Author of "Filly Fooling," "Cuddling," and "Spread."
Twilight is busy reorganizing her library one day when an old foe knocks on her door. It's Trixie, and she doesn't look like she's in good shape. It will take some real cunning to pull this magical mare out of her funk and return her to her...former glory?
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my only criticism? spaces
this is just one wall of text, it's really difficult to read.
Hah, that was awesome.
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thats why there are indentations. yes i do personally prefer lined spacing but this is legit and correct use of indentation.
unlike some ppl who do both.
its pretty readable though not how i would write it myself
Using extra lines is only used on the internet. Any publisher would smack you over the head if you wrote with them. How the author here is working is the "proper" way.
the ending seemed a bit rushed to me and you should use spaces more, but other than that, your story checks out fine
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Trixie looks terrible + Spike acts like a jerk to her = does not compute.