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This story is a sequel to Under A Luminous Sky
In the wake of the Mbwun killings , Spike seems to be better off then he was before: his large, muscled body is a far cry from the chubby baby he was, and he no longer has to go through his hundred-year wyrm sleep. Life, however, is rarely so simple. As he and Twilight move back to Canterlot, Spike finds that his new body may very well mean the end of his old life.
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That made me sad.
I didn't read the story before this but just see that this is what becomes of it I think I'll get started on it.
-Sturrn
Hmm... so a sequel/side story and Spike centric to boot. Yeah, going to the big city as a dragon is gonna blow. Surprised the average citizen isn't better informed about NATIONAL FREAKIN HEROES! But ponies not knowing that or caring is canon.
Poor Spike, its bad when even family gets scared of you...
Wow, cranking up the feels already, huh? This is going to be interesting.
I really enjoyed reading this. Your characters are believable, react appropriately, and the reader is even just enough of each of them to get a good first grasp on their motivations and personalities in the not-so-distant future. Most importantly, I think you did a really great job contrasting Spike's persona with his physical presence. It works as a great visual metaphor for his already uncanny ability to be paradoxically wise beyond his years and a child at heart.
Oh man, I love this type of story! The only other one I've seen that is any good is "It Takes a Village", and this is looking good so far!
Also, a question; do I have to read your other story to get this one?
EDIT:
Derp derp, nevermind, didn't notice that in the description.
I wonder if Spike has the ability to actually change his form, like changelings did. If he is able to do that, it would make like so much easier...I think that it would be a neat addition to have it, and I would like to see a little more on how draconic magic works...
<3 this story.
Damn, if I was Spike my heart would shatter, poor guy, seriously that's just bucked up. I have no problem with Spike and Twilight being brother and sister, long as it does not cross the line of being mother and son *shivers * but that's just me. My favorite pairing is the two of them being shown in a romantic light, also known as Spilight, but again that's just me. To each their own. Can't wait to see how this turns out, you are very detailed, I'm really impressed. And no creature wishs to anger a Goddess.
Is this a sequel? If yes, could you link the first story?
1995583
Here ya go.
1995548
I kind of assume their sibling-ish because they bothe see Celestia as a mother figure.
*Reads Description*
WHY WOULD YOU LIE TO DUSK? Spike's going to be HEART BROKEN! Some Princess of Love...
I'll follow, but no rating until this problem is resolved.
Sing as Twilight has the ability to repair dams, I think she would be able to repair some cobblestone and a fountain.
Other than that, and guards that are so stupid you are pushing the bounds of believability, it’s a good story.
Huh. I thought you'd take the easy route and have the kids realize that the big dragon was Spike after an explanation. Well, color me intrigued.
Oh, us enlisted. We do that. A lot.
Oh, btw, is "Danger Dusk" a nickname for Dusk Shine or something? OR is that a typo.
1995768
I don't consider the stone damage an issue. It's played for comedy in the right way, and Twilight is a bit more concerned about Spike than cobble. The guards I don't think are stupid, they're guards. It's clear, I think at least, that the Major got gung-ho about seeing Spike and, blinded by duty or glory, glossed over pertinent information. Scenes that are funny require a bit more suspension of disbelief because they require traits be exaggerated. Despite that, I think the Major has a genuine character motivation. The remaining guards are just following orders.
Seeing?
1996533
Yes, seeing.
I was just saying that the one guard was an idiot. I find stupidity as a plot point rather irksome and would have liked it to have been something like a returning patrol or something a bit more believable rather than, ‘hey so there is going to be a dragon here and we aren’t suppose to bother it… Let’s go wrangle us a dragon boys.’
He was basically disobeying a direct order with the highest commanding officer next to him while he did it.
The whole scene could have been written with a slightly more cohesive plot if they just had the guards come in after seeing what appeared to be the dragon going on a rampage and they decided to be safe. They then hold back when the commander sees Shining not doing anything or reacting like he is in danger.
It brings the same points to the table but doesn’t involve stupidity and is thus a better plot to me.
I understand the stones were comical. I think it was funny too. I also think it would be funny if, as they walk, Twilight is just repairing everything behind them. It would make some sense nad appear slightly more thought threw on the part of Twilight and the Princesses.
1995739 I can completely agree with that, I love having the Goddess of the Sun seem like a mother figure to them
Why didn't you tell me this was posted?!
I'm reading Luminous Sky right now, hopefully I can finish it in time to not have to worry about spoilers.
Hmm, intriguing... Will read once I get some free time.
Free citizen of Equestria? So who isn't a free citizen? Prisoners of war? Changelings? Pigs, cows and sheep?
I guess I'll have to check out the other story, now.
Congrats on the feature. Wish I could write that well. Maybe I'll just give up.
see when i saw the description i thought this was gonna be like, a serious philosophical riff on Sandy Hook and mass shooter tragedies
no srsly
wtf wrong with me
poor Spike. he suffered while becoming a huge dragon, everyone are afraid of him now, he lost any chances with Rarity and probably Fluttershy would be terrified of him, too.
Mbwun? Is there an appearance anywhere made by an A. Pendergast?
Wow...poor Spike.
You got me hooked, go on.
Wow... Okay, epic response time!!!
1994372 As was the intent.
1994389 I'd love it if you did! Just remember, Luminous Sky is a murder mystery, so it gets a bit dark.
1994429 I've always liked the idea that no one truly knows. I mean, how lame would every episode or story be if all
they had to do was wave the EoH sticker and get whatever they want?
