Purple Is Not Your Color
Chapter 14: Purple Is Not Your Color
Rainbow Dash, what are you doing? Rainbow Dash thought to herself as she trailed behind Rarity on their way to Carousel Boutique. Rainbow Dash felt butterflies fluttering in her stomach, and that was an altogether foreign experience to her. Already, she was having second doubts about this venture, but she had set the wheels in motion and in her opinion there was no turning back now.
You already turned her down, she continued to think to herself, so why are you suddenly so eager to hang out with her? It isn’t…no, no way that can be it. You can’t be falling for her now!
But why not? Rainbow Dash asked herself. She’s certainly a nice enough pony, and she’s the Element of Generosity. Also, she’s not too bad to look at.
You’re going to tear her apart over this, Rainbow Dash tried to tell herself. If you tell her how you feel now, if that’s how you feel now, then she’s not going to believe you. She’ll think you’re just trying to throw her for a loop, and then you can forget about ever being her friend again.
But she already confessed that she loved me. Maybe there’s still a small part of her that hopes, just like there’s a small part of me that hopes to make it into the Wonderbolts someday.
That’s a pipe dream and you know it. Don’t tear her apart!
“Rainbow Dash, are you all right?” Rarity asked. “You seem to be spacing out a little bit.”
Great, now she’s starting to notice something funny.
“I’m fine, Rarity. Just thinking…”
“I already told you I was okay.”
“Not about that!” Rainbow Dash lied. “I was thinking…what if I got into the Wonderbolts someday?”
Rarity tried to let her friend down easy. “They’re an awfully hard group to get into. Not that you aren’t talented, I mean, you pulled off that Sonic Rainboom just to save my life. I’ve never forgotten that day, by the way. Sometimes I still dream about it…” At this Rarity stopped talking and turned her head to hide the blush she could feel rising through her cheeks.
“I know it’s a long shot,” Rainbow Dash said. “I’m not stupid. But there’s just a little part of me that still hopes. Do you know what that’s like?”
For a second, Rarity felt something stir inside her.
“I don’t know what you mean,” she said.
“Oh,” Rainbow said flatly. “Well, it’s enough to keep me going every day through my boring old weather job.”
“Goodness, we’re here already!” Rarity cried as she came upon her boutique. “Let me just unlock the door and you can come right in.”
“Okay,” Rainbow Dash said, resisting the effort to roll her eyes at the obvious. Rarity fumbled for her keys before finally finding them in her saddlebag. She then unlocked the boutique and held the door open for Rainbow Dash.
“Thanks,” Rainbow Dash said. Rarity beamed but tried to hide it.
The two of them got situated upstairs, where Rainbow Dash found a mess of fabric and pony mannequins strewn all about the room.
“And I thought my house was messy,” she said.
“It’s an organized chaos,” Rarity replied.
“Whatever you say, Rarity,” Rainbow Dash said. “Not like I’m one to judge.”
“Well, naturally I don’t keep the store looking like this,” Rarity said.
“I noticed,” Rainbow Dash said, recalling the pristine conditions of the store downstairs.
For a while, Rainbow Dash simply sat in a stool behind Rarity as she worked on a few designs. Occasionally, Rarity would ask Rainbow Dash about whether to use a blanket stitch or what color should adorn the trim. Rainbow Dash said whatever Rarity thought was best was probably pretty good. Rarity always sighed and returned to her work.
After quite some time had passed, Rainbow Dash wondered if coming here had really been worth it after all. She was absolutely no help to Rarity, and as the minutes rolled by she felt an itching need to bolt out of the house and soar into the stratosphere. But she stayed grounded, determined to figure out whether to get this weight off her chest.
I’ve got to lead up with something, do something that shows I care about her, Rainbow Dash thought. Maybe I will model some clothing for her after all. It’s not like I haven’t done it before… Rainbow Dash remembered complaining the entire time she had sat there. She knew if she was going to get into Rarity’s good graces, she’d have to curtail that complaining, something of which she wasn’t sure she was capable. I’ve got to try, though.
“Rarity,” Rainbow Dash said, interrupting the white mare’s train of thought.
“What is it, darling?” Rarity asked. Rainbow Dash’s butterflies fluttered a bit higher at the sound of the pet name.
