy Feeling Intensify*

I just saw a movie about a guy who could see ghosts
Long story short at the end of said movie he lives happily ever after with his girlfriend, cute scenes of them living together for months it seems and spending time together
Only for him to figure out that all this time she's been dead and he was fooling himself.
So when I read

You are completely baffled as to why she did not ask why Rainbow was in your hospital bed.

and

It’s almost as if--

I started thinking "what if dash died in the accident? And he can see her or he's imagining her?"
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Now that I've gotten that out of the way, this story was good and had a healthy dose of cuteness :twilightsmile:

4579653 Well, your heart is awesome. It made MY heart feel good.

Sir, for a first story, I have to say not bad.

And that's all I have to say...bye bye.:derpytongue2:

now if you were to put a strong storyline into it; depicting the before and after injury, you would have a gripping story. but this in itself is pretty good.:pinkiehappy:

*Straightens robes as he is crying* T-that... that was absolutely beautiful! I loved it so much I read it twice!

*An hour later after recovering from his over-emotional state* It was very good dear sir. But.... The one thing I don't like is that Twilight's letter should be in Italics or bold print, to show it is a letter.

Other then that, thank you for making my day with such cuteness and such love.

4582740 :rainbowlaugh: She is not dead, I will tell you that much.

this is REALLY GOOD LOVE IT instant fave

Second person? I have a question for you, OP.

Are you retarded?

This is one massive case of D'AAAAAWWWWWW:heart::heart:

its cool, i just dont like 2nd person:fluttershysad:

4587721 I prefer to write in 2nd person because it presents more of a challenge to me. It took me about a year to write this. But I finally wrote something in second person that is adorable and heartwarming.

4587740 suuuuuuuure. if you can make something like this in 1st or 3rd person soarindash, then i will be soooooooooooooooooo happy.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

4587749 Sorry to say I probably won't be doing that. Though I may do it if I need to do some practice writing.:applejackunsure:

So cute, I may have a heart attack.

Good stuff. :twilightsmile:

4587993 This Fic comes with a 100% chance of DAW and a 100% chance of cuteness induced heart attacks:rainbowwild:

for added feeslys listen to this while reading

Do it filly

You need to show more and tell less, but otherwise very good! :yay:

the d'awwwww is strong with this one
:heart::rainbowkiss:

Loving Dash is best Dash.

Comment posted by minez deleted Jun 24th, 2014
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