1994511 Yes, well, when you see something with chompers bigger than your head, you tend to get a bit spooked.
1994550 I'm trying desperately to balance the comedy with da feelz. Hopefully I get it right...
1994981 Pilot, no BS, coming from you, that means a whole lot.
1995251 I loved ITaV, as well! I could never hope to do it half as good as that story did, so I'm putting a slightly different spin on it.
1995256 That WOULD make things easier, wouldn't it?
1995442
your comment. :)
1995548 Hmm, I've never read a Spilight before. I always liked the bro/sis angle. Check out Luminous Sky, I explore that a bit more in depth.
1995744 I have no idea...
1995763 Well, she's still a bit stunned that the child she once sat for could now swallow her whole. Kinda makes ya derp a bit, you know?
1996490 Yes, we've all had that moment of, "Oh God, dude, just walk away..." And yeah, "Danger Dusk."
1997129
1997273 NEVAR! To the end, I shall grapple with thee! From the heart of Hell, I stab at thee! For Hate's sake, I spit my last... breath... at theeeeeeee......
1997492 Just an expression, but now that I think of it... holy crap, Applejack is a slaver!
1998132 Nuuuu! Never give up, just practice harder! It took me a good year to get where I am. Ask 1997273, he read my very first draft. It weren't pretty...
1998386 Nothing, just the constant media exposure.
1998784 Yep, careful what you wish for...
1998854 No, but in Luminous Sky, we have an A. Bentgrass!
1999363 Thank you! I love your work, as well, even though we have a different view on the Twilight/Spike dynamic. But, that's the great thing about fanon: neither one of us is wrong!
Lurve y'all!
1999769 I could deal with them being family no problem but I love them being romantic partners more and maybe once I have time
Spike became a big scary dragon (at the present it kinda sucks) but the alternative was sleep for a hundred years till all your friends are dead and gone sucks even worse...
Where there is Life, there is Hope (and Twilight ... with hugs ... and nuzzles ...)
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I imagine Spike as looking like this...but more purple...
Tooootally going to read that right now then XD Excellent, lol
Pfft! Spike is gonna just have to give up on all of this...
Spike...let it go...
...AND LEAVE ON AN ADVENTURE ACROSS THE LAND!
Come on!
He's got wings,
he's a dragon,
he lives in a magical fantasy world
and clearly he cant stay with the ponies.
Sure...the home is left behind...BUT THE WORLD IS AHEAD!
Congrats on the recognition. It's a good story and maybe people will read the awsome prequill.
2001772
Thanks, bro. Sorry I didn't consult you on this one, it just... kinda happened.
I'll be sending you the next chapter hopefully by the end of the week. Um, that is, if it's okay with you...
2001906
Happy to help. Your a much better writer than I am but I can still catch weak plot like the IRS catches insurance fraud-
-when it only kind of exists...
I need more than 2 hours of sleep. Stupid holiday.
Dusk is scared of spike
Great job!
this looks good. on another note, when can we expect Eye Of The Beholder?
1998784 Why would this cause any difficulties between him and Rarity?
If anything, this opens up a whole new realm of possibilities! *Alondro ponders numerous perversions... more than a few due to toxic exposure to Japanese hentai manga...*
And now that your subconscious is contaminated with that! Trolololo!
2003398
his dick is the size of pony or even bigger. and even if it will fit, she's gonna be torn apart by the amount and force of ejaculation.
pooooor spike ;A;
--What in the name of Celestia's flaming teats--
Excellent, I see the whole "Alicorn's ___ Teats" thing is finally catching on; 4chan refuses to let me down.
Our influence will spread across the land as would a blight; swiftly, mercilessly and in ways the naked eye cannot behold.
----
So far no one has used it in the presence of the alicorn itself though; I stay my hand if only to see my creation flourish naturally.
2000106 Oh yes, there will be nuzzles...
2000238 Hmm, I see him more like this: 2.bp.blogspot.com/_t6pFwflydnQ/TQueVc8-WCI/AAAAAAAABKw/Z17-jNFsIlU/s1600/RedDragon.jpg Just, you know, more purple.
2000957 Thank you!
2001164 True, but he doesn't want to let go of his family. Oh, whatever shall he do?
2002233 Yeah, that was painful to write, but honestly, that's how I see it going down. This is not the last time we'll see Dusk, though.
2002868 Honestly, I'm not sure. I have most of the plot worked out, but the little things are killing me. But don;t worry: like a teenager at a whorehouse, it'll come before you know it.
2003398 I've seen enough hentai...
2003743 Thank you, but please deposit all feels in the receptacle near the exit.
2003848
... moving on...
2006696 I know, right?!
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2011516 Never been to 4chan, I just heard that before, with "tits" instead of "teats." Since ponies have teats and not tits, just seemed natural. Okay, I think I over thought this a bit...
2031615
sorry
2031615
well that's an ... interesting analogy
Great start! Now I must return to lurking as I lay in wait for the mentioning of MacXDash...
At long bloody last!
Lt. Beef Cake? Really?
Ah, the art of subtly.
The problem with Spike is the same problem with those chimp experiments, trying to make them human. Worked a little too well till they started growing. If Spike was released back into the 'wild' how can he cope without survival skills? He was raised as a pony.
2055040
Personally I liked that.