Shining Armor is about to understand what it really takes to be a member of the Royal Guard. His Military Bearing will now face the ultimate challenge.
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thanks for the luagh I need it.
A little rough around the edges, but a cute story nonetheless. Have a like!
This was way too cute!
Read this sentence carefully and delete one of the doubled words.
You can solve this.
Okay; let's talk ranks.
First, why is Shining an enlisted. We know that the end state is that he becomes a captain (R), this means that he needs to spend several years as an officer. He would be a cadet in training, then a 2lt., then a 1lt., then a captain (if you consider army promotions, navy would be a whole other story as captain (N) is a flag officer position. Further, there is no way any officer can just promote a soldier (battlefield promotions are a messy thing and I'm going to disregard them due to dubious legality); there are promotion boards and stringent (kinda, it sometimes depends on the command, but assuming that the unit protecting the palace is considered to be one of the best, it's almost definitely stringent) processes. There are also a whole bunch of rules on how long you have to serve before you can be considered for another promotion. The problem here is that Shining could have been placed on a promotion list and be rocketed to the front of it, but as he is a private, the best he could hope for would be corporal. There's also a massive change in responsibilities; the ability to stand guard regardless of what's going on might be a good trait for a private, but as you get more responsibility, the ability (and showing this ability to the promotions board) to think for yourself and on your feet becomes more important than following orders blindly (though that still does play a vital role).
Not bad but this feels a little on the short side and void of real connection. I want to like this, but it's too fast and there's not enough details. It's worth a thumbs up, as it is cute.
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It was a short story. And would have been shorter if I didn't have to have minimal of 1000 words. I had to think up something fast for the end cause I wanted people to enjoy this story. I may make some modifications soon. I just wanted to get this short story out there before it left my mind for good.
8084694 I do agree. He's more likely to be a lieutenant, maybe thanks to going through an ROTC course at High School, or maybe a sergeant at the very minimum, attending the Officer's training course. Either way, he has thirteen years to make Captain in between Twilight's elevation to Celestia's student and the wedding.
But apart from that... Totally cute! I could so imagine Twilight doing that to Shining Armor as she worked next to him.
It needs an editor to fix some spelling/grammar mistakes.
8087002 True, but that's still a lot of promotion for 13 years in what's presumably one of the most competitive spots. Even having done a JROTP, then an ROTP that's four years (probably more) followed by three ranks in the Royal Guard. Possible, but I don't really buy it happening. It's all pretty irrelevant though.
8087715 Again, I do agree. If he'd started as a lieutenant, especially with Twilight as Celestia's protege, then he's got a much better chance of going up through the other three ranks to Captain (Who would most likely have to be appointed by Celestia herself, mind you) than starting up from the very bottom. It's not impossible, with the way he's jumped already in the story, but it's much more difficult.
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I understand this has some military aspects to it. But can we please use our imagination here a bit, and say that the way ones get promoted is different in Equestria's Military. I myself am military and know all about how the ranks work. But this is an imaginary world, and in this reality, the military rules we go by are not the same as in Equestria. Please just bare with me on this.
Okay, that was absolutely freaking adorable.
I think we can all agree that the royal guard is fucking weak. They've never seen violence and war, and their weapons and armor are outdated. There is evidence for this, an example being when the Changelings attacked Canterlot. Shining armor, one of the most powerful unicorns in Equestria at the time and the rest of the royal guard, were so unbelievably weak that they allowed the entire changeling army to invade their city, capture their monarchs, and defeat their military. It got so bad, that 6 bridesmaids- BRIDESMAIDS were more capable than the entire royal guard!
How many rank did he skip?
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To be honest, I don't know the ranking system of Equestria. As for how many were skipped. I'm gonna say, maybe, two. It's a fanfic, just role with it. Don't bring real life technicalities into the mix.
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I mean the 6 bridesmaids did have magical artifacts known for... Let me see... Turning Discord to stone, sending a pony to the moon, and stripping all the evil off a pony. So basically forcefully shoving harmony into someone and if they refuse punish them severely. Oh no the guards suck too, I'm not defending them.
This is a pleasant read, with just enough cuteness from filly Twilight and just enough worried courage from Shining Armor to balance things out. IMO the "Random" tag isn't needed, and could actually be misleading. This is a very simple, straightforward and heartwarming art-prompted vignette. Nicely done!
Even now, there is one thing I'd like to say...
MMMOOOAAAAARRRRR!!!
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No problem 😊 although it's the pony and wolf you'd want to thank ❤️
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I am very thankful for them doing it. Honestly, I was surprised they read it and recorded it. Not that I'm complaining, I just never figured the story was worthy enough to be given an audio reading. The way he reads it also makes the story itself enjoyable from audio.