After Twilight is crowned the ruler of Equestria, she feels sorry for Cozy Glow being petrified, as she is just a filly. Feeling sorry for the foal's fate, Twilight decides to release her from the statue prison. But after doing so, Twilight realizes that Cozy is no longer that megalomaniacal filly from before, but just a filly that is emotionally unstable. Cozy reveals something to Twilight about her. Twilight then realizes that she will have to play an important role in Cozy Glow's life.
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Nice! I always found it strange for a kid to be sent to Tartarus and turned into stone. I mean, sort of looks wrong for a kids show, especially with that fearful expression.
And I always thought it strange for a kid to be able to plan this. Why? They could have given her a background, like loss of family through a magic accident or something.
BUt that makes me very welcxome for those wanting Cozy has a better ending
This needs a sequel.
Little nitpick here, Cozy is a FILLY not a colt.
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I was thinking of writing a sequel where it involves Cozy meeting Flurry Hearth and resulting in them falling in love
The idea isn't bad, but the story itself feels very rushed.
Odd that Mayor Mare wasn't surprised by Twilight's request.
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Don’t forget about the Mane 6. Also, an even better story would be Cozy becoming Flurry’s sister.
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I'm sorry that the story was rushed. But that’s all I could think of
That was great. I'm impressed. Plus, Cozy Glow's telling to Twilight that she doesn't have a family and that she's been living in the streets was sad.
This feels a bit rushed, and some of the dialogue is repetitive. Still, I like the idea of Cozy being reformed and Twilight taking her under her wing. Honestly, I'd rather see Twilight become a mentor to Cozy than Luster Dawn.
I got chills up my spine.
I need it! I need a sequel!... Now, ending with jokes...
Not bad, I really liked the story, a little rushed and quick, but... a good. Good job, mate!
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I plan to write a sequel, yes. And as for the rush, I'm sorry.
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Don't worry, in comparison, my stories are just bullshit. I'm never able to write a good story and end it without some problems.
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It doesn't matter what background she has. Her age has no meaning. She was capable and willing to be a threat to Equestria - which is the same as a threat to the entire planet. Turning her to stone is a merciful outcome for threatening the world. Stone doesn't hear, think, or feel. One day, when they can figure out how to forcibly reform her, they can un-petrify her and then remove her from the villain list.
But up until that point, Cozy is not a child, or a lost sad woobie, she's a willful villainess who almost managed to usurp the demigod-like rulers who maintain the celestial dance and thus all life on the planet.
Giving her a backstory and reason to explore can be a very interesting story premise, but becoming an apologist for villains is never interesting. Acknowledging what she is, and exploring why she's an evil, powerful being, is completely proper. But she does deserve her punishment.
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Do you got any evidence that proves Cozy Glow isn't a child? Let me answer for you, NO.
Let people have their own opinion about Cozy's punishment, just because you fine with it doesn't mean anybody else have to.
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YOU TELL HIM!
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Seems you're spouting nonsense, so let me help you understand.
When I say Cozy Glow isn't a child, I'm saying that any protection-of-the-innocent afforded because of someone being a child must be suspended in her case. A child is to be protected because it is weak and innocent. She is neither weak nor innocent. She is a massive threat the like that can cause the death of most beings on the planet due to her machinations including the Sisters. Thus she cannot be considered something that needs to be protected, or as a troubled little thing that made a mistake. A hug and a juicebox doesn't solve what she wants to do, or what she is.
All the actually innocent children the world over might have died had she gotten her way. Would you sacrifice them for the one who is putting them at risk? That's an act of evil.
Could things be totally different in this story? Certainly, author's choice - they can make up new reasons for the whole thing, change her whole character to fit their idea, and make a wonderful story out of it that'd be a touching piece to read. But the villain apologists for the canon character, that's just a little ridiculous. Same boat as the people who say Starlight Glimmer, Chrysalis, Nightmare Moon, Discord, Tirek, and Sombra did nothing wrong.
