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Riossumari


I'm here to write fanfics and love ponies, mostly love the ponies. But writing fanfics is still good.

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in the wake of a terrible accident claiming Velvet and Night light, Celestia takes in Twilight, Shining, and Spike to raise them alongside Cadence in Canterlot Castle. I present an alternate take on Friendsip is magic where Twilight never leaves Canterlot to go Ponyville, and instead relies on her new family to protect Equestria. I give you, the House of Sun.

Please go easy on me with criticism, I havent written a fic in a looonnggg time. Also Im not quite sure how long this gonna be, I'll at least write up to Nightmare Moon's appearance.

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Will the rest of the Mane Six appear?

I'm surprised this doesn't have more views or any comments. This story is great.

Though I have to wonder how Twilight's parents died? An accident? OR, is there something more... sinister afoot?

Yeah, there are several blind spots with canon to be honest. I mean, have we haven't really seen Cadence interact with Celestia much either. I think the chapter book and the IDW comic very briefly touch on this and that's it.

A tad fast with the pacing. Personally I find some of the sentences are a bit clunky with the wording, try using other words to continue with a sentence besides and, I found at least one sentence that could have been better with 'with' instead of and.

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Maybe someone was trying to get to the princess through her personal protege.

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Haven't decided yet, I plan to at least use Rarity.

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It was an accident, I can't say anymore for the sake of what I have planned though.

Decided to add in Sunset Shimmer, It bothers me that we know nothing about how she and Celestia had a falling out. I decided to add her in because it makes no sense to me that she was Celestia's student too and somehow never met Twilight, when last I checked they're close to the same age.

it's always nice to see good old sunset shimmer. if you want to know how sunset ended up having a falling out with celestia there is an entire issue about it in the comic books My Little Pony 2013 Annual

pretty much she believes she was better than anypony else, and (my guess is Celestia spoiled her), eventually Celestia decided to teach her a lesson on humility, looking into the Mirror to the human world she saw her self as an alicorn, and she wanted the power to be Celestia equal, when celestia banned her from studying the mirror due to her not being ready she went behind her back to study it anyway. she then found out that Celestia could turn her into an alicorn. and when Celestia and the guards caught her in the act, sunset demanded that she turn her into one, Celestia then dismissed her as her student and when the guards were escorting her out of the castle she made a break for the mirror to the human world

Interesting looking forward to seeing what happens next.

Story made the feature box on the home page which is how I found it.

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Perhaps Nightmare Moon had a good in it.

Well this seems like a good story so far.

I too have an idea that Celestia and Luna's parents were lost when they were kids, won't share it here, it's kind of a story in itself

You have to bring in the mane 6, maybe they visit Canterlot and make friends with her? Also...Cadence and Shining were about to kiss!! Why did you hafta cut them off? Whyyyyyy?!

I can understand Shining snapping like that. Losing both your parents like that must be hard.

Well that escalated quickly. Nice to see Sunset here, and Twilight has an interesting group of friends. Looks like she’ll have a unique “Mane 6” group.

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Thanks for posting that btw, gives me better idea of where to take Sunset's arc now.

great story i like that you added sunset into the story i hope you don't make her go bad but judging by your tags i'm not sure after all you had Twilight kidnapped in the first 5 chapters so i don't know what your plan is for sunset. I only hope you don't turn sunset bad/evil.

Hmmm.. I mean we do know about their fallout and how it happened...
- mumbles thinking - if I remember correctly.

and ya almost had me there imagine if Celestia would have yelled "where is my DAUGHTER!" In almost full sun goddess mode And twilight yelling out "momma!" now that right there would have been a Spear to the heart.

That was some really painful stuff. Yeah, I can definitely understand Twilight's reaction to her parents dying like that. And, at least Celestia IS making an honest effort to try to help.

All I can say is, really good job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places.

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Indeed it is. Just ask Bruce Wayne.

LOVE the family moments going on here - both the good (i.e. Celestia giving helpful advice and taking them for fun activities) AND the bad (Shining working through his own grief just as his sister is, but exploding worse because he was trying to keep his grief bottled up for too long). And, yeah, I DID love how understanding Cadance was concerning the latter.

Again, the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done.

Whoa. Twi getting foalnapped was some intense stuff. And, yeah, I DID love the scenes in school before that with Moondancer and the others as they met Sunset. Of course, Sunset was actually Celestia's pupil BEFORE Twilight was, but this IS an alternate universe, so we can let that bit slide. And, yeah, I ALSO liked the inclusions of pony counterparts to EQG characters.


And, yeah, LOVED seeing Celly go into Mama Bear mode on the foalnappers as well as her wondering what to do now.

Once more, the exchanges, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up are all well done.

I'll very certainly be looking forward to more of this.

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true but sadly we can one guess as neither of us is the author of this fic but i will still hope sunset doesn't go bad/evil

This story needs some editing to make it more readable and clear. Other then that, nice start.

9869674 maybe it changes to she joins then. She did mention being In a foster home.

I love this concept! Can't wait for more!

cute little update! and expected for what twilight had been through keep up the good work

Poor Twilight, suffering from pstd...

Who knew tough love from Sunset, would be enough to make Twilight conquered her fear and go back to school

Yeah. I can definitely understand how this could happen. Kidnappings ARE a pretty trying ordeal and, even if they are successfully resolved without anyone getting seriously hurt physically, they can still make somebody a little more paranoid. All I can say to Twi's friends and family is - keep trying. She needs it badly (as well as some sort of solid proof that not all griffons are like the ones who foalnapped her).

Anyway, excellent job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places.

Great job on the lessons with Twilight and Sunset as well as Sunset helping Twilight regain the courage to leave the palace grounds again. Yeah, Sunset is competitive, but, in this instance, her heart was definitely in the right places AND she made a fair number of good points.

All in all, superb work on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places.

PTSD is the worst. Twilight is probably afraid that something bad will happen every second she is outside now and she could end up like her parents.

Sunset is a master with tough love. Except in Legend of Everfree that was just bad advice. But it worked here.

When did twilight start calling celestia mom?

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After she got rescued from the foalnappers, she kinda does it on and off again at the moment.

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Awesome. Thank you

Man, Kibitz is a really good employee. Admiring his employer, while telling her the things she needs to hear.

anyone else mentioned you need a breaker between this?

“Twilight, Shining….I’m so sorry”

A week had passed since Celestia had told Twilight and Shining

i got confused for a second. no indication there was a scene change, or time lapse.

That ending was so ominous

REALLY good job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I adored the sweetness of the family moments as well as Celestia recalling her own parents. And, yeah, the chapter's ending makes me exactly the right mix of nervous and curious.

Very certainly going to be looking forward to more of this.

Really heartwarming chapter between Twilight and Celestia, though then it became a bit of a tearjerker towards the end when Celestia remembered Luna.

liking the story, but you need to add 'breaks' where there are time skips and scene changes

I always wondered how the snobbish unicorns of Canterlot would react if it turned out that Celestia and Luna's parents had been earth ponies. Thanks for the notion.

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My headcanons always been Celestia and Luna were Earth pony's before Alicorns. Which explains why Celestia hates high society gatherings so much. Just felt like throwing it in here since I could.

Nice date between Shining and Cadance. Cool we got to see Trixie’s father, and awesome when Shining and Cadance finally told off Blueblood.

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