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Q(^_^Q). The friendliest misanthrope you'll ever meet.

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The newly coronated Princess Twilight suffers an abrupt tragedy. Having lost two loved ones, she begins to question her own mortality, and that of her friends.

AJ, Dash, Rarity, Pinkie, Fluttershy. . . they are just the beginning. Twilight will live for thousands of years, so every pony she cares about—every pony she will ever care about, will die.

She could barely handle the pain of one funeral, let alone the thought of hundreds of them. Twilight finds a clever way to ensure all of her friends never die. They can’t all be ageless alicorns, but they can all move into Twilight’s Dollhouse. Then they can be best friends forever.

Sequel: Twilight's Dollhouse 2
Fanmade Song: Twilight's Dollhouse

Source: Dreampaw
Editor: Gage of Grandiloquence, Breath of Plagues
Pre-read & Idea pony: TypeWriterError,
v1.1 Revised chapters 1-10 on May 1st 2013
--Pending a few more revisions, including ch. 14
Now on TV Tropes.

Chapters (18)
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Comments ( 1043 )

This is excellent! Keep up the awesome writing!

jz1

This is much creepier than the short story.

i (think) I like it!

2343074 Thank you.

2343161 Yes, now I have time to do much creepier things with it. Next chapter is her first play date with her two new dolls. It involves a come to life spell, and a livid Bon Bon. Also, somepony is playing their music too loud and Twilight can't sleep, so she goes to deal with it. :pinkiecrazy:

2344079 D'awww, want to join Twilight's dollhouse? Your avatar is so cute.

2344271 No, I still have a lot of life left to live! :rainbowdetermined2:

What....The....Buck...did I just read......Now if you'll excuse me i must go into my closet and curl up into a fetal position.....

2344740 A muscular red stallion. I was just about to hunt down an extra pair of eyes to edit it. Want in?

I think you just out Cupcakes-ed Cupcakes.

2346507 Wow that's quite the compliment. I didn't even have to dissect anypony. :twilightsheepish:

I actually have two more chapters ready to be published, pending an editor and confirmation they're 'creepy' enough. :twilightsmile:

This is a extremely original and interesting idea. I like it :twilightsmile:. Please keep up the good work.

Excellent! Also, my guess at who the stallion is happens to be the older brother of a mare with a talent in the field of apple growing.

P:S: Do you accept pre-readers?

what the hell did I just read?!!!?!!!:applecry::fluttershbad:

2344720 completely agree with your idea mind if I join you in the corner?

2347782 2344720 I'm glad it's got the creepy factor.
Just remember, the corner isn't exactly the safest place to hide from Twilight. :twilightoops:

2347772 A changeling just gave me love. :pinkiegasp:

2344345 This isn't over, you'll have a lot more life to live once I find you, Dash. :twilightsmile:

2347591 Thank you, Twilight takes great pride in her originality when capturing and/or killing her loyal subjects.

2347925 this story is going into my do not read ever file!!! may it burn in tartarus!!! no efence. I hope you have all the luck in the world with this story but I will not be reading it and making it my mission to forget it ever existed.

2347782 It wasn't that bad. I felt nothing :pinkiecrazy: , wasn't creepy.

2348090 I still stand by my previous statement.

2348123 Guess I have the mental defenses to be fine after reading this stuff :twilightsmile:.

2347925 and i doubt you want a changeling doll

wait.... 0_0 maybe she will do her enemies to troll them

but anyway

:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

2347952 Thank you. I've never had someone flee for their lives from a story before. I'm guessing the first chapter was really creepy. Not as creepy as Pattycakes, but still creepy.

2348090 See, nothing to worry about. It's just a story about Twilight going off the deep end and capturing/killing lots of ponies. :twilightsheepish:

2348303 In chapter four you'll get to see what she does to somepony who is mean to her. It might be fun to collect a couple changeling dolls. Maybe have a 'villains' district of New Ponyville.

You know, I had an idea kinda like this. Realy weird to see someone else with almost the same idea :twilightsmile: Great minds think alike?

Anyway, great story, great characterization and just overall really creepy when you think about it.
Also, rebellion? Good luck with that, there's three plastic ponies and a stuffed toy in new ponyville that'll stop moving the moment Twilight wills it.:pinkiecrazy:

Diagnostic criteria for 301.83 Borderline Personality Disorder
(DSM IV - TR))

A pervasive pattern of instability of interpersonal relationships, self-image, and affects, and marked impulsivity beginning by early adulthood and present in a variety of contexts, as indicated by five (or more) of the following:

(1) frantic efforts to avoid real or imagined abandonment.

“It’s just me, Spike, and you two. . . I have to re-examine my schedule if I’m going to convince all my friends to move into New Ponyville with me. Pretty soon, they’ll all leave and forget about me,” Twilight sobbed.

"Yes yes yes! It worked perfectly, oh Lyra, I'm so happy. Now we'll get to be together forever, come on!" Twilight was giggling like a school filly

also just look at her relationship with celestia in the show


(2) a pattern of unstable and intense interpersonal relationships characterized by alternating between extremes of idealization and devaluation

"That's not my problem. They're my friends. Their families can go grieve until they grow old and die too."

and the way she treats Lyra and Bon Bon

(3) identity disturbance: markedly and persistently unstable self-image or sense of self

(4) impulsivity in at least two areas that are potentially self-damaging (e.g., spending, sex, Substance Abuse, reckless driving, binge eating).

