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Rainbow FlutterDash

"I was just thinking, maybe I was wrong before. Who cares if the stars are dead? As long as we can see them they're real to us. Right?" "Right." - Rachel Amber and Chloe Price.


Lyra and Bon-Bon have been dating for awhile now, but because they are fillyfoolers, they've decided to keep it secret - at least for now. However, when Lyra's friend slips up and tells Pinkie that it's their anniversary, Pinkie thinks she means "Best Friends Anniversary" and decides to throw a... PARTY! :pinkiehappy:

Will there romance stay secret under the eyes of anypony with un-Pinkie-ish logic?

POV Characters:
Lyra Heartstrings
Amethyst Star (AKA Sparkler)

Other Characters:
Bon-Bon AKA Sweetie Drops
Pinkie Pie
Rainbow Dash

Cover art edited by me, vectors by:
Pinkie Pie: http://pikn2.deviantart.com/
Bon-Bon: http://cooltomorrowkid.deviantart.com/
Lyra: Unknown
Background: http://thelastgherkin.deviantart.com/

I'm not nearly as pleased with the outcome of this as I was with Practice. But oh well, here it is!
Hope you enjoy it.

Constructive criticism is welcome, but please try to be kind about it.

PS: Unfortunately I cannot use the "It's my first fic" excuse for it being bad any more... is there such a thing as a "It's my second fic" excuse?

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 39 )

Great story. And your right, there's SOOOOOO much hate toward the LGBT community. It's so unfair!

Ahhh your avatar! :rainbowderp:

But thank you! Someday I hope, there will be no hate towards anyone about things they cannot change. :fluttershysad:

5279485 lol. And it's slowly happening, I mean. The 4th circuit court recently declared a gay Marige ban unconstitutional(WV,VA, other places close to that are in the 4th circuit.

Yeah 2013 was an amazing year. DOMA's fall in the US. Legalisation in Brazil, France, England and Wales etc.
But hate cannot be eliminated, it's been over a hundred years for most countries since abolition and black votes, yet still there is racism.
Someday... someday...

5279529 your are sadly correct. All we can do is hope. But sadly, as long as humanity lives, full peace will never exist :fluttercry: and if it does, it's my last wish that I get to see it.

"calling somepony your own personal brand of an addictive drug, is not romantic, it's weird and kinda gross"

Is that book about a blood-sucking pony who sparkles under the sun?

Such a sweet ending. :pinkiesmile:

Aww, thanks :pinkiesmile:.

Like I said in the authors notes, I was going to end it with only Pinkie knowing... but that just wouldn't have been right.

I realy liked this story, my favorite part was the releationship dynamic between Lyra and Bon Bon. Nice work!

Thanks, that means a lot to me! :pinkiehappy:
:heart: LyraBon is awesome! :heart:

Yes, I finally got to read the story! (I have been busy on the weekdays) So, just like Practice, I liked the portrayal of LyraBon here. I can't believe I'm going to say this but... I think this story is *clears throat* "cute". Also, you did pretty well when it comes to the characterization of Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash. :twilightsmile: But, the only thing that you could work on is just a teeny, tiny bit is your mechanics, grammar, and other boring stuff like that. Anyways, I did enjoy this story as well as your previous one. :pinkiehappy:

Yeah, my grammar was pretty bad in this one. I wrote it in about the same amount of time as "Practice", but it's twice as long!
The only time I re-read it, was on my phone. So stupid, because this site barely works on my phone, and certainly too difficult to edit on it!

So I'm going to have to re-read it and edit it soon... maybe today if I have the time.

Thanks for all the complements friend! It means a lot to me, LyraBon is my second favourite ship after my namesake "FlutterDash". :pinkiesmile:

PS: Oh yeah, and thanks for the fav!:pinkiehappy:

5300215 Yeah... if I wanted to use FiMFiction on mobile, I would only use it on a tablet. But still, this story isn't too bad!

Eh, I don't have a tablet. Only a half-dead laptop that likes to turn itself off at random times - like when I'm in the middle of writing a story and forgot to save recently... - and a fairly good smartphone.