“I feel absolutely useless. I’m just sitting here, not offering you any kind of help whatsoever. What’s the point of me being here if I can’t help you?”
“Oh, but Rainbow Dash, I ever so much enjoy your company,” Rarity said. “And it’s nice to air my questions out in the open. It helps me think of an answer without the awkward feeling that I’m talking to myself.”
“Well,” Rainbow Dash said, a little taken aback at the strangeness of Rarity’s comment, “you said you had a client with my body type. Maybe I could model a few things for you?”
“You actually want to model outfits for me?” Rarity asked. “That’s it. You’re obviously an impostor. Get out of my house.” Rarity, of course, was only joking, and it showed in her smile.
“Well, it’d be more useful than me just sitting here,” Rainbow Dash said, “so why not?”
“If that’s the way you feel about it, I guess I can take you up on your offer. Luckily, my client is also a pegasus, so the outfits already have holes to fit your wings through.”
“Oh, right,” Rainbow Dash said. “I didn’t even think about that.”
“It always pays to be attentive to detail,” Rarity said. “Let me get one of the outfits right now. You just stand on that platform over there and look pretty.”
“Look pretty?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“Oh, darling, it’s only a figure of speech,” Rarity said with a laugh, but she turned away to hide her blush again. Why did I say that? she thought.
Rainbow Dash did as she was told and stood on the platform while Rarity fished out one of the outfits. It was a gossamer dress of amethyst with a pale pink trim. Rainbow Dash thought it would look absolutely hideous on her, but she told herself to tough it out.
“Let me just magic this on for you,” Rarity said.
“I can dress myself, you know,” Rainbow Dash griped.
“Darling, the material is very delicate. I wouldn’t want you tearing it.”
“All right, fine,” Rainbow Dash said before remembering she wasn’t supposed to be complaining. Guess this is harder than I thought.
Once the dress had been skillfully put on the form of Rainbow Dash, Rarity stepped back and stifled a giggle.
“What is it?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“Well dear, let me just say purple is not your color.”
“I was thinking the same thing,” Rainbow Dash said as she looked at herself in the mirror.
“The dress also doesn’t fit well,” Rarity said, and Rainbow Dash had to admit she hadn’t noticed that. “It’s too wide at the shoulders and too narrow at the hip. And my client and you I swear have almost the exact same measurements. Whatever was I thinking?”
“Can it be fixed?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“I can trim the shoulders back, but dealing with the hip is going to be a more difficult problem. Oh, well, I suppose I’ll just get another dress for you to try on.”
Rarity took the dress off of Rainbow Dash and returned to the closet. Rainbow Dash stood there waiting patiently. The next dress Rarity brought out was a lime green, not unlike the color of Fluttershy’s gala dress. That color had looked nice on Fluttershy, but it was going to clash horribly with her fur.
“Do I really have to try this on?” Rainbow Dash asked. “It’s going to look ugly.”
“I never took you as vain, Rainbow Dash,” Rarity said.
“Well, I do have to look awesome, at least,” Rainbow Dash said, thrusting her chest out in front of her to look more important. Rarity laughed.
“I promise it won’t be on you for very long,” she said, and she placed the dress on Rainbow Dash. Just as Rainbow Dash had suspected, the dress looked hideous on her. Rarity decided not to comment on that, though.
“It’s far too frilly in the train,” Rarity said. “I hadn’t thought it would look quite so ugly, but that’s an easy fix. Now I have one more dress for you to try on…” Quick as a flash, the dress was off Rainbow Dash and Rarity was already back in the closet looking to fish out the last dress.
She brought out a ruby red dress with black beads adorning the bodice. Even Rainbow Dash had to admit that it didn’t look half bad. Rarity swiftly placed the dress on Rainbow Dash, and she was taken aback at how well it suited her body. It was like the dress had been tailor made for her, fitting perfectly from the shoulder all the way down to the train. Rainbow Dash looked at herself in the mirror and almost blushed at how beautiful she looked.
“That is…quite nice…” Rarity said, losing her breath. For a while, the two ponies stood there, Rarity looking at Rainbow Dash and Rainbow Dash looking at herself in the mirror. Rainbow Dash broke the silence with a question.
“Is there anything off about the way this dress fits?” she asked.
“What?” Rarity asked. “Oh, right, the dress. It seems to fit perfectly. I won’t have to make any alterations to this one.” The two stood there again, and Rarity didn’t even try to hide her flushed cheeks.