Just because you like a character, even a villain, doesn't mean they're not a threat. So, if you're allowed to have your opinion on these apologists, and are allowed to state it, then I am allowed to state my opposing opinion. Otherwise that's not fair, am I right? Yet because I disagree you start making this personally-directed. Maybe the villain-loving makes a bit more sense, now.
Either way, I've said my piece. All of you have fun. So far as what I can see, this is a good story even if I don't agree with the premise. If any of you feel like making any more personal attacks or insults, which I know several of you want to, bring them to my PMs so you aren't clogging up the author's comments with pure inanity.
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Blah Blah Blah... You're just silly. :P
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Actually he's not wrong, children have been shown becoming villains for no other reason than "I hate you" in almost all types of media
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Emphasis on ALMOST.
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I was pointed out the fact that most fans are uncomfortable that a child got turn into stone, you don't need to go on debate mode. While I do think Cozy deserve her punishment but I do believe there are other alternatives.
I'm not interested in starting a debate with you, have a nice day. I got better things to do then arguing with you.
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Well done my pupil. X3
Man....imagine Cozy Glows parents show up to Ponyville only to find out she got turned into a statue, the heart break.
Actually..is Cozy Glow an orphan, or is she just a run away
I have to agree with others that this story is rushed, which is really tragic because I too feel like Cozy's punishment is unfair. It wasn't even her fault that she was in a position to take over Equestria. She was freed by Discord who only wanted to use her for his own twisted way of "helping" Twilight. And he was perfectly willing to betray her along with the other villains he freed the moment it backfired.
Cute story. But things are happening so fast, it feels like watching a typical MLP:FiM episode where writers try to squeeze a lot of story and events into 21 minutes, but here, instead of 21 minutes, everything is squeezed into 5 minutes (or even less).
"You alright?" or "Are you alright?"
Was Twilight crowned princess of Equestria on the same day they defeated the trio in this story? Hmm, I wonder why?
Revision recommendation: Twilight entered the castle gardens, skimming through its lustrous paths until she finally found the statue she was looking for.
Revision recommendation: Her magic enveloped the statue of Cozy Glow.
Cozy must be really good at making false documents to deceive Twilight.
Revise recommendation: But then she hugged the filly in return with a smile.
Did you meant that Twilight has to purchase a bed for Cozy? I think she can save more time by giving her a guest room to sleep in. The Canterlot Castle does have guest rooms, right?
Where are we going? or Where are you taking me?
Really? I would think first matter of business to be establishing the approval of Spike and the guards that are residing the castle. I wouldn't think they will react nicely to Cozy's freedom.
Cozy is truly a complete mystery. If she truly was an orphan, then would the reason she sought the power of friendship was in order to always have a circle of friends so that she wouldn't ever be alone? Perhaps that desire got perversed or greedy along the lines and she aimed for a higher goal to become the queen of friendship (I think that's what she said, right?).
Anyway, this was pleasant story to read. I hope for a sequel.
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I'm curious as well as to why she did what she did. It always bothered me that her purpose wasn't explored in the show. A user told that sometimes that a person not having a reason can make them the biggest threat (sort of like the eye creature from Lord of the rings), which you can argue earns her the spot as the final villain of the series. I'm not particularly a fan of that, as I like to see the antagonists fleshed out as much as the protagonist.
I agree that most would not easily forgive for what Cozy had done for turning all tribes of Equestria against each other and accidently bringing back the wendigoes to freeze the lands, but I don't think that's entirely relevant in this current story right now. This story is just to set up the premise for what is likely to come. The next story will perhaps expand upon that since Cozy will have to attend school again and participate in society. Twilight and Spike are willing to forgive her, but that isn't to say that every creature will. Not everyone is as forgiving as them. Cozy and her new family (actually, how would Shining and Twilight's parents react to Cozy's adoption? That'd be interesting to see) will have to struggle to make peace with those individuals. Some will forgive her, some will not (just like how Nyx was not forgiven by Diamond Tiara in Past Sins.)
