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Kaidan


Q(^_^Q). The friendliest misanthrope you'll ever meet.

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My unicorn parents called me a worthless mud pony. They pushed me every day to overcome my lowly status. When I woke up one morning with my cutie mark, I thought they would love me. I couldn’t have been farther from the truth.

It was not destiny or enjoyment that led me to discover the cello and composing. My parents made that decision, deciding before I was born I would continue their family legacy of famous musicians.

They did not realize what that decision would cost them.

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Cover Art: Dreampaw. The inspiration for the story.
Dramatic reading of Act I-III by Malao567. June 2013
Reading with music by ObabScribbler. June 2014
Song: Hooks and Strings by Reverb Brony. May 2014

Style inspired by H.P. Lovecraft
TypeWriterError: Editor & Rating Board
Gage of Grandiloquence: Editor
The11thWonder: Pre-reader
Nharctic: Pre-reader
Breath of Plagues: My Pinch Editor.
ArgonMatrix: Bad Grammar Exterminator
Daemon of Decay: Advice, also inspired me to write fan fiction. Blame him!

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 941 )

Several parts that could be expanded, such as Octavia's first meeting with Vinyl.

“It’s ok, Octy. I’m here now. ”
"I composed the concerto we were playing tonight.” *I think it said somewhere that their practice was in the morning
“Calm down, it’s all cool. Just remember you have friends here, ok?” Vinyl smiled warmly.
“Oh, ok.” I smiled and leaned back into the booth, relaxing.
I heard the window crack open and a familiar voice call out to me. “Octy? Are you ok?”
“It’s ok, Octy. I’m here now,” Vinyl assured me. “Let’s get you cleaned up
“Hey Octy, you had me scared for awhile. You ok to talk about. . . last night?”
“I didn’t want too!” I screamed. “I just wanted the bow tie off!
too painful to finish listen ing too.

And I know how extremely often the '10/10 mustaches for you' thing goes, but this has exceeded my high expectations for how well this was going to turn out, and is now my top favorite one-shot, unless you decide to add more chapters, then it would be on my top five all-time stories.
Well done Kaidan. Well done.

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I'm sorry

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Thank you for the praise.

I'm currently expanding from 14k to 28k words, my other editor said the same thing. Vinyl/Octy need more time to build their relationship to show why Vinyl loves her at the end. The parental conflict needs to be expanded to match Octy's more frequent outtings, and a co-conspirator on the mansion staff that would help Octy sneak out.

I'm breaking it into three chapters but still writing it all at once. So I guess it's not a one-shot anymore, but a three-shot. I've already tagged the sections I'll expand so it'll go "intro, act1" then act 2 then "act 3, epilogue" and should hit 9k words each.

Was the gore, too much? Got an opinion it was a bit over the top. The story is dark enough without the gore, so it's addition seems more a matter of preference then a useful plot device. Am considering implied violence via sounds and glances, making Octy more passive. Then, having Vinyl find her with the bodies, re-inforcing the idea Vinyl thinks Octy killed them.

Oh and I googled it, both ok and okay are acceptable. Okay is the more formal of the two and O.K. is fine, but rare. I'll still do a find & replace on the 'ok' to switch them all to 'okay', but at least I'm not a horrible author for saying ok, right? :raritydespair:

You finish this and you finish it right fucking now.

*nyan cat mode* Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay!!!!!!!!!!:yay:

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Isn't that Fluttershy mode?

2401250 nyan catdoes the rainbow, and while i do the rainbow, i go "yay" like fluttershy does:derpytongue2:

2296846 (slaps) CALM THYSELF! Your Rating Board demands it!

I am wowed! Can't wait for the rest!!

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It's already finished, I'm just editing it to what I believe is a ridiculous level of perfection. :twilightsheepish:

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Thank you, I spent a whole month on it all because of the cover art that I bought at a convention. :twilightsmile:

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I'm much calmer now, and I no longer want to punt my pet cat. Mowgli thanks you. :scootangel:

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Challenge Accepted. :rainbowdetermined2:
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Q(^_^Q)

Jesus, what a couple of scum suckers her parent's are. Poor Octavia.

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Act II in exchange for your soul avatar.
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Yeah, but if T.V. has taught us anything about scum sucking parents, you won't have to feel bad for her for long... *sees tragedy tag* Then again...

Holy crap, this makes me want to severely hurt Octavia's parents. How? Well it involves, chains, bonesaws, hacksaws, other cutting devices, and adreneline. Oh, and can't forget syringes. My name warrents the extreme use of syringes.

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Just stop by the library for tea, this Friday around 6pm EST. Coincidentally, that's probably when a second act will appear from the tall grass.

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It's okay to torture and murder someone, as long as they were evil first. :trollestia:

Oh wow. Looking through the comments, as well as the description, it looks like this is turning out to be a good story. And I haven't even read a single word of it yet, so I'm excited.

Adding to "Read Later", will definitely be checking this out. :twilightsmile:

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No worries. I will. Once I get my hands, or hooves on them, there will be blood shed. If I happen to end up as a pony, gonna have to figure out how to hold a bonesaw. Oh well, better improvise.