“Doesn’t this thing have to come off?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“Right, of course, sorry,” Rarity said, quickly taking the dress off of Rainbow Dash and hanging it up in the closet. She returned to the room to see Rainbow Dash staring at herself in the mirror.
“Don’t start to get arrogant about your looks now,” she teased.
“Huh? Oh, sorry,” Rainbow Dash said. Rarity laughed, and the sound warmed Rainbow Dash.
“It’s quite all right, darling. Well, I guess I don’t need to keep you any longer. Those were all the dresses I had for you to model.”
“Right,” Rainbow Dash said, and then realization struck her. “Oh, Rarity, wait. There’s something I’ve been meaning to tell you.”
“What is it, darling?” Rarity asked, looking concerned.
“You’re going to hate me for saying it,” Rainbow Dash said. “Or maybe you’ll like it, I don’t know. I’ve been debating this for a while and I couldn’t find the right time to tell you, and now seems as good a time as any. But I don’t want you to overreact or get upset, because I think you might, and—”
“Rainbow Dash,” Rarity said curtly, “it’s best to just say what’s on your mind.”
“I…well, I think I was wrong when I said I didn’t like you…”
Rarity stared blankly at Rainbow Dash with her jaw open. Rainbow Dash waited for the message to sink in, her butterflies buzzing away in her stomach.
“Is this your idea of a joke?” Rarity asked.
“What? No, not at all! I mean, I was confused about it, too, but the more I thought of it, the more it made sense—”
“Wasn’t it bad enough to reject me the way you did?” Rarity cried, tears starting to form in her eyes. “Now you have to take my heart for a joyride? Why would you say something like that?”
“Because I meant it!” Rainbow Dash shouted. “And I still mean it. I can’t believe it took me this long to figure out. I mean, it was only a few days, but still. It happened because when I broke your heart, I started feeling this enormous guilt and worry about you, and I couldn’t explain where it was coming from. Then when I realized I might be falling for you, I started to question myself, and when I couldn’t find a way to explain how I felt any other way, I fought with myself over whether I should tell you. But now that I’ve told you, and we already know you feel the same about me, we don’t have to hide from our feelings anymore. Remember when I asked if you still held a little hope? I was hoping that you were hoping that I would change my mind about you, and I have. Believe me, I have. So, what do you say, Rarity? Will you be my very special somepony?”
“Resorting to such a childish turn of phrase, are we?” Rarity asked, tears still sliding down her cheeks. She let out a small chuckle, and then averted her eyes. They started to shimmer, and the glistening made her eyes like a pool of emotion.
“You really mean what you’re saying?” she asked, daring to hope again. Rainbow Dash didn’t answer with words. She flew to Rarity and planted a firm kiss on her lips. Rarity squeaked and she felt her heart skip a beat, but when she realized Rainbow Dash was being serious after all, she melted into the kiss and returned it with passion. The two stayed that way for an eternity, but when they broke apart the time had felt too short.
“So what do you say?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“Well, after that display of affection, of course I’m going to say yes,” Rarity said, grinning from ear to ear. Rainbow Dash stole another kiss from the alabaster mare.
“Are you all done with work for today?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“I suppose I’ve made enough progress on my designs,” Rarity said. “Why do you ask?”
“I was thinking we could, you know, cuddle on the bed, for old time’s sake.”
“That sounds lovely,” Rarity said, and she led Rainbow Dash to her bedroom, her heart dancing in her chest. This still seemed too good to be true, but apparently her dreams had become a reality.
Rarity lay on the bed and let Rainbow Dash wrap her hooves around her. The two of them closed their eyes, and Rainbow Dash smelled Rarity’s mane. The scent of lilacs reached her nostrils, and Rainbow Dash sighed with contentment.
“You know what, Rarity?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“Yes, darling?” Rarity said.
“This is way better than sleeping with a Spitfire plush.”
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Well, this was a fun ride! Sorry to those who didn't want to see this story become a romance, but that's the direction I decided to take. Hope you enjoyed, and stay tuned for my Pinkie Pie/Cakes story. I should be posting the first couple of chapters next week.
I can't take any more...
Very nice. I really liked this
2064662 I've heard of worse ways to end a supposed non-romance fic.
It was still good read.
