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"Gather round, I got a bit of a story to tell. It don't got much to do with princesses, dragons and the like- not even much of a happily ever after. But things worked themselves out all the same."

"This is the tale of a little filly, no older than the ones you see scurrying about town- futures as bright as their smiles."

"The Kid ain't have it so lucky."

"Her classmates, even some of her friends would poke fun at her. Some even called her a chicken.

Children can be cruel like that.

One day, Kid got some news, started believing all that hogwash. Broke her little heart something fierce. But between you and me, Kid had more guts than any chicken I seen."

"I should know, because I was there..."

(Narrated in the voice of Ruck from Bastion.)

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Very nice story. Kudos.

Very touching story. Good work.

By the end of the story, my thoughts were "OH GOD THE FEELS"

Very nice! I'm a sucker for Scootaloo stories, but this one certainly played the heartstrings well!:scootangel:

Well done!:pinkiehappy:

Ooh, something I had to actually have a certain voice narrating it! Nice!
Very good story, really liked it.

I read this entire story in Ruck's voice. It was GLORIOUS.

Loved the perspective. Loved the dialogue. :scootangel:

Is it wired that I read it in Ruckus's voice before I saw that is was?

:moustache:

I read "narrated by Ruckus" and immediately thought Uncle Ruckus.
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2152080 I lol'd at that picture :3

And now everything else I read today is going to be narrated in Logan Cunningham's voice.

OK, I'm not even halfway through the first paragraph, and you've already earned a like. This is seriously the best possible thing.

Oh my god I'm in love...

With this story I mean.

Wow! Take my like!

Okay, looking over this a bit, I am extremely interested.

Kid woke up at the crack of dawn, alarm clock on her nightstand sounded like it was gonna raise Tartarus by itself.

At first, I thought this was a grammatical error, but as i read on, this is used as a form of repetition, and I realize that you've done this to set a tone, which is rather genius. They way you've written this is choppy and clunky, but it works that way, because that's the feel I'm getting. You set an amazing tone, and I love it.

So wow. Amazing work. Seriously.

Wow.

congrats on the Feature.

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I know right? I flipped out when the end of the summary actually matched up with the goofiness in my head.

Didn't even have to tell me it was the voice from Bastion. Whenever I get text formatted like this my brain is hardwired to think that way.

This is amazing.

Good job on the story description.
What you intended to do worked on the first sentence for me.

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I saw the title and immediately thought "oh please let this be what I think it is" AND THEN IT WAS.

D'aaw this was sweet :rainbowkiss::scootangel:

I suppose the "narrated in the voice of Rucks from Bastion" part was for the people who haven't played Bastion?
You get kinda programmed into hearing it whenever it's formatted like this.
Seriously, his voice is addictive.
...
I NEED MORE RUCKS VOICE. GIVE IT TO ME. IT'S MIIIIIIINE.

I would have rewritten one line, to keep to the tone:

And three: Don't take no for an answer. Find a way 'round it and prove them docs wrong.

I do like how you did work in those silly suggestions I made in #fimfiction. :scootangel:

A fic written in the style of Rucks' narration? I AM SO READY FOR THIS.

When you're rife with devastation
There's a simple explanation:
You're a toymaker's creation
Trapped inside a crystal ball

And whichever way he tilts it
Know that we must be resilient
We won't let them break our spirits
As we sing our silly song

When I was a little filly, a galloping blaze overtook my city
So they shipped me off to the orphanage. Said, "ditch those roots if you wanna fit in"
So I dug one thousand holes and cut a rug with orphan foals now
Memories are blurred, and their faces are obscured, but I still, know the words to this song

When you've bungled all your bangles
And your loved ones have been mangled
Listen to the jingle jangle
Of my gypsy tambourine
Just cut off your wings and make new one's that WILL work. Like a machine or something. Every heard of How to raise a dragon? Well, it would be like fixing his tail. Or like how The old dude used magic with a broken horn.

When is saw the title, i immediately thought, 'Raspy voiced Narrator guy from Bastion'
Guess i was right!

Scootaloo is not a t2.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcS6uRvVpP-KQQNxLabrXhpuAP2C1Uz5RtiS9GMIMsbzYcjkkZ8Jpw :ajbemused:

IF ANY ASSHOLE CALLS HER A CHICKEN I SWEAR TO GOD THEY WILL HAVE THE WORST KIND OF RAPE THAT THEY WILL EXPERIENCE OF BEING RAPED!!!!:flutterrage::pinkiecrazy:

I can almost hear the sound of Rucks narrating. It sounds that close, and I love it!

2153242 Let's not joke about rape, okay? That hit isn't for jokes.

I will read this later, but I am following you now because of your avatar.

We need more fics in Ruck's narrative style.

Inevitably clopfics, of course.

Kid doesn't normally like Scoot fics. Decides to give it a chance 'cause of Rucks.

Is pleasantly surprised. He decides to thumbs up and favorite. A good narrator'll do that for you.

Edit:

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Kid notices the PC police are at it again. Rolls his eyes and wonders what is worthwhile for jokes with those overly white-knight people.

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Kid just rages for a while...

All I can hear is Ruck's glorious voice!

Now to uh... read more than a paragraph.:twilightblush:

heh-heh.

Sounds pretty good. I shall read! :flutterrage:

Aaaand now you made me want to go back and play it again. Let's listen to Build That Wall and see if some of that desire is satisfied.

But really, amazing work on staying true to Ruck's speech pattern. Scoots does seem like the ideal Kid.

Holy crap, it was so good. :pinkiehappy:
Now it made me thirsty for food and coffee.
I give this :scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel: our of 5.

:rainbowdetermined2:two words for ya :
so. awsome.

Oh sweet Woona, you must right more!

Or... somepony! Anypony! More Rucks/Fracas!

WOO!

You didn't even need to tell me who it was narrated by, started reading it in ruck's voice as soon as I saw the story.

Dont Fuckin Cry..........:fluttershbad:

(Narrated in the voice of Ruck from Bastion.)

Didn't even get that far before I started reading the summary in his voice.

dang, now I want the sequel!

Really loved it. faved and like.

Nice story. Scoots is adorable.

They didn't call rainbow loyalty for nothing. Kid could still feel feel Rainbow getting upset.

So she could 'feel feel' Rainbow getting upset? That's a pretty deep connection if you ask me.:trollestia:
Also, capitalize 'rainbow'.

You did a good job with this, sir. I liked it.

Good news everyone: You didn't need to tell us who it was narrated by, that was obvious. Sort of like how I'm Professor Farnsworth.

The story was still nice though.

Comment posted by Sausage Enlarger 5000 deleted Feb 21st, 2013

It's nice to see a "Scootaloo can't fly" story that's unique. That was really well done, and touching.

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