We'll just have to wait and see where the author decides to go with it. Either way, I commend Twilight star for sharing this idea and await for the sequel.
... this didn't come off negative, did it? I really like to discuss ideas with people, but I don't want to come off offensive. I recently critiqued someone else's work and it inevitably came off that way. We're cool now, but I want to try to be more mindful of my words.
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Not at all, unlike some people you've been very polite, well-reasoned, and interested in both the canonical premise that's been adapted here as well as the discussion of its situation. You've also not been a villain apologist about it, either. Very good on you.
Yes, as I mentioned the author can change anything they like for the sake of making a good story. We can only see where things might go.
Everyone was too quick to accept Twilight’s decision.
The story had good concept, but it wasn't writing very well. No offence.
It needs a lot of grammar and spelling changes. And I think you wrote this in a rush because there are some word mistakes too.
You should have said "Soon, she'll return soon." or "Soon, she is going to return soon."
You should have said "Twilight? Where are we going"
You should have said "Twilight? Is everything alright?" or "Twilight? Are you alright?"
Also, I feel everyone was to quick to except her decision. It would have been more interesting if they didn't trust Cozy at first.
And I also think you over used the word 'stone prision'
You could have used words like 'stone case' instead
Just some feedback for you to improve!
Definitely rushed but I like it. I myself have family issues. Wasnt an orphan, didnt meet my biological family but heard some bad things about them and that can cause scars.
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I don't need it.
I don't need it.
I don't need it.
I NEEEEEED IT!
I know this is sort of hypocrisy when I say this seeing as my stories aren't much better, but I think you could write much better stories by 'Showing not Telling."
For example:
It felt as if you were just laying down the facts. It didn't sound natural, I understand you were trying to portray the moment in time by stating "Yes, Twilight. Chrysalis, Cozy and Tirek tried to dominate Equestria through fear" But it sounds blunt and... automatic. There is no feeling.
Instead of saying, "Twilight, I don’t understand", Spike could "scratch his claw on his head and cast a confused glance at Twilight"
Despite my pettiness, I still think this is a good idea for a story, just a bit rushed, but I still enjoyed it!
(Sorry if I offended you)
-Meowofy
Twilight Star please make more chapters for this new family or make a sequel for this story
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I'm writing the sequel, it's almost done
10265951 yay and will it have a lot of chapters in it?
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It's actually a one-shot
10265953 aww i was hoping it would have a lot of chapters in it, because i want to read about this new family doing a lot of things together
10265953 i really do
10265953 plus i can't get enough of this cute new family
10265953 do you get of what i am saying to you
10265953 one more thing i am sorry for sending a lot of replies to one of your reply
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It's okay. I'm not mad at you
10266050 ok but i am still wondering about do you get of what i am saying to you?
/10266050 i am hoping you get of what i am saying to you
Please make this a series! Twilight as Cozy's mom is adorable!
Arrgh I just can't give this a thumbs up. Cozy doesn't demonstrate any understanding of what she did wrong and why it was wrong. I get that she's a filly, but the original series demonstrates that she is a scheming mastermind, so she should have the mental capacity to understand.
I keep hearing the phrase 'statue prison' over and over again and it's aggravating. It's okay to change up the wording so it isn't repetitive.
It also needs some serious proofreading. I'd like to see this story improve.
I have always tended to like stories where Cozy doesn't suffer that fate although most stories with the alternate ending result in her, Tirek and Chrysalis ultimately somehow reforming and them becoming a family. I read one series where they go from being villains to winding up as a very well adjusted family, more well adjusted that even most pony families. Still a great story though. Cozy's emotions and Twilight's empathy really make this a great story. Now I do have my own theories about why she turned out she did but that is something I plan on throwing into a story I'm working on regarding her right now.
Great idea but it felt a bit to quick. I’m surprised there weren’t more reactions to Twilight adopting Cozy Glow. After she’d become a villain you’d think there’d be strong reactions to it.
Twilight closed her eyes while covering her face with a hoof.