I think I just goti0.kym-cdn.com/entries/icons/original/000/000/115/diabeetus.jpg . Quick, fetch me some insulin!
Commence read.
Thought that the chapter title would push them away. Though it seems to have worked out and all that is out in the open.
Yay, a slightly original story got turned into another dime a dozen romance fic. Joy.
a very heartwarming ending. bravo
Bam! Shipfic out of bucking nowhere!
My jimmies are slightly rustled, but nice work. I enjoyed this story on the most part.
...
Don't kill the moment Dash!
Wait a second...this says complete... D: o well, it was an amazing story, ended perfectly for me, even though i never liked raridash much. good job dood!
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Best kind. The ones that hit you out of nowhere, but that make sense in hindsight.
Even though I don't think of Rarity as a lesbian, THIS WAS A REALLY GOOD STORY!
Seriously, I loved it. Thank you for making my day.
Nice ending!
Good job on writing this.
Have fun writing more!
The Mane six.
(Twilight really)
Holy damn I didn't even realize it was over
I never realize when something's over... 
It was so bucking adorable I can't stand it!!
Well, that was great while it lasted.
What! It can't be over!
I loved this, great work. ^^
Oh, it finished.
I see, well, I enjoyed it, I look forward to anything else you put up.
If love is magic and magic is a form of deadly radiation, than this story has utterly nuked many readers to death with a fluffy beam of d'awww.
That subtle hint from Granny Smith tells me she did a dirty deed with a sibling, or parent.
Cute read all in all.
Well............ITS THE END!?!?!?!? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
Oh well . 
So you're not to expand on Granny Smith's sudden change of heart?
2093645 The circle is completed
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And then Rainbow was all like.
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2226993 Didn't even think of that.
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Certainly started out as a cutesie Non-Rom, felt issues portrayed in it came and went with hardly a passing breath in most cases; for example Spike and Granny's issues never really see any resolution. I did enjoy the overall plot arch, I particularly like the less common Ships. The complication of Rarity trying to entice Rainbow and failing was a refreshingly different start to a Ship, unlike many others where they both always seem to hold secret desires for one another. It gets old reading the same start for almost every Ship, where the only complications that arise are in dealing with the outside issues and stigma's instead of trying to sort the real ones involved with a typical romance, such as actually courting someone.
I have to also state it is very refreshing, again, to see a Ship fic that didn't use sex or explicit text to try and show two characters displaying affection for each other. And even though some people were very childish about their protests at the direction you took with the story. I did agree that this took one hell of a detour from what I had been expecting I can't say it was wrong, just very sudden (insert whiplash joke). To address the dislike of Lesbian Ships, anyone who looks at the description could tell that this was a story about the Mane Six cuddling. It doesn't take a genius to see that this was a very possible, if not practical, direction for the story to take. With the very few male characters in the canon, many people would be hard pressed to Ship the Mane Six with anyone that hasn't already been done a hundred times each. With all that written, I feel I must agree with one of the earlier comments I saw which mentions that there would be disappointment if a town wide cuddling party didn't occur, I was disappointed obviously.
Eventually you'll have to go back and edit the earlier bits of this story, your write quality certainly improved the deeper you got and it would be a terrible waste to not try and spruce up the earlier chapters to match your current level. I was certainly turned off do the very limited display of emotions in the first three chapters, almost nothing more than 'she said, she said, he said'. Not show of possible facial expressions that you use later in the fiction.
TL;DR: This was a very cute concept marred by amateur writing early on, but those interested in a 'different' direction would do well to over look the little things that can be easily fixed in faith a nice Ship concept. Good luck with future writings Cooopercrisp, I will actually look forward to reading more.
I'll be honest, i didn't care for the shipping, but that was a very good story. I loved the part with Fluttershy. She wouldn't let poor RD go at first.
Welp.
Even with my distaste for this specific ship, I can say I made it threw. I really liked it. Not quite so much the part about Rainbow making it into the Wonderbolts being a pipe dream part. 
All in all though, well worth the read. 
Ty.
That just, ended. It was good and I did enjoy it. But there are so many loose threads.
I wasn't liking this history, but, now, I have of to read the end. I have! I MUST!
First:
RainbowDas say: Hug me! _ then, DUN-DUN-DUHM!