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(5) recurrent suicidal behavior, gestures, or threats, or self-mutilating behavior

(6) affective instability due to a marked reactivity of mood (e.g., intense episodic dysphoria, irritability, or anxiety usually lasting a few hours and only rarely more than a few days)

Lyra pondered the mare in front of her. It was a different mare than the one who had poisoned her tea and trapped her in a miniature figurine. Twilight looked so scared and vulnerable, as if she genuinely couldn’t relate to her real friends anymore.

(7) chronic feelings of emptiness

(8) inappropriate, intense anger or difficulty controlling anger (e.g., frequent displays of temper, constant anger, recurrent physical fights)

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(9) transient, stress-related paranoid ideation or severe dissociative symptoms

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Research does indicate that there is a relationship between child abuse and BPD. People with BPD report high rates of childhood sexual abuse and/or physical abuse. Forty to 76 percent of people with BPD report that they were sexually abused as children

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2350915
I was surprised too no one had written something like this before. As to the rebellion, I have thought of other methods they would use. Not all forms of rebellion in a prison are as straight-forward as escape. Oh, and I solve the dilema of only getting 1 new friend per chapter, next chapter. That way I can dive into the really good stuff like public exec.... hehe. :pinkiecrazy:

2350955
First, I'll just get this out of the way: The author of Solitary Locust commented on my story! :yay:

Second, that's incredible. You not only nailed it, you also just gave me all the background info on Twilight's disorder I could ever want, not to mention a creepy insight that she has the same issues in the show... It should be much easier now to keep her in-character in my story and showcase more of her issues.

Thanks. I'll save a room for you in the dollhouse. :twilightsmile:

2351129 I had plans to write it but I had no idea on how to do it properly. The idea was there, the rest was a bit lacking :twilightoops: And true, rebellion can be many things. I think I have an idea of what it could be :scootangel:

Rebel Brothers, and Sisters! Big and tiny-alike!

2351387 Bad rebel, bad! Into the shoebox!

Twilight is working on the next chapter and plans to teach the Rebel Alliance ponies a lesson.

2349652 I don't get it, pattycakes wasn't creepy either it just felt odd. :twilightsmile:

2351781 Hmm I thought it was creepy. The thought of Fluttershy keeping an adult Dash as a baby? Maybe it's just me, or maybe it was the chapter where Scootaloo betrays Dash and helps Fluttershy take care of baby Dash... Hard to put a hoof on it.

Come to think of it, why is that creepy when I routinely read grimdark, gore, and write the stuff? I mean, Cheerilee's Garden didn't phase me as much. Hmm, I think I'm going to have to see a psychiatrist.

2352422 I may need to see a psychiatrist as well. Wonder if they have a two for the price of one deal? :twilightsmile:

2352632
No, but it's only a nickle.
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I'm actually glad I'm insane, it'll make writing Twilight so much easier. :derpytongue2:

2352646 Your insane too!? Thats great, I'm insane! Can we work together? :scootangel:

2351129

i've written characters with personality disorders before so i know a lot about them

just be careful not to fall into stereotypes for that disease or whatever

twilight's behavior should define her disorder, not the other way around
otherwise it ends up seeming like a by the book kind of thing
and i like this because it's realistic enough that twilight doesn't fit everything on the list

i'm just curious, were you already writing her with that disorder in mind
because that's pretty good writing if yuo did
it's subtle and stuff
people just go LOL OH THAT CRAZY TWILIGHT HE HE
but then when you look closer there's a really disturbing pattern to it
which is that she's terrified of being rejected

also lol i'm e-famous or something
this is the second or third time people have said that to me
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i'm glad you like my story! and i really like yours
mandatory update soon demand and stuff

:rainbowkiss:

“Didn’t we just cover that, Vinyl? I told you, I turned you into a doll so you can be my friend forever! Seriously, am I going to have to pin a list to the wall? ‘Frequently Asked Questions about your new life as my immortal best friends’?” Twilight mocked.

Something like this? fc06.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2013/074/4/7/secret_life_of_rarity_list_heavy_blood_by_corani-d5y5ib0.jpg

2354281
I started writing her to have a split personality disorder, but I hadn't gotten around to actually looking up the signs and symptoms. I work at a hospital so I just automatically assume I know all things medical. (On the bright side, all that time learning human anatomy allows for some creepy-accurate poisoning/torture scenes. The upcoming cyanide scene was super fun to write....)

Now that I know about borderline personality disorder, it better fits what my intent was. I don't want her to have a good personality and crazy personality fighting for control. It seems much more interesting to have one conflicted personality as she struggles to define herself. *spoiler: twilight is crazy :pinkiecrazy:

And yes, Solitary Locust is best changeling fic. :twilightsmile:

2354529 Hey, how'd that homage to my favorite serial killer fic get in there? :twilightsheepish:

I was thinking of having Twilight make some rules, shrink them down, and post them around town. Also, posters like this:
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I'll just have to wait until I'm at home to make one for Twilight, and one for the resistance. Things are going to get pretty ridiculous when toy ponies are fighting each other in the street in a war of freedom vs servitude. (I'm thinking kind of like the last season of Fringe.) :pinkiehappy:

2352646 Congratulations you creeped me out to new levels with chapter 4 :pinkiecrazy:. Well done indeed :twilightsmile:.

jz1

While you have explained how Twilight has turned ponies into dolls, I'm actually very interested as to how she managed to turn Filthy Rich and Diamond Tiara into Unicorns.

Is D.M.V three different names, or is a reference to the C.M.C?

:pinkiesick: Ugh. A good idea, but all the violence is a turnoff.

she just flies of the handle and runs away when we upset her.”

?

2360719
I thought you weren't going to read this.:trixieshiftright:

Erm... Diamond Tiara and Filthy Rich are both Earth Ponies.

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