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Work hard. Learn. And use your skills to better Equestria. That's a worthy goal for anypony!

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The challenge? Daunting. The reward? Worthy. Failure? Not an option. For Big Macintosh has accepted the bet, and thus begins A Ballad of Eeyup and Nope - in which he isn't allowed to say either.

Chapters (13)
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Well this certainly has the chance to be awesome. *read later*

Edit: Welp, looks like I was right. Following.

MrBossMan #2 · Sep 25th, 2012 · · 31 · Nope ·

One of those stories that I'm going to upvote simply because of its title and concept, not because I ever have or ever will read it.

i enjoyed this
:twistnerd:
continue what you are doing.
i approve

This is awesome.

i do like the story and concept (they're great ;p)

but i do think you didn't use the correct formatting –even though what you're doing isn't wrong.

i for one would use a white line when i change of speaker or subject, because of the short sentences.

and not very new sentence needs an indent, only do it when you change subject.

not being mean, just trying to help.
(also see: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xemG7BLk2rvAmQCREIaj5wX2ubvmVt7WziEvh7xXV9g/edit#heading=h.d1cbfc3e386e)

I certainly hope rainbow dash doesn't learn about this bet, she'd try and make him crack.:rainbowlaugh:

Oh the humor and fun to be had at Big Mac's expense. i'm looking forward to more chapters.

A couple of things-
confusion regarding whole/hole and breathe/breath
a few missing end quotation marks

Still funny, and I'm looking forwards to the next chapter.

1337282 I'll switch it around to something a little more my standard - I was messing about with formatting style when I wrote this of a sudden. (I'm using the word formatting correctly, I hope) This story just sorta happened. Thanks for the thought.

1337496 I'll be the first to admit I miss a lot of that kind of thing, but I'll get right on that.

Edit; post - edit. I found a simply embarrasing number of missing end qoutes and shuffled the structure around a bit. It's like I didn't even preread this at all the first time. Or from another angle, it's like I did (i really did) and it just happened to have that many mistakes and flaws. Probably still too many around; 'course, one is too many :ajbemused:

Hehehe, poor Big Mac. And hey, CMC shenanigans! That's always fun :pinkiehappy:

Oh Big Mac, what did you get yourself into? :rainbowlaugh:
Well, challenge accepter for you, now to hope you won't slip up badly (for some reason I'm expecting him to ultimately fail bigtime the very last minute of the day). Looking forward to more! This is going to be fun :pinkiehappy:

You know, all he has to do is say "Aye" or "Nay" instead.:rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy:

No way Big Mac can win this.

Get him to talk to Pinkie Pie, Rarity, or Twilight and he'll break. Twilight would probably have the best chance since she does ask a lot of questions while Pinkie would have the hardest time due to her never letting anyone else having the chance to talk

I really enjoyed this story! Great idea, and you write the characters really well. I did notice some missing words, but nothing that really took away from the story. I'm really excited to see where the story goes! :yay:

1747750

You dick, compelling me to come back to this side-lined story.
BAH, I say. BAH.

Feature box?!

WHEN THE DERP DID THIS HAPPEN?

Now I gotta go back and make the first chapter all presentable, uugh

Edit The Second - chapter 1 now with 20% fewer 'I don't give a flying care' typos. Damnit feature box...

I want to like this story. It's getting started, but it feels a bit ackward to read.

He could get laid x1000 just using his trademark words

this story is Eeyup indeed moar pls

.. Pretty good, actually. I don't know why, but i find this an enjoyable read. Keep it up!

1752102

What a dick. I should demand some kind of recompense for your dastardly ways.

*Reads*

..Eeyup.

(I like this, I should post a more in-depth review later, but I really don't like to review things. However, your story is so nice I'm making an exception.) :twilightsmile:

So, amazing! :pinkiesad2:

Eeyup.

1751887
Tack on another 20% to that? I believe that I noticed a few still.
:heart:
....please don't hate me.....:fluttercry:

1752369

Not at all would I hate you.

And 20% IS the usual joke, but probably pretty accurate too. I kinda suck at editing grammar, especially anything I've done myself. I'm more of an ideas' guy.

a golden smug that lit up

"Smug" is not a noun

Sweetie Belle cautiously inferred,

I don't think that word means what you think it means

tried in futility... exercise in futility,

It is generally considered bad writing to have the same or similar words in close proximity, except for stylistic effect

her free vocabulary
It fell away

I think you're missing some things, and only one of them is a period

1752411 Then it's a good thing I'm here, isn't it? (dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png : Find ALL the typos!)

a pony who keen on

I think you dropped something

Right?”

That quote shouldn't be there

and trice underscored

Did you mean "twice" or "thrice"?

fizzling sparke-sparkles

Do you mean "sparkle-sparkles"?

crap, i hope pinkie and RD don't find out about the bet. there will be no end to the pestering

1751887 Eeyup, you got featured.

Eeyup. :trollestia:

Sadly, I cannot use a CERTAIN emoticon :raritydespair:

1752614 Can I play the "I'll be really good and do this tommorow when I'm not tired?" Prz? Otherwise though, your efforts are much appreciated!

1752770
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!

AJ has now gone all smugface (:ajsmug:) on our favorite stallion farmer!

WHYHYHYHYHYYYYYYYYYYYY!!?? :raritydespair:

1752614
No. Nao! Seriously though, he got all the errors I spotted so :heart:
I don't mind whether or not you fix them up or not, your story your choice. Though most would reccomend it :twilightsmile:

Drat, was hoping for TwixMac :applecry: Maybe things will work out later.

Hah

1752935
Hmmm.... I've never had a Big Mac flavored Twix bar. What does it taste like?

Twilight.... What?
Oh well, doesn't matter, good update nonetheless! WRITE ON, DEAR AUTHOR, WRITE ON!

1753889 Lavender and Apples, with a hint of magic

Eeyup this is a good one.:moustache::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy:

I imagine Big Mac's face when trying not to pronounce the words XD :eeyup:

1752614 IT IS DONE.

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