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Rainbow FlutterDash


"I was just thinking, maybe I was wrong before. Who cares if the stars are dead? As long as we can see them they're real to us. Right?" "Right." - Rachel Amber and Chloe Price.

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Applejack has had a crush on Rarity for awhile, but she is unsure that the white unicorn shares her feelings, or if she even likes mares. The usually honest farm mare finds herself lacking something she'd never have expected: Courage.

Perhaps the courage of her other friends can help her to work up her own, or will she watch helplessly as Rarity ignores her forever?


POV Characters:
Rarity
Applejack

Other Characters:
Rainbow Dash
Fancy Pants
Fleur Dis Lee

Image vector source: Unknown

You may notice, that the Golden Oaks Library makes an appearance. This is because we know next to nothing about the Friendship Rainbow Kingdom Castle, I will not write about it until Season 5 comes out and we learn how it looks on the inside other than the throne room, or if Twilight will even live there full time. You can assume this story takes place before "Twilight's Kingdom".

I hope you all enjoy this, my first fic centred around any of the Mane 6. Also my first non-comedy.
I know "how they got together" fics are overdone. But as I always say "If it's over done, it's probably good."

As always, someone may have written a highly similar story already, but if so, I have not read it.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 34 )

This story has some weird formatting issues. There's an extra space between "Rarity" and "shook her head", and then in the next paragraph there is an accidental paragraph break after "Perhaps both?" Really, odd paragraph spacing and similar things seem to be present throughout the story; I'd recommend going back through and trying to clean them up for the purposes of readability.

said orange farm mare.

This should probably be "said Applejack" or "said the orange farm mare", though the former is better.

I'd really recommend going over your story again for formatting issues before you submit the next one. And go through this one for the same reason.

"It's okay... me too."

Shouldn't it be "It's okay, I'm gay too." "Me too." doesn't sound right.

I love the story! You know I'm not a big RariJack fan, but this was a good one.

Towards the end Dash says, "...I was rooting for you mate!
I don't think I've heard her say mate like that.
If you have, then disregard my naivety. :scootangel:

5335998
Thanks!

You're probably right... but I can picture her saying it so well, it seems like she should!

It is your story after all. So she can say whatever she likes. Just so long as you want it that way.

But, it makes me think of an Australian accent. Breaks the mood a little. Just my opinion.
Still love it, though.

Again, another wonderful story from you, FlutterDash (If I can call you that). Like the other two stories you wrote, the characterization was spot on! If the show introduces homosexuality (Which is actually very unlikely), I can see Rainbow Dash using Applejack to get Fluttershy. :rainbowlaugh: There were some minor errors (And I mean extremely minor errors), but I enjoyed this story anyways. :twilightsmile:

P.S. The more I read your romantic stories, the more I become interested in romance itself.

5351968
Thanks pal! And sure you can call me that!
Or you can call me Megan, if you like. :twilightsmile:

Yeah, I know there are errors, I wrote it and posted it too quickly... and now I'm too lazy to edit it!

Well I have almost no romantic experience...So don't be taking advice from me! I have no idea if my interpretation is how it works.
Most of it just comes from reading romance novels and fics here on fimfiction... :twilightblush:

5352181 Nononononono! I meant clop-free romantic MLP fanfiction, not being involved in romantic relationships. :twilightblush:

5352191
Well you did say "romance itself"... :pinkiesmile:

5352261 Hey, I slept at 1 in the morning and I am still kind of sleepy even after I woke up. So... yeah. :twilightoops:

5352294
Funnily enough, I went to sleep at one in the morning too, I had just gotten back from seeing Mockingjay Part 1 the second time. Heheh! :pinkiehappy:

5352299 You and your Hunger Games love. Good ol' FlutterDash.

Loved it! Rarijack is always good, but it is even better with a hint of Flutterdash!!

5678862
Thanks! and Hahah, yes I agree. RariJack and FlutterDash are the best and most canon ships ever! Trade Ya! proved that. :raritywink:
BEST. EPISODE. EVER!! :rainbowkiss:

5976832 rd and fluttershy..... U. GO GIRL

This explains Rainbow Dash's nervousness when she asked Applejack if her crush was somepony she knew. She was worried Applejack had a crush on Fluttershy. Not a bad job. Even when it's not center stage, I like stories where FlutterDash is mentioned.

6352817
Hehehe exactly. And thanks! :pinkiehappy:

I totally agree, FlutterDash is best ship. :yay:

i read this forever ago but i dont remember it so im gonna reread it soon

This was the first "official" Rarijack fanfic I've ever read and it was so amazing :pinkiehappy:
Thank you so much for making this :twilightsmile:

6798443
Wow, thanks! :derpyderp2: That really means a lot to me, I'm glad you liked it and honoured this was your first "offical" RariJack fic (#secondbestship). :pinkiehappy:

(Btw, what do you mean by "official"? :rainbowhuh:)

6799201 Well I read a FlutterDash with a hint of Rarijack, but this is the first Rarijack fanfic I've read :pinkiecrazy:

6800962
Ah, I see! :rainbowkiss:

My two favourite ships... Would you mind linking that fic? I'd love to check it out.

6805470
It works, thanks! :rainbowkiss:

But, awwwww, it's cancelled? :raritydespair:

6805478 Really?!:fluttercry:
Well I read it way before I made my account so it's been awhile since I looked at it:applecry:
I'm so sorry about that:raritydespair:

Fantastic first chapter. Great writing, even if there were grammatical errors here and there. The pacing was pretty good as well. You got the characters personalities and interactions down almost perfectly. I expected nothing less from Rainbow Dash than to laugh at Apple Jack asking her for relationship advice. All in all, I don't have any major issues with the story. It's very well done.

7609837
There's only one chapter, the second one is just a prologue. :scootangel:

Thanks, though! :pinkiehappy: I actually never even edited this one after it was published, unlike my other two which are much more polished.

7609912
Uh, I think you mean "Epilogue".

7922077
Er yes, thanks for pointing out my half year old typo. :rainbowlaugh:

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