2402346 You'd be lucky if you end up as a unicorn.

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Who said anything about murder? Just extreme amounts of pain. :pinkiecrazy:

Oh and just realized that I should pour salt in their wounds. *insane laugh*

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Chances are I won't. Probably end up as some pegasus, cuz I LOVE anything that involves aviation. Not sure if that warrents me becoming a pegasus though.

Anywho, improvisation time! Tie the saw to my hoof?

2402374 That would be kind of uncomfortable, not to mention it could slip out and cut your leg off or something. Maybe you could secure it to the floor and bring the ponies down on it?

Ok, I can't bring myself to read tragic fics, but I have to say: you picked a hell of an image to be inspired by. The idea is sound, the synopsis sounds promising, but it's bad for my heart-rate to read stories like this.

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Nah, I want to have the pleasure of slicing and dicing. Plus, there's more control over what I want to cut. :pinkiecrazy:

I have read many novels, short stories, sonnets, epics, fan fics, greentexts, and poems. But this chapter was probably the most well written piece i have ever read. Please continue

Heh, these people. I relish knowing what you will experience. :pinkiecrazy:

I am not a fan of damage to ponies (especially to ones I like. or violence period...) But this was recomended to me (I don't know why... maybe cause it was written well?) and I must say that it was written very nicely. Concidering that her parents and their undying hatred for her, are horribe peices to the story (in the concept of being something I usually try to avoid), I can safely say you have my attention.

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You find my story good and you haven't read it yet. So awesome!:rainbowdetermined2:

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They had pegasi swords in Immortal Game, they strapped them onto their leg and flew around with it. Pretty much a flying machete at that point.

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I'm with you, how could anyone reject the ability to fly? If I were a unicorn whose special talent was magic I would. I'd probably end up with a special talent in quilting or something and have useless magic.

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Yeah, the picture is framed and sitting on my desk, watching me. Every time I stop typing, I swear I saw it's eyes move... Anyway, you could always stop before the tragic part. I never could, as soon as I got to the end of Background Pony I should have walked away...

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Thank you, it's very encouraging to hear I can write something good when I put effort into it. I usually just hit the keyboard until stories pop out. A daily update cycle is exhausting, was kinda nice to spend a month on this one story. :pinkiecrazy:

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Live vicariously through me, it's how I survived this long as a young author.

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Thank you. :twilightsmile:
I'm very proud that it's well-written enough to get people reading outside their preferred genres. I'm also very proud I was able to characterize Octavia strongly enough to get people so invested in her.

I love this story keep up the good work :pinkiehappy: oh and :twilightsmile::flutterrage:I HOPE TAVIS PARENTS BURN IN TARTARUS AND ARE TORTURED FOR A THOUSAND YEARS:pinkiecrazy:

This... I can't even explain how good this is! I don't think I've ever read anything quite like it!

Continue! I await with bated breath!

This story is awesome and the cover art is fantastic! I think it really sums up the story and I can't wait for more!

Attention indubitably grabbed. Watching this and waiting for the murdering to start.

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I have a lot of respect for the artist Dreampaw. Of all the art I saw, it was only hers and some of Tristra 360's that I bought. The cover art is still my favorite. I love macabre stuff.

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You and me both. I think it was Lyra in the study with a candlestick.

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Thank you for the compliments. :twilightsheepish: :yay:

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NO! Prototype ALS-AI1993 IT'S A TR--

*Syringed stabs me in the neck with some needles*
*Begins to drag my body down into Twilight's basement*

Well F:yay:ck. This story is just... No words. I don't even know what to say.

Rock ON freaky bro!

2402754 Given the beginning I would have said Octavia in her room with bare hooves, but whatever.

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No!!! You've spoiled everything! :pinkiegasp:

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Forget hemlock, I'm buying a dart gun.

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Thanks, I also have no words to describe the reception. :twilightsheepish:

She's imagining the hooks, right? It would be weird if they were real.

All my yes! I love stories like these. And you sir/madam have my rapt attention! Please continue!:pinkiehappy:

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It's what the My Little Pony writers say at conventions when people ask them about an upcoming episode and they're not allowed to say anything. I thought it'd be funny. :twilightsheepish:

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Once you go Mac, you never go back. Also, thanks. :raritywink:

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can you elaborate of how you lost all respect from that artist, was it how she sells it's art? was it how she treats her fans ? If you can please tell i love to hear this kind of things...
:pinkiecrazy:

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I said I have a lot of respect, I double checked to make sure it's not a typo. Awesome artist, had good prices and everything. And I only bought from her and one other artist due to her quality. :pinkiehappy:

(also I know it's bad/tacky to use the phrase 'a lot' unless I'm referring to a literal lot of land on which I want to build a house. It's an old habit. "I have great respect" would have worked better.)

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stupid brain twisting others words for it's delight, i guess after the way i live , i can no longer perceive the same things as thee, what a fright! And now i even rhyme , in prose all flat.

seriously what the fuck brain.

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