Second:
“What? Gross!” Spike protested, but then he looked at the hurt on Twilight’s face and backpedalled. “I mean, not that she isn’t pretty and smart, but she’s raised me ever since I was a newborn.”
Third:
AppleJack say: It's wrong!
Applebloom say: I'm with fear, sis.
AppleJack reply: Nothing wrong over here.
Four:
Granny smith say: It take you for other things.
(Granny smith, what did you made in your youth?!!)
I quite liked this story. It was sweet and cute and, well, cuddly. I felt warm.
Good show, Sir. I'll be the first to admit that warm, "mushy" stories such as this are a welcome break from my standard genre of dark, tragic, sad stories. Fire can't exist without ice, they say. Grammatical errors and missteps are few and far between, the story was interesting (and took many an interesting turn,) and most to all characters seemed in-character (as far as my knowledge/speculation of them goes.) Four Shattered Skulls out of Five, Sir, but just missing out on Five.
Shipping... where's the relevance to the plot? (... you know what? Forget I used those words. -.-)
A.G.
Really? Thats all there is? What about Granny Smiths whole creepy cuddling back-story? Or Rarity telling Spike she isn't into him, like she said she would? And may I say the kiss was unnecessary. I get that you wanted to show a strong affection but the kiss part felt like another stereotypical ship-fic. Oh well, despite some loose ends, it was a pretty good story. I just prefer the first 10 chapters.
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I agree I think that this either needs more chapters (or since the romance arc of this story is over), a continuation / sequel that ties up / follows up on the loose ends of this fic. Which while the fic was good had a lot of loose ends, like 90% of the fic. Such as:
1) Spike's Feelings Arc.
2) The Granny Smith (problems) arc.
3) The Scootaloo Arc (one that had a large part in this fic in the background. But was always just kept as an honorable mention. Twice with Apple Bloom. Once with Dashie. throuhout the story).
4) Twilight's Cuddling Adventures since she said that she wanted to do this as well.
5) Fluttershy's reaction Arc. How she had feelings for Dash that she never mentioned; Wanted Dash with Rarity, but at the same time was shocked that Dash cuddled with other ponies / Rares; How she was so bold / lied about the Cuddle thing; Dash's past crush that she never said anything about but I know that Flutters being as astute as she is would catch up on.
You have alot of stories that can come from this. Or even one story that covers all the arcs above but were left dangling.
I'm not good at pointing out everything I liked in detail, but the story was just phenomenal. So cute, but always such a heart throbbing bite. I actually enjoyed and adored the first chapter the most, though the story would evolve into a full-fledged drama affair of wonder. The interaction of Twilight and Rainbow Dash is what caught me, made me read the whole thing. Which, keep in mind I loved the story through and through, is why my big gripe is so painful.
Why did you essentially blow Twilight off?
You did a great job at keeping her prescence heavy throughout the story, but she was just so incredible and seemingly so important that it's unreal that you could have the final interaction of Rainbow and Twilight be Rainbow stormin out! That's an atrocity upon the story! Not to mention Twilight didn't even make an appearence (hardly mentioned if not mentioned at all, too) in the final chapter? The same pony that played such a significant role throughout the story, especially the vital first chapter? How can you do that?
I'm not even being anti-RariDash. I'm totally happy with the Rarity and Dash arc and whatnot, them fallin in love and such. The story was great! It's just that Twilight was tossed to the side like she was some sort of side-character! She was so astounding within this story that it really and truly pains me that she was just forgotten.
That off my chest, I adored the story. Really. I wish I could adore it without thinking of that gripe, however...
3682778 Let it be said that I don't always make good choices with my ideas when I'm writing.
It's been so long since I looked at this that I didn't remember how Rainbow Dash and Twilight's relationship ended up, but I'll chalk that up to neglect on my part.
I'm still glad you enjoyed the story, and I'm sorry you have that gripe hovering over your appreciation.
Also, thank you for the follow!
3686715 Thanks so much, you're awesome.
3686719 You're welcome.
I really rather enjoyed this fic that'd been in my list for so long.
Certainly earned its like from me, and hopes for a potential sequel
I really like this story. Sure it's got some plot holes and out of character moments just for set-up, but this wasn't supposed to be a major work of art.
You set out to make a cute little story about cuddlin' and ya did. It was really nice to read and I thank you for it. Some people will think it needs sex or more chapters, but you said what you thought needed to be said and that is it.
