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Night--Mist


Son of Princess Luna. A Bat Pony Alicorn who's small for his age.

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Spitfire has taken time to show Rainbow Dash and Lightning Dust around after graduating at Wonderbolt Academy. When she has them try something new she brewed up, something happens none of them saw coming.

Warining: diapers, age regression and cuteness involved along with some comedy. Do not read if your heart is not strong enough to take it. Please read and give me positive comments and constructive criticism as always. Hope you enjoy the story.

A special thanks to ShadowBlades for the image to this story. Another special thanks to Maroonlover for editing my story.

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 190 )

A good start but that last sentence block can be broken up.

3346175 I'll see what I can do.

That was funny! :rainbowlaugh: Guess we gotta figure something out to get them back to normal, if that's at all possible!
I like it, it was funny. Keep it up!

A good start. But it sort of feels like a rehash of another one of your stories.
Not saying that's a bad thing. I tend to do the same.

Keep the chapters coming and always remember that you are awesome! With love Asabrasa

What's life without risk well now Rainbow and Lightning have a longer life to live to do risk if the cure isn't found good job keep the chapters coming. :pinkiehappy:

3346337 Will do. Hope to see your next chapter on Foal adventures soon. You always keep me wondering what will happen next.:rainbowderp:

Dont take any offence to this because its not meant to offend. But i cant really...understand your writing style, it feels rushed in my eyes. It feels as though the pacing's off or something, cant quite place it....i just...dunno.

didn't you already make a story about this?.....

3346908 No. You're thinking of Super Stallion.

3346939 not raising rainbow or something like that?....

3346945 Look at his stories and you'll get your answer.

3346985 i see none of the stories we're talking about here , so that clarifies about the author being him , but there is still a story about this same basic thing.....

Comment posted by Darkentrophy deleted Oct 14th, 2013

"How do you two feel now?" Spitfire asked them.
"I don't... feel any different," Rainbow Dash said.
"Do I look any different?" Lightning asked.
"You still look like a wing pony to me," Rainbow Dash joked making them all laugh.

This wouldn't happen to be a Shrek joke would it? Perhaps the second one?

3347417

yeah it is, slightly altered though

3347512 Eeyup.:eeyup: That's what I was going for.:twilightblush:

3349450 No he wasn't with them, and Rainbow and Lightning were pretty much adults before this, so adoption wasn't needed before now.

Good opening to this.

Hope you make more of these chapters.

AND SOON!!!!!

I hope you don't take forever on this one just like Sisters Of Magic

Soarin was quick to diaper them and soon the foal fun began.

Well good, it's a mircale they didn't already have an accident. :twilightoops:

MMMMMMOOORRRRRREEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

gifted diamond dogs.

Nice pun :rainbowhuh: : Why is Lightning there Me : it was the authors idea :raritystarry:I love the diamond dog pun :twilightoops: Wait.... am I a princess in the story?? :yay: : SSSOOO CUUUUUUUTTTTTTTTEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is so cute.

You're fics are always worth it, Night - Mist

As well as this fiction.

make sure you don't forget about Twi and Trixie in "Sisters Of Magic

Cute and to bad they cant fly now, although this chapter was a bit short for me it was pretty great. :twilightsmile:

At least Scootaloo doesn't know about this, I'm not sure if she can suddenly be the big sister.
...
Scootaloo's gonna find out about this isn't she?

3384380 Maybe, maybe not. You'll have to wait and see what new twists I put to the story.

3384531 Yes, Spitfire is on her way to get some foal-related stuff and a few other things. Concerning Scootaloo, if you think about it, she doesn't know about Ligthning Dust, and concerning the part about being a big sister, I think she would enjoy it, and find the whole scene to be cute, if she finds out about it. I mean if she wanted to be close to Rainbow for the sole purpose of wanting to fly, I don't think she really would have gotten into that sisterly bond kind of deal in season 3. Plus, she'd probably think, if she gets adopted by Spitfire and Soarin, it would be the coolest thing ever, because how many fillies get to say their parents are the captain of the Wonderbolts and her right hoof pony and husband? You'll have to wait and see what happens in future chapters.

I wish you could make your fic chapters a little faster.

It would be my Christmas wish,

Also, try to make them as long as possible, I want to absorb so much cuteness that I burst.

3388401 Sorry, but work eats up a lot of my time, so you have to be patient. Next Chapter will be up by the end of the month, I promise.

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Alright then, I see you're busy with your job

So i guess I'll have to wait then.

Comment posted by Night--Mist deleted Oct 25th, 2013

I'll admit, that was pretty cute.

3415047
Thanks, took me forever to get rhymes that worked for Zecora.

Can't wait to see more of this happy family. :heart:

Beautiful chapter, Nighmist

:yay: definitely worth the wait.

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Sorry it took so long, but it's kind of hard to find a sentences that rhyme when it comes to Zecora that would make sense for the scene.

If I can not rhyme, that is not fine.:twilightblush:

See Spike this is why you shouldn't touch stuff that isn't yours.:eeyup:

3417667
I see a lot of reasoning in your logic that you would want the story done in a certain manner, but there are two words that gives me the power to have everypony act the way they do in these chapters. Alternate Universe. Some of the characteristics that you see in the show may not show in stories like this at some points. Heck I could decide to make them evil if I want, but that won't happen. I will try and change a few thing though, thank you for your input.:twilightsmile:

Interesting scoot adoption as well.

3418652
Hmm, you do have a point to all of that, but too many people have read this already. I don't know how I should correct this without completely throwing readers for a loop.

3422354
I made some corrections I think may have helped in chapter 3. Can you read it real quick and see if it helped.

That orphanage is so cruel. It's a mircale it still exists. :twilightoops:

3424541
You think about it, when given inspection, they act all sweet and make sure the orphans stay in line to make sure they stay open. But eventually, someone will slip up. And now Spitfire's got the goods to take them down.

I say we burn the Orphanage and take the foals out... maybe not in this sequence :twilightsheepish:

3425112
I can see most of what you suggested with the main 6, but I am sure if Spitfire was to explain the events, AJ might be more understanding knowing the girls did it of their own decision. I am sure Twilight would try and find a way to reverse it, even though she knows there isn't anything that can, since it render magic useless towards it's affects. And everyone can theorize about what happens now that the element of loyalty is a foal, but it's just a story. It's not like the show is gonna make something like, this. Right?:rainbowderp:

3425112
Oh concerning Scootaloo's nightmare. To be less descriptive lets the readers be more open to speculate what Scootaloo went through at the orphanage.

3425319
Well, you'll have to wait and see.

3425335
Yeah, you do have a point. I'll try and think of something, but no guarantees right now.

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