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Seat belts, everyone! Pass your permission slips forward, it's time for a feels trip.


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After accidentally turning herself into a stallion from a backfired spell, Twilight 'Dusk Shine' Sparkle frantically seeks the help of Princess Celestia. In Canterlot, Dusk Shine fails to find his mentor, but does find solace from those closest to him.

* Takes place prior to S3

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 140 )

2 things: First of that picture is inaccurate representation of a (pony) brothers relationship (from my understanding) and is more of a (pony) sister-brother relationship. And second is thank God this isn't a clopfic... Now that I think about it, there is a significant lack of gay clop fics (it could be). Unless I'm being a moron

3691778 If the entire point is a sister being trapped in a male body, then the 'sister-brother relationship' feel for the picture should make perfect sense, no? :derpytongue2:

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Ah, this makes me happy. Princess Trollestia, an innocent Spike with the birds, and not farr off from a Lesson Zero Dusk Shine. Well done, I haven't seen stallionized Twilight written this well thus far.

AND THEN I READ THIS. :pinkiegasp: :pinkiehappy:

3692558 I'm glad you're enjoying it thus far :3 Thank you for the feedback! :trollestia:

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If this turns into a clopfic of any sort, I'm ripping my gold star right off this story. Just sayin', there are too many of those stories out there.

Anyway, I'm interested to see where this goes, in the non-cloppy direction of course. :pinkiehappy:

3693404 No clop to be found. Nothin' but bro love born from bro/sis love :pinkiehappy: Sibling love is best love.

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Good to hear, it's nice to finally find a fic like this that has no clop. Very refreshing.

Anyway, so far, so good.:twilightsmile:

Can't wait for a new chapter, only two chapters and you got my follow, bravo, only two have managed to do that. :ajsmug:

Dan

Twilight tore through town, the blue potion and its' vastly thickening smoke flooding out of her force field steadily. A few passerby ponies gasped and leaped out of the way before they got bowled over, while others stared on in confusion at what their crazy librarian resident had done this time.

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Dan

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There's way too many GAY clopfics out there. We could use more of the regular kind.

For that matter, we could use a separate gay shipping tag to differentiate from regular shipping.

Oh my god

rule 63 Twilight Sparkle with shining armor and it ISN'T a clop fic?!

:pinkiehappy:

YES PLEASE

This has potential for great dawwwws.
Please proceed:scootangel:

Ha. Where's that "dis gon b gud" gif when you need it?

:rainbowlaugh:

OH MY GOD!! HEART ATTACK FROM THE CUTENESS!!!!

3693480 That was what intrigued me. Guylight/Shiney with no clop? MOARPLZKTHX :pinkiehappy:

3693806 When you see the element of magic running with a smoking substance, go the opposite way! OR When you see a unicorn running, try to keep up with them. (Last part paraphrased from my uncle, an EOD technician)

sees cover art
checks groups and tags

Well...I don't see incest anywhere.....you have my attention:trixieshiftright:

3693480 Lol who disliked this comment?Nice fic btw.

Oh this is going to be good!

Nice work so far, the writing and the story are both great :twilightblush:

I like it. When comes next chapter

You know, I have to say, I think this is Rule 63 done right.

I am expecting fully-blown crowning moments of heartwarming in this fic. It's off to a very nice start. Won't say if I like or dislike since it is too early to tell.

Twilight- YOU TRULY GOT TROLLED THIS TIME!!! :trollestia:

I thought Twilight seemed just a little too panicky, and I'm surprised she didn't try to quantify and document the unintended effects before attempting to correct it. In any case, I'm being overly nitpick-y. Beyond that, it was entertaining and has potential. :ajsmug:

Oh, I do have one actual correction:

"I-It's magically endued imbued, Spike! The

Heeeyyyy CD, it's Shift from MLP Forums. Just wanted to say, I approve of this fanfic and i'm waiting for more. :pinkiehappy:

More Luna, that is

3695583 Thanks for the word correction :twilightsmile:
And yeah :P All I have to say on the matter of 'Too Panicky' is, 'Lesson Zero' xP As for quarantine, she did so with her magic, but as the potion's mist was expanding and couldn't be contained, quarantine wasn't possible :3

Bemused : (adjective) bewildered or confused
Her distain for sweets bemused the Pinkie.

