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bahatumay


Simultaneously able to type 94 wpm and still take three years to finish a story. If you're feeling generous, throw a ko-fi at me.

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Packing up your entire life and moving to Ponyville? Not a problem. Starting your business from scratch (again)? Piece of cake. Getting others to accept your lifestyle? Filly, please. Give me a real challenge.
Getting ready for a wedding? ...Come on. This is Ponyville. Fifty bits says you can't even get past the invitations without something going wrong.

Chapters (5)
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Oh Bon Bon, you really should have looked at those wedding invitations first, I just know it. :rainbowlaugh:

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You'd never make it in my stories. You're too genre savvy. :ajsmug:

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Nah, I'd just hang out with Pinkie and have a good chuckle at all the ponies going hilariously nuts. :pinkiehappy:

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:rainbowderp:My thought exactly. The comedy response must be strong on this one.:trollestia:

What the hay, bring on chapter 2, I need a laugh and this style of comedy fills the trough.

I liked it, have a :eeyup: for good measure.

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Thanks! Does tomorrow sound good? Tomorrow sounds good. Chapter two tomorrow.

Raspberries in all the right places :rainbowwild:.

This really good! I can't wait for the next chapter :pinkiehappy: :twilightsmile:

Oh I cannot wait to see how they fucked up the Invitations. Bonnie, Bonnie, open them first. You fool!

They're lewd, aren't they?

Oh, this is going to be good. My only guess is that the invitations they sent didn't have a picture of the two of them in loving embrace, but in SM gear or lingerie. Definitely tracking this one, good sir.

By the way, I know it's bad form to ask, but... they're not planning on adopting, are they? Because I hear that can make for some awkward moments, especially when other species are involved :twilightblush:.

Im just kiddin'. Really like these two characters as a couple and your take on it looks funny and still fresh with the homophobia angle, though not in a way that detracts from the comedy (yet?).

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You know it!

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I actually finished this story before uploading it, so chapter two will be here soon!

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No adoptions this round. This story is going to end at the reception. As much as I like awkward situations, I don't think I know enough about parenting and adopting to make it sound believable. :unsuresweetie:
Don't worry. In this story, the homophobia angle is more backstory than a plot point. No one is going to egg their house in Ponyville. :twilightsmile:

“That's not a term I would have used," Rarity said slowly. "'Daring', maybe. Perhaps 'risky'.” Rarity looked up at Lyra. “I know you said you would happily use the outfits I made, and often; but I didn't think you meant like that!”

The word you're looking for is "risque."

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Heh... Looks like I dun goof'd. Fixed.

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AHAHAHAHAHA! :rainbowlaugh:

That would make for a pretty interesting wedding. :pinkiehappy:

I lost it at the authors note :rainbowlaugh:
That was hilarious! Time to read chapter 2! :twilightsmile:

Oh this keeps getting better and better :rainbowlaugh:
Can't wait for the next chapter... And Lyra's inevitable death :rainbowwild:

I'd go to that wedding...

Two things:
1) this is a bit predictable.
2) that doesn't matter one bit, because this is only the start and how things turn out from here is where it'll get really interesting.

So it's good stuff. Continue :twilightsmile:.

I can only imagine how Bon Bon will react when she finds out XD

Lyra's going to spend a LOT of time on the couch after that.

Oh ... flank-plugs, at least they didn't see those.:facehoof:

Oh Lyra, you have some 'splaning to do ... :rainbowlaugh:

Lyra cocked her head. “I thought they were sweet,” she said. Just a nice, tender moment between the two. Lyra leaned against Bon Bon, both looking out against a beautiful sunset. It had even appeased the caustic Bon Bon. She had never before, nor since, heard such a “d'aww".

I wonder what the theme was meant to be, leaning, sunsets, dressing like Lyra and Bon Bon? Mysterious.

I do feel sorry for that camera guy... taking the picture of two crazy mares then having another mare, I'm going to assume threaten, him within a couple days... but he insulted Rarity's dresses so I guess he got off easy.

Oh dear. Lyra, you dun goofed.

I like the insight into their personalities and backgrounds here. It brings them to life quite nicely.

I'm pleasantly surprised at the depth in this situational comedy. I have to admit, I did not see this coming. And Rarity, goodness gracious me, that's a nice portrayal of Rarity. Very in character, and very likeable. Too many fic writers can't seem to use her properly.

The only nitpick I have is the way the flashbacks are written. It's a flashback in a flashback, and there's no visual cue for how the perspective shifts. Bon Bon is narrating the whole thing, yet the text then shifts to how it actually happened, which is a bit jarring. Other than that, great stuff all around :raritywink:.

Ooh. Lyra, you bucked up.

Dash must be really keen on keeping her Queen of Ponyville Pranking title if she agreed to take the rap for a mere two hours off of a future fashion event. :derpytongue2:

Pinkie, of course, would do it just for the fun of knocking on half the doors in town.