Thanks again! :pinkiesmile:

5300234 Ooh... I feel bad for you. Also, no problem! :twilightsmile:

Excellent story. Great job.
Just a few missing words occasionally.
Still, better than what I can cobble together.

Yeah, I know it's got a couple problems - :applejackunsure:
As I said to a couple other users: I wrote this in the same amount of time as Practice, despite it being twice as long.
I'm going to have to go through and edit it soon... perhaps today, if I can. :twilightsheepish:

I wrote a review for this story here.

no it's the changeling teen-romance, and its only hafe as bad what you are thinking

THIS WAS THE MOST AMAZING FIC EVER!!!! Omg I'm such a sucker for romance:rainbowkiss: I didn't know how amazing of a writer you were!:twilightsmile: I love this ship too btw:heart::rainbowlaugh: (Im still gone, just had a bit of free time :twilightsmile:

OMG thanks! :pinkiehappy: I'm a sucker for romance too, both reading it and writing it, :derpytongue2: :heart:
Thank you, thank you, thank you! :twilightsmile: This really means a lot to me.
LyraBon is adorable! :heart::heart::heart::heart:

Have you read Practice yets? If you liked this, you'll probably like that. :rainbowkiss:

5846354 aww your welcome:twilightsmile: I'll be sure to read that one too!:pinkiehappy:

Just read the epilogue!! TOTALLY WORTH IT!!!! :raritystarry::heart:

Heheh, was the pun on purpose? The epilogue is called "worth it" :rainbowlaugh:

Good story, and one heck of a message at the end you got there, m8. :twilightsmile:

That was a fun read.
A great shot of LyraBon to end the night on.
It holds up rather well after these last few years :pinkiehappy:

Thank you! I'm glad I was able to provide enjoyable entertainment for you to end the night on. :twilightsmile:

What do you mean it holds up well, though?

I mean it’s a few years old, but still reads like It’s recent to me. It was a good, fun read.
..some of my stories haven’t aged this well. One of the Flutterdash ones I’m even rewriting because of that fact.

Ah, alright. Thank you!!

I'm not sure why we haven't talk before. It's not often I see fellow FlutterDash-shipping pegasisters. :raritystarry: Most pegasisters seem to ship SoarinDash for some reason. :twilightangry2:

Yesh... soarindash... *gag*
Yea. Agree.
Soran belongs to Spitfire and fluttershy keeps dash in my books :rainbowwild:

Nice and simple.

I used to be Flutterdash7 so,
When I saw your username I got excited and went to see what goodness you have written for them and was surprised that a fellow Flutterdash has not written about our two loverly Pegasi. Most of my stories feature them. Are you planning on doing so?
I was gonna give you a follow too, but... no Flutterdash?

I don't really ship SoarinFire, but i'm totally fine with it as well. So I can agree highly! Dashie is Fluttershy's and Flutters is Dashie's. :yay:

My apologies, I have not written FlutterDash because I believe myself to be unworthy of doing so. :twilightsheepish: It was my intent to write Rarijack, Lyrabon and OctaScratch until I got good enough to write FlutterDash, but sadly I stopped writing as you can tell, several years ago.

Unworthy? I've helped a 13 year old write Flutterdash before... your only unworthy if your seriously doubting yourself. I used Flutterdash to improve my writing so I could write even more of it. It's a shame you stopped though, with great content like this you could have lifted the Flutterdash group up with some wonderful stories to brighten up peoples day (seriously a large part of why I write).
Do you still read?

When I say I don't write, I should point out I mean both because life is too busy for me to have the time, and because what little I do write I'm too scared to post because my self-esteem is so weak even slightly negative response would make my life much more complicated. :raritydespair:

Yes! I don't have a lot of time but I do indeed read new fics as much as I can find time for. :scootangel:

Hey, can we move this conversation to PMs? :rainbowwild: Don't want to fill the entire comments section up with it! :rainbowlaugh:

Pinkie is such an angel

Pinkie is great. Glad you liked my stories! :pinkiehappy: :heart:

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