Concept is interesting, but I just didn't enjoy reading it.

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Rule of funny: plot holes for the sake of hilarity are permitted. And this is already hilarious. Do continue, my good sir :twilightsmile:

3695926 Hilarity is about to turn into feels, prepare yourself :moustache:

For a first chapter, this was decent. It established the story rather well, and had some funny jokes with Spike's reactions and Twilight freaking out over her gender being flipped. It might have dragged a little near the middle with the potion, but that's forgivable.

"Being a guy is easy," Spike said, laying on the grass and lounging with his claws behind his head. "You just be cool, relax, and let the flow take you where it goes. You'll get used to it no time. Then you can just find a way to turn back. Piece of cake!"

das sum bullshit, spike. suuum buuuuuullllshit.

3697387 :moustache: Maybe Spike's just mastered the art of being a guy.

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Yeah, seriously. No need to say it like that. You can almost always tell by the description or by the first chapter is there is no picture. And if you somehow end up in a yaoi clopfic, and you aren't looking for that, just leave the page and your done with it. Nothing else to it. Besides, this isn't even a clopfic! Do even you check the ratings? It says "Everyone" for a reason.

*reads title of chapter* Could he/she be talking about that hinderance? Oh dear...

"Nonsense, Spike." the living embodiment of pony science dismissed, trotting around her table and examining the spread of scrolls, books, potions and runes that covered it with extreme focus.

Nice epithet, although you might want to use that after using her name (after dialogue) once.

"Hormones are like messengers of the body, Spike. They tell your bodies' cells to do certain things with the natural chemicals that hormones are made up of. They're a fundamental part of the body's network of communication and function, as well as growth. By being able to control them, all sorts of spells for altering the strength in muscles, energy input and output and other things can be easily developed."

Yeah, you still need to work out if you want to benefit from steroids.

The birds were chirping outside. Two birds, Spike noticed. One male bird was chasing the other, a female, around one of the treehouses' branches. While the female had been on the branch for quite a while, she was soon forced into the air by the male, who had decided to give chase.

In a matriarchal world like Equestria, wouldn't there be two female birds fighting over a male bird?

The smoke would be able to spread out into the open air, and break down into completely harmless particles.

But....smoke isn't homogeneous! It's generally a heterogeneous colloid.

"N-no, this is serious, Spike. We need to fix this right away. There might be other horrible side effects as well, or..." he stopped mid-stride. "...or it might even be permanent! Spike, what will my friends think? What if this puts an awkward dent in our relationship!?"

I don't think it's going to dent your relationship(s) at all :raritywink:

"Being a guy is easy," Spike said, laying on the grass and lounging with his claws behind his head. "You just be cool, relax, and let the flow take you where it goes. You'll get used to it no time. Then you can just find a way to turn back. Piece of cake!"

Masculinity: now with 63% more Taoism.

Spike landed with an 'oof', muttering about how less soft it was sitting there now, with Twilight no longer being small and petite.

Muscle tissue is still softer than bone (Twilight would have probably been more bony as a mare and slightly more beefy as a stallion).

3697703 There's also no 'Romance' tags or such :pinkiecrazy: Not sure why people would assume there'd be clop or heavy relationship stuff in a story with nothing but 'Slice of Life' and 'Alternate Universe' as the tags.

3698121 Plus, if they're trying to pair Twi...er, Dusk with Shining...isn't that incest?

What's this? A Dusk Shine and Shining Armor fic that DOESN'T involve sex? Holy shit is this real life??

Might give this a read at some point.

Hehehe. that's sibling love right there^^ Oh I can SO relate to Shining in that last scene^^ I'd react about the same way if something like that happened to my little sister^^

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Oh, wow... totally missed that one... Probably my cue that I should have gone to sleep a while ago:facehoof:

3698366 Same :facehoof: Nightowls for the winfail :trollestia:

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