Also: I can't read the words "their tails entwined" without thinking of a certain song about the lamentations of straight stallions. :raritywink:

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I think it was more of a, "What? You want me to take the blame for simultaneously pranking the entire town? That's ridicul- ...Actually, that's not too bad. All the credit, none of the work, and I'm helping out a friend... Ok then."
Yes, Pinkie would. It probably took some convincing to get her to not sing to everyone.
And I am more than surprised that you should reference my song. I feel all fuzzy inside now. :twilightsmile:

Well, this story is just full of surprises. I honestly hadn't thought of this sort of fix. It fits with the theme of the show, and as you point out it is something Rainbow would do, being the Element of Loyalty and all. If this were a genuine prank, it'd be a legendary one, and taking the blame/credit for it really isn't all that bad.

Kudos to you, sir, I did not see this one coming :twilightsmile:.

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Thank you! I was afraid I was getting too predictable...

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That was great. One question though, what's up with the numbers throughout. It kinda reminds me of friendship is witchcraft, but I'm at a loss here. Mind helpin' me out?

The only thing that I can imagine Rarity threating him with is some kind of counter gossip.

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The "author's notes" up top is a link to a gdoc that has some things that I thought were relevant or amusing, and the numbers refer to that.
I'm glad you're liking it!

Added to Twilight's Library on a contributor recommendation.

I'm always up for some LyraBon and I love your playful comedy style here. :pinkiehappy:

Excellent fic, that was a very enjoyable read, and your writing is quite stellar.

I'd love to see more from you.

Maybe, a year down the line, Lyra and Bonbon decide they want to adopt? :twilightsmile:

... Wow... Lyra's mother sucks.

Freakin hilarious, yet touching story. I would love to see some more Lyra & Bon Bon stuff.

Well, it's a nice little epilogue. The scene's described well enough to get to feel the emotions of the pair, and the bit with the mother is... believable. She doesn't change her ways, but she at least sets the priorities on her daughter's happiness.

And the bit at the end... yeah, hope their walls are sound-proofed.

As for a sequel, I wouldn't mind seeing it. The thing I'm most worried about is what you'd write about. A lot of fics deal with Lyra and Bon Bon as a couple (Bon Bon goes to Anger Management, that Bible cruise thing and my own Changeling Blood come to mind) but their relationship is only ever part of the story. If you made a sequel, I'd expect it to be quite different from this story and have something to expand upon. Again, adoption comes to mind (please don't use a changeling, that way leads to madness :facehoof:), or possibly some conflict around the law, maybe?

Yeah, I'm leaning towards an adoption story. That lets you expand on the relationship, add in some more dynamic if you do add a child, and possible protests surrounding the rights of the child. But you'd have to pick something special, I suppose, like a griffon or a pegasus. Or a pony with some really noticeable quirk or defect. Yeah, I'm going to stop now before my sadist urges take over.

Good epilogue, good story. It's light, funny and heartwarming, in all the right ratios.

I'm somewhat surprised at how often adoption is coming up. I've said elsewhere that it prolly won't happen, mainly because while I believe it is something truly special (dare I say 'sacred'?), I don't think I know enough about how it works logistically to make it believable.
That being said... it's sounding more and more tempting...

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:twilightsmile:

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What can I say? They're a classic duo. Thanks!

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There's a good chance of it happening.

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Yeah... if there is a sequel, she's not coming back. I just wanted to give the two a 'all's well that ends well' ending.

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Thank you!

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Thanks!
Soundproofed room, no. But there is a soundproofing bubble spell. It requires a fair amount of concentration, though, so as you can imagine it's a bit... hit and miss, we'll say. :twilightblush:
If I continued this world, I think I'd keep to a theme of misunderstandings and miscommunications, maybe before and after the wedding. I would hate for it to be a rehash of the same thing, though; and I think that's what you're advising.
A pegasus could be cute...
oh gosh just came up with the idea of adopting abused filly grows up she's quiet and withdrawn robber comes in kills the intruder and they're not sure how to respond or how to treat her now what did you do to me

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You're welcome. Adoption or not, I'll be sure to read any sequel to this. :twilightsmile:

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Yeah, your idea of miscommunication's better, actually. Adoption, while a good option, is too obvious, and it wouldn't feel like a proper sequel to this story, just another Lyra/Bon Bon fic. I'm sure a little brainstorming will yield you a good idea for it.

Keep up the good work!

This was adorable. I loved the situation and how cleverly it worked out. And Lyra and her mom was brilliant. More please more.:pinkiehappy:

no adoption sory but thers 2 much of that maby some thing along the lines of "lyras gift and bon bons curse" per hapse but yhea give us more!!!!!

This was a hysterical story. I loved it.:pinkiehappy:

Kind of reminds me of the "nip slip" story in Seinfeld.

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