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After a mishap with a falling star, Princess Luna crashes into Ponyville, only to be saved by Big Macintosh. Overly grateful, Luna calls upon an ancient contract which binds her to the draft pony as his personal servant. Can Big Macintosh co-exist with an overzealous moon goddess, her creepy assistant, and an army of evil looking guards long enough for Twilight to find a loophole to get him out of the pact?

Featured on 9/5/2012

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 365 )

I don't get what you're fretting about, this looks like it will be hysterical.

If you manage to write this well, I am going to laugh my ass off because this is an AWESOME premise. If it's terrible, I'm going to cry.

-Chessie

wall of text... :facehoof:

i don't mind it, but some readers instantly stops reading when being presented to one.

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I think you made me bust a rib.

Thank you.

This has tons of potential. Keep going!!

Definitely tracking.

Also, if Macintosh is going to be Hank Hill, he has to saw "I tell ya what" a bunch of times.

Mac: Eeyup :eeyup:

Caramel: Yup :pinkiesmile:

Buckhour: Mhhmmmm

Luna: *royal canterlot voice* INDEED!!!!!! :flutterrage:

Mac: Okay, That's it!!!!*walks off*:facehoof:

very good idea well written apart from the occasional wall of text. definitely Favorited so i can see the rest but be sure you make it good :heart:

I can see this getting featured.

Lol I can tell this will be good

1224799 Was that King of the Hill? HOO YEAH!!!!
One of my favorite lines is "I don't know much about saints and sinners, but sinners always look good."

At first i was like :ajbemused:
then i was :rainbowderp:
and i liked it
*followed*

lol buckhauer king of the hill finally a good big luna mac story am i the only one who wants to see this ship set sail?

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I'd be ok with the good ship LunaMac traveling the waves. :ajsmug:

This is pretty good, great job. MOAR!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::twilightangry2::twilightangry2:

Let's see where this goes...

1225185 I mean he's the only mortal pony with enough stamina to keep up with Luna physically

(Have now read) Wall of text? Challenge Accepted. Will edit this post after reading. xD Just saw some o the comments though. Wall of Text Challenge Completed. Achievement Unlocked: Staring Contest.

ha funny concept good story.:pinkiesad2: Also i need help, im looking for a story i saw a wile ago, its about how Celestia has been hearing bad rumors about herself around the castle, and she goes on vacation by going through this portal leading to earth.she discovers a human
(forget his name probably started with a C) and she stays with him for a wile. please help it was a good story and want to see if it has updated:raritycry:

This... Is original.
Let the story continue in earnest. I'm most intrigued.

Ah! I was wondering when this would show up. Excellent! I can't wait to see what sort of antics we'll get into with this story! :eeyup::heart:

Am I surprised that this is already rockin' the feature box? Nein. I expected as much to be honest. I don't understand the comments regarding the "wall of text" though... that's not a wall of text, that's light reading. Granted, I may just not be daunted by large chunks of information, but I'd like to think that regardless of the "wall of text" the fact that the chapter is a measly 3K words would make them chew through that big first bite.

Seriously, are you guys impossible to please or what?! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Twilight_Sparkle.png

Maybe he should have asked to have the orchard restored....

intimate to moon alicorn > missing an article there

Something tells me Luna re-acclamation into society hasn't been going so well...dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png

good concept... I'll be watching :trixieshiftright:

So many possibilities as to how this'll play out. :rainbowlaugh: I came for my two favorite ponies, stayed for the hilarious dialogue and pro writing style. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Princess Luna, the indentured servant to Big Macintosh . . . he's one lucky stallion.

1: King Of The Hill reference.
2: Big Macintosh- Luna shipping

3:Comedy

A favorite and Like indeed.

*CLAP CLAP CLAP*

I love this. Need more. Please comply. Resistance is futile.

MOAR I SAY! MOOOAAAAR!!! All joking aside, this really is a good story.

Cooliofir135
:derpytongue2:

Oh my Celestia! 1st chapter made my laugh so hard ... xD

Onhonhonhon~ We'll see where this goes... :raritywink:

This will be interesting. :twilightsmile:

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I believe the story your looking for is "You Brighten My Day" by JaydexTheShadowKnight

Now as for this story, fantastic premise, you sir have earned my fave, like, and watch, can't wait to see what's coming next.

I'm seeing Luna in a French Maid outfit because that's what all those videos showed on how to serve your master. And Big Mac panicking.

Ohhhhh this is going to be... FUN! :pinkiehappy:

... Whut? A Fic about Big Mac and Luna that DOESN'T have shipping in it?! I CALL SHENANIGANS!
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(*Goes to read it anyway*)

The Good: I like where this is going. This has been a great read so far.

The Bad: You should find an editor. I saw a lot of little grammar errors. In fact, when I'm done my current chapter, I'll re-read it with my editor hat on and give you a cleaner copy. :twilightsmile:

Please note that while the bad has more text, the good far out weighs it. :pinkiehappy:

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Big Mac gets a chance of a lifetime (not to mention an easy quick-fix for restoring the damage done by the falling star) and he wants to reject it?
OH the Ponieity!



*reads anyway*

I love this.. So much...

It's a very very interesting story.
A silent and shy Stallion (He thinks it's nothing)
versus
an over-enthusiastic Princess/Godess (She thinks it's everything. He saved her life)

Lord Big Mac
"Ah reckon' y'all better get in touch with that librarian friend o' yours."
I can't help but laugh. Thank you, your fiction gives me a good begining of my day!

MOAR! plz
MOAR!!!!!

luv it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *reads ending* :flutterrage: ARRRRRRRRGHHHHHHHHHHHHH CC LLLLLLLLLIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR:flutteRRAGE:

Liked and faved!

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