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Simultaneously able to type 94 wpm and still take three years to finish a story. If you're feeling generous, throw a ko-fi at me.

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...big mares get things like counterpoint, discordant notes, anti-parallel movement, and accidentals everywhere.
They also have to play harder music, but that's not what this story is about. This story is about an introverted DJ with an extreme alter-ego who is looking to catch the eye of a famous cellist, a lyrist trying to win over a candy maker at the mall, and something about how love is never easy or straight-forward.

Partially inspired by this story.

Chapters (26)
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Comments ( 173 )

Intriguing! The use of marefriend and coltfriend in a human setting is a tad odd, unless I missed an anthro tag somewhere...

Ooh, I like it! Tracking for now. Keep up the good work!

Gotta read this.. But I like the look of it! It seems like a casual Scratchtavia story similar to University Days with the addition of Lyra and Bonbon. I kinda don't like sex storys Exept for scratchtavia... Again. Mainly cause your gonna run out of storys sometime.

9/10 for looks.
Full Review when completed.


Tracking..

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It did briefly pass through an anthro incarnation, but I finally decided to leave them to show that the characters weren't straight human.
and it totally isn't to try and give some legitimacy to the fact that I'm basically writing a story of OCs nope not at all

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Well, sit tight; this one is going to push 40,000 words by the time I'm done.

5441829 yeah, I've read university days. I'm prepared.

Just waiting for some chapters on one of Butt Stallions Fics.

Good day.

A story of one of may favourite ships, inspired by one of my favourite stories within that ship! That happens to feature an introverted Vinyl Scratch, with an extroverted alter-ego!:pinkiegasp:

Sign me up!:pinkiehappy:

Awaiting more.

Tag says "Human", but terms like "stallion" and "marefriend" are used in-story.
Gespy is confuzzled.

Bretty good. Hope this isn't dead.

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Not dead. Just getting started!
But I kindof self-edit and while rereading I kindof sortof discovered a rather sizable plot hole and so I needed to change a few things and get a couple more scenes written but I should get another chapter up tonight or tomorrow.

Hurrah for Protocol Four!

And then she played.

Weak writing right there. Needs more details, more telling.

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My official stance is, it was too glorious to put into words, so all we had was Vinyl's reaction. dl.dropbox.com/u/21167245/FiMFiction/Emoticons/misc_Octy_chair.png
...but I'll see if I can't make take two a little better. :unsuresweetie:

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Tag says "Human", but terms like "stallion" and "marefriend" are used in-story.
Gespy is confuzzled

and he is not alone

Dang it, Vinyl! You'd better step up your game.

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Those are there because although it is humanized characters, they're not straight human (:trollestia:) and there is magic and wings and such.
And it's totally not because those terms make the story look like it fits better in the pony universe even though it's basically a story of OCs.

Holding up up and squinting with one eye, she only half-heartedly looked through the front pages before rolling over onto her back and looking for the comics.

Holding them up and squinting with one eye, she only half-heartedly looked through the front pages before rolling over onto her back and looking for the comics.

I don't like how it says humans but you use pony terms. So far it doesn't seem to address if they have pony bodies as well, or at least parts, but if it is mostly human with magic and abilities, then you shouldn't use pony terms. It confuses me and makes me almost not want to read it.

I'll keep reading, and keep an eye on it, but unless there is more clarification, I can't like nor favorite this story. Even if you say they are anthro and change the tag, then I don't mind. Anthro (to me) means that you can use the pony terms all you like, while keeping hands, feet, uprightness and whatnot. Maybe I'm wrong, but it just distracts me because I can't 'see' what they look like. I don't know if they are human-based or pony-based and the terms are not helping.

I did see you responded to others who had a similar issue, but since it's crossed out and tiny, I can't read it. I don't mean to overly whine or complain, but this could be really good in my opinion if it was just defined a little more, one way or another. Hopefully you update soon. Please don't take this comment the wrong way, I'm just trying to get some kind of clarification since I get confused easily.

Yeah!! An update!!

Just a little edit note:

nearly tumbled down the step down, but

should be:

nearly tumbled down the steps, but

Also: "I'm a regular mare, Vinyl" mare? thought they were human? but I will reread in case I missed something.

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Thought I'd caught that one... Fix'd, thanks.
Yeah... they're humanized; but maintain their magic and flight so I used pony words (kindof out of habit, really). But many people have commented on this; I might end up changing them back.

5871983 np! Can't wait for more chapters!

I know who you're talking about, and he kindof deserved it

I know who you're talking about, and he kind of deserved it

She kindof liked being a bit elevated and able to see what was going on around her.

She kind of liked being a bit elevated and able to see what was going on around her.

This story was very cute. The fic had a very small amount of errors, Good storyline, and the characters all have well developed personalities.
TIER 4. Good job!
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/415809/tiered-bookshelves

You use pony terms, even called her a unicorn mare, but it's set in the human world. Is it supposed to be confusing like that or is it just thought-vinyl mixing up words?

You tease, you! But , aww poor Lyra.... Think maybe she went too fast for the kiss? Should've waited a couple more dates? :unsuresweetie:

good chapter. I like you user name poet.

I don't know why I'm the only one who commented on this, it's really good!
Keep on writing! I can see this story going a long way! :pinkiesmile:

After desert, Vinyl may have a hard time walking home.... :trollestia: Yes, girls can have a HARD time too.

Can't wait to read when Vinyl takes Octavia to a night club for her first time/DJ-Pon3 show.

Shaving? But what if Octavia likes hair? :raritywink: :rainbowlaugh:

Vinyl giving good advice...on love?

Minor sign of the apocalypse there I think :moustache:

Good chapter!

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I am sure they could come to an… understanding. :raritywink:

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She's going to hold off on that for now. Don't want to scare her off too quickly. :scootangel:

5905433 Of course. It's just very entertaining to read about. That and when Octavia brings Vinyl to an upper-class event. Keep up the good work!

Nice to see one of the few still intersting Vinyl-Tavi's is still updating, keep up the good work.

And I can't wait for Octavia to get curious enough to see what Vinyl does for a living, the fact that Vinyl goes great deals to hide it is going to make the reveal all the more amusing.

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There you go! Have lots of laughs!

The only flaw I found was

When she was out of sight of the sweet ship

Other than that, keep it up because I'm loving this :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks! Hope it stays interesting.
And 'amusing' isn't quite the word I had in mind... :scootangel:

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It makes sense in her head; she just blows it whenever she tries it. :unsuresweetie:

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:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
>schnitzel
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Gah... fixed. Thanks.

5910563 Np. Keep up the great work!

Well, she said no in kindof a big way, and…

Well, she said no in kind of a big way, and…

That's a REALLY good Vinyl pic you got there.

That escalated nicely! :rainbowwild:
Just a fantasy? :fluttershysad:
Yay, birthday and date! :pinkiehappy:
Octy... Noooo.... :fluttercry:
Poor Vinyl. :raritycry:

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Be sure to click the source link, she's drawn a few more ponies like this. But her Vinyl is my favorite.

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Fantasy… for now. :raritywink:

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