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Ryaal #1 · Jun 25th, 2013 · · 2 ·

This will be so much win! xD
Will read this after dinner:yay:

Heh... Fluttershy... You gots some kinks to ya.

And, Twilight... You're probably just as bad.

Loved it.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Luz #3 · Jun 25th, 2013 · · ·

Dat cover art. I like it.

I've always hated the costume from the Babs Seed episode.

2772595 It's always hated you, too.

wait but didn't scootaloo where that on nightmare night first?

Usually I drop everything (including the pants) and read, but right now- My God, I never thought I'd be saying this- I just don't feel like it.

Into the read-later box, for future enjoyment!

Aha, Mewball is moving onto NSFW? It is a good day.

Great story, by the way. It cheered up my ruff day.

Still reading. Dammit, Darf, how is it that you make extreme quirks like human Lyra's horse fetish so sexy and comprehensive? You're good, mate. You're real good.

Adorably kinky lol

this good ass shit man. :twilightsmile: :yay: :moustache:

Arf....You mean BOW WOW

I loved the originality in this... :3 and... as "Fractured Loyalty" would put it, I guess "Flutterbaby" is way to cute, even in clops.

So I logged online to see one of my favorite author's new creation and got a sinister grin on my face... Time to lock my door, grab the lotion (For ashy legs from swimming for three hours), pull out the tissues (For my tears of pure, unadulterated and great joy.), and dim the lights (For my evening nap that I missed yesterday, of course.) to enjoy Darf's work... Then I can clop.

DAMN GOOD. I erected a tent in record time, too! Remarkable. Female-on female doesn't usually do it for me.

Okay, I read it now.

although I don't know if I had any doubts. Mr. Darf, you always deliver premium pony pornography. F/F, M/F, those very rare moments you do M/M (which would be awesome if you did more of but that's irrelevant), there is not a doubt in my mind that you are the best.

My ass-kissing aside, I liked the balance of the sweet romance and the steamy, kinky lesbian smexiness. However, I have a minor criticism.

69 is a bit generic for F/F clopfics. It's practically a cliche at this point, and the fact that you generally try to put out more... Unusual fetishes (or have a history of doing so- recent fics have been a bit more toned down, although seeing what you write in between that's understandable) means that the relatively normal mutural pussylicking just seems a bit boring to me, or maybe that's my caffienated* state speaking.

I want more scissoring, dammit! There's so much that can be done in the lesbian pornspace that could have been touched upon here that I feel would have been more interesting. Hell, that was part of the reason I put off reading this fic- It just didn't seem like that exciting or novel of an idea. It's still good, but it's not... As good as your usual.

Just a little kink I have with it that I might regret mentioning once I'm not so wired. So ends a needlessly long-winded comment.

*Caffienated means I'm not very caffienated at all, but the placebo effect of caffiene is so strong for me I get a little crazier than usual.

With her hooves still trembling, Twilight reached up behind Twilight’s tail, which she graciously lifted out of the way.

^ even amidst all that clop, I'd still find this. LOL.

i have the strangest boner right now:pinkiehappy: very well done.

Comment posted by BRD deleted Jun 25th, 2013

2773467 ... Excuse me, wat?

That wolf costume is starting to become a trend or is it me?

Really? Just because there is a wolf suit it is furry porn? :ajbemused: I see where you are going with that but this is not a furry porn thing and I for one find that insulting as a furry. :rainbowhuh:

This isn't furry, this is pet play. It is a form of BDSM and a well excepted fetish.


Remember that it's not all about the fetishes. When writing sex for a romantic shipfic, fetish fuel erotica, or character concept, the context should heavily dictate the content. If you look at the sex isolated from the story's context you won't see the forest for the trees.

2773722 I'm not sure if sexual positions count as fetishes, but okay.

That's the thing, though- The romance bits here mostly serve as an adorable vehicle to and through the sex. While the romance here is strong, the sex feels a bit lacking. Maybe I'm just tired of "mare a eats out mare b" again and again and I want to see something different. I also expected something more novel from this author, as his speciality is unusual stuff.

I would never have guessed Fluttershy was into bestial relations.... i would never have guessed Twililight to be into cosplay....

Atfirst i was skeptical..... then i was like wow, and then i was like Awww. how cute...

It was a nice clopper. Well written. Near-perfect characterzation.

Just enough fluff, and filler to draw me into the stroy, without blurrring it.


Interesting....I approve of this. :twilightblush:

It was well written in the sense that there were no grammatical issues but the story just didn't grab me at all and the characters felt too off for me. One thing that gave me pause and brought out a raised eyebrow was the point where Twilight generalized the time they'd been together and Fluttershy new the exact days instead. I know you were establishing that Fluttershy was more engaged in the relationship information/observation wise or such, but that just felt like it stepped on Twilight's OCD nature too much. Especially considering her whole scheduling weeks in advance disposition.

I didn't give it a thumb down but couldn't bring myself to read more than a 1/3rd of the way through, so I didn't give it a thumb up either. Guess it wasn't my cup o' tea as it were. Regardless of my opinion on the content, the character dynamics with body language and movement, along with scene setting, was great. So, well done on that front. Though, you probably could have toned back the imagery of Fluttershy's room a bit.

Um, might be a typo

With her hooves still trembling, Twilight reached up behind Twilight’s tail, which she graciously lifted out of the way.



Darn it, you completely ninja'd me!

I really liked this story!


I loved it. :pinkiehappy:

This was freaking adorable! :yay::heart:

Wow, this is a great story. This sorta seems like something I would be into doing- pet play. :pinkiehappy:


That was quite interesting. Nice unusual premise, and well written too :twilightsmile: Definitely captured Fluttershy's quiet and dismissive speech pattern, as well as a believable fetish for her. I, for one, am not tired of "mare a eats out mare b". What I am tired of is futa, which I'm most grateful you avoided :pinkiesmile:

Now if I may make one suggestion... Twilight wakes up with a full bladder, and decides to put the costume back on and attempt to inform Fluttershy :twilightblush: Several directions to go from there, all of which are good... especially if it turns out Twilight has a secret urine fetish

lol why do i read these. Still hilarious, props for your creativity.

Looks at feature box when i wake up in the morning. Sees this. Celestia give me strength! cdn.alltheragefaces.com/img/faces/png/me-gusta-creepy-me-gusta.png

D- Arf
D- Arf
D- Arf

Um... Was that connection intended?



OK Thanks for the input



Sorry if I insult you in anyway But, that how I saw it before Captain_Savage explained what it was.

Thank you for your understanding

its cool. No hard feelings here. :pinkiehappy:

That was utterly adorable, with a very, very good characterization of Fluttershy in particular. And the narration really made me feel like I was in the room.

I loved every single bit of it. Fluttershy the Kink Machine, collars, leashes and costumes all hidden in her closet.

LIked it, but would have appreciated a little more wolf-action. Maybe Fluttershy also has a wolf-dildo toy that Twi can don, and then she jumps on Fluttershy. I have a feeling that Shy would like a male wolf best, just being taken and rammed by that strong, powerful wolf. Good story.


We deserve each other.

I found this fic hilarious and sexy :pinkiehappy:

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