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"Inspiration does not come to the lazy. It only comes to those who call it." - P. I. Tchaikovsky

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You unlock this door with the key of imagination. Beyond it is a dimension of sound. A dimension of sight. A dimension of mind. You’re moving into a land of both shadow and substance, of things and ideas. You have just crossed over into... The Twilight Zone.


On a normal June day, Bright Mac and his wife, Buttercup were about to head into town for a quick errand while they left their children with their grandmother until they get back. On the way, Buttercup expresses her concerns about if they were good enough parents that their children would become good ponies like themselves. But before they could proceed any further, they remember that they had to go back to Sweet Apple Acres to receive something that they have forgotten. It is when they get back that the story really begins.


As you can guess, this is an AJ’s parent’s story that I’m doing it in the style of a Twilight Zone episode. Also, keep in mind that this is currently unedited. So if there is someone who is willing to volunteer to proofread it, please PM me to discuss it with me further.

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This tells how Applejack's parents died, right?

Awesome start

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Somehow I doubt it, but I a curious did some one or something decide to grant their wish because they/it knew they were going to not live to see their kids grow up?

Wow, this is a brilliant idea.

Interesting story right off the bat!

Oooh, things are getting juicy.

here song I think would what lesson for story
https://youtu.be/EyEHEFkJh80

I'm the only one imagining the story in black and white lol :heart::twilightsheepish::heart:

Nice start! I think I understand this. This shows that Bright Mac and Buttercup (Pear Butter) are in the future after they unknowingly died from some terrible fate. I bet they would get to see their fates before they have to get prepared in the present day

Really interesting so far. Can't wait to see where this goes.

Ahh Grand Pear gets to say goodbye to his daughter doesn't he? It's going be hard for Bightmac and Pearbutter to go home, knowing they are going to die and won't be able to avoid it, it's already happened. Depending how old Applebloom is they might go home with a few months, weeks or just days left.

(clap) (clap) This was one story that we enjoyed from beginning to end!!

The concept was great, the execution was perfect, and the characters and their reactions were spot on!!

All in all, 11/10 author!!!

Awesome ending and story

Very well done. I'm glad Grand Pear finally got closure and forgiveness from his daughter. Though I'm curious about why they wouldn't even speculate if they could prevent their deaths. We know the closed loop time travel was kind of broken with Starlight. Though as that episode showed, changing the past can have dire unintended consequences. Oh well.

After reading this I give a big kudos for getting the felling of Twilight Zone just right. I like how you still remind it vague of how they died. I also this acted as unofficial sequel to 'Perfect Pear." I feel that Pear Butter and Bright Mac now one they are going to die one day and they are going to make the best of it. This what I loved about this story Pear Butter was clever. She deducted what was going to happen to them once Apple Bloom was born. . I would love for you to make more Twilight Zone/MLP fics. You nailed Twilight Zone vibe on head and you should continue.

I want this to be a real episode, if not then something that happened in canon. :raritycry:

Only one important error I want to point out: You misspelled Sugar Belle's name.

Lovely. Simply, lovely.

the twilight zone is one of my favorite classic tv shows!:pinkiehappy:

I loved this. You should do more of these.

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