That's all I gotta say. Good work.
you use the characters full names too much, you dont hear anybody call rainbow dash just "rainbow" or "RD", its always "rainbow dash did this" followed almost immediately by "rainbow dash did that" maybe just call her rainbow once in a while? but other than this minor complaint it was a nice story that i'm glad i found
One area that you mention in the story but I feel does not get enough of an explanation is why Rainbow Dash is so uncomfortable around Pinkie Pie. She is the only one where Dash gets uncomfortable staying with for a long period without a direct reason. Kind of odd to me.
This was... fine.
I remember reading this on fanfiction.net. I hope the transition went well.
This story was very endearing, I say that up front to calm any misgivings.
First half, daww indeed, it was cuddles for cuddling sake even if the writing was a bit simple and the short drama points cropping up were dropped rather quickly - those at least still served a point. It was cute, mission accomplished on all fronts, even if Applejack's ooc moments were a bit thin.
Second half gets a bit... lost. I'd say it had to do with the pacing while shifting gears so quickly, some of those moments needed to be fleshed out a bit more. Perhaps an effect of attempting to build up a conclusion, however at that stage of the story it needs that much more focus if it's to be bothered with.
To get an idea; Rarity's crush starts off nicely paced and detailed, later there's so much flipping in her emotional state and the ensuing awkwardness of Dash trying to still make amends being there as her friend. All in the course of a few days, yeah it would drive them to confusion and Rarity would undoubtedly need some space. This odd standoffish romance in the mix of the Apple family issue and Spikes melancholy... the author put effort I'll actually respect, but story wise something isn't flowing well here. Some have claimed a sequel for the romance side would have been a better way to break it up a bit so each of these could get better focus, maybe that would have taken care of it. There's certainly enough material in each one of these, so that's not the issue for sure.
Towards the ending though, that broke it. Not necessarily as unrealistic, but really gives off a bad vibe for this story. Essentially Rainbow is only giving Rarity a shot out of sense of guilt...
...That's a set up for a very terrible and awkward relationship to crash in flames and many tears. Relationships based on guilt tend to go in vicious cycles that will leave both partners drained. The only saving grace here is Rarity isn't one of those terrible people that tend to manipulate others intentionally via threat of suicide/violence/abuse/financial stability if a breakup were to occur. Seriously watch for leaches like this in real life. And maybe Rainbow genuinely will come to love Rarity in time, but that's one thing missing here, time to really accept it rather than feeling conscience so soon after just having turned Rarity down. This is a bad recipe. Both for the romance between the two to really spark, and for the story itself.
This story started with a cute and pure concept, it achieved that. Then it was sprinkled with short dramas about how it could be taken the wrong way - still relative and making a point, thin as some of them were. One of their friends having a crush on the one going around being cuddly, very nice point to explore here as even Fluttershy seemed clingy, some friends can be like that. But the romantic doubts flying both ways after, in a way debases what the original intention of the story sought out to do.
I just don't feel like all the second half was warranted for this concept, a lot of the secondary plots in effect come off as added last moment to what in the beginning made this seem a very simple tale that needed nothing else to succeed. It's one thing to include the spontaneous reactions of life related and unrelated to the core of the story, but this was a tad bit forced.
Daww achieved, perhaps needs better focus if actually setting out to be taken semi-seriously from the beginning.
I've got no idea what the fuck just happened
I'm up to 'Escapist Literature,' and I have to say, all of the messages about cuddling, Applejack's reluctance, Rarity's hope, all strike me as somewhat euphemistic for casual sex. A lot of it could be interpreted as, ah, beneficial friendships.
Pretty nice story. In a physically affectionate culture, cuddling would make sense.
Needs a bonus chapter or sequel with Apple Bloom sharing the joys of cuddles with her fellow crusaders. "Cuddling is weird." Scootaloo would scoff. Apple Bloom would respond with "Oh yeah? Rainbow Dash does it with all her friends!". To which Scoots might say "Well, if the coolest pony in Equestria thinks it's good, then it must be worth trying." Adorableness ensues.
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Yeah, that subplot was just kind of abandoned, wasn't it? Actually, the story as a whole just kind of ended.
Could have used a chapter (or portion of a chapter) for that subplot, and maybe another for an epilogue.