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With rent skyrocketing and developers too cautious to build new homes in an unsteady economy, Sunset and her friends jump on the opportunity to buy affordable housing. But when their personal spaces start overlapping and everyone sees a little too much, things get a little uncomfortable.
But maybe by working together, they can find a way to discover a new comfort level. After all, in this economy, it's sink or swim.
Written for the 1000 Words Contest II
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Friggen hilarious
This definitely got a giggle out of me.
Sometimes it's interesting to see the creative solutions people come up with for a shortage of space, such as only 1000
~square feet~WORDS for seven young women to live in.Rather silly,
~but~AND I enjoyed it.Boo.
BOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
Strawberry is a terrible safeword with Pinkie Pie involved. Sooner or later somebody's going to forget to call it "the S. Berry syrup" and ruin the moment.
This is just perfect, quite a winner already.
This sudden shift is hands down one of the best little moments in this whole story.
Perfect title drop.
So, this is cute, and Rarijack always gets bonus points. Also good to see that the girls have laid out some proper rules to be safe about everything. Responsibility and all that.
This said, there's not much to the story beyond a couple bawdy jokes? Which, admittedly, is the point, but I think the 1k word limit is holding the story back. There's a lot fo expositio for not a lot of payoff-- it might've been a little more effective to just jump into the "house meeting" dialogue and reveal the sordid details through that, rather than just laying it all out ahead of time. Likewise, 7 characters is big cast for such a short story-- even though having everybody involved is kind of the point?
So yeah. It's fun enough, but there's also plenty of room to expand it if you wanted to?
This can't be it. This has to be the set-up to something truly exceptional.
So Fluttershy likes the spicy stuff huh?
I laughed the whole time reading this story
It was just brilliant, especially for a 1000 word story that can only have so much. Remember kids, polyamory fixes everything. At least when it comes to these girls' housing crisis. Maybe.
Love this story
a part of me imagen my Pizza Family O.C.s
I wish this could get expanded some day
oh that rate sounds really good right about now!
living in an RV parked on the lawn of her seven-woman polycule’s house, Pinkie is really living my dream here
weeb!
ahaha
very Sci-Twi way to object
yeah, that does seem to be the way things are headed. really makes you think about Society…
i guess the matter-of-factness is part of the comedy but as a lover of the Omniship i do yearn for a slow-burn version of this! very fun idea, thank you for writing!
This is entertaining, but its priorities feel skewed at times. Did we really need all those details about the house and the mortgage? The full list of house rules? Heck, that last “let’s explain the joke” callback to the title is eleven words that could have gone elsewhere. A key part of this challenge is finding the best way to allocate your allotted word count, and you stumbled there. Still, thank you for it.