The villains seem to finally have the heroes in their sights. It seems that the Legion of Doom will come out on top. Until Spike makes a split-second decision to save his friends and home, but it comes with a hefty price. Now Twilight and her friends must find a way to cope with in the wake of this tragedy.
The Ending Of The End Rewrite.
Cover art is by the amazing BiggerNate91
Rated T for moderate descriptions of injuries, blood, character death, sporadic mild language, and dark nightmares.
Other Characters include:
Princess Celestia and Luna
Starlight Glimmer
Thorax
Ember
Discord
CMC
Garble
Smolder
Big Mac
Luster Dawn
Cobalt Blitz (OC)
Chapters (11)
Oh dang that was sad it's really hard to see spike to die like that 😔 not just only the Main 6 ember thorax but most of the creatures seen the Fallen Hero 😢
Good start. When reading this, I could hear this remix in my head nonstop. https://soundcloud.com/user-241123070/heroic-fall-epic-ost-mix
what will the other chapters explore? where will this story go?
Me (Melee): *comforts Discord*
Nice concept, I made a similar story, but you showed Spike no mercy. I hope you read it. Also I wonder how Starlight will feel about losing one of her friends. Hopefully you aren’t too hard on Discord.
I’m not crying.
Yes you ar-
No I’m not.
You are-
I have no idea what you’re talking about, I am not crying.
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It's okay. Just let it out.
Why Spike?! Why?! I hope there will be a chapter where Spike will be brought back to life!
The idea is good but it just stopped at the horror of Spike's death. I think it would have been good to add scenes of comfort in which the characters support one another. The bloody depictions weren't really needed in my opinion. I also recommend not using meta names like "Mane 6" in the story itself, as the girls never called themselves like this in canon.
Edit
I guess somebody doesn't like the song
I hardly ever cry, but this was too much to bear.
Hmmm. I made this picture on Derpibooru a while back, and someone in the comments of said picture wrote a short story very similar to this concept. Any relation?
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I don't think so. I didn't even know about that pic until you brought it up.
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Am I the guy you’re talking about?
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Not quite. I was referring to this story in the comment section of the picture I linked.
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I plan to have the Girls, Ember, and Thorax comforting one another after the next chapter.
Great job... you made me cry, XD... I am glad this didn't happen in canon though, that would make everyone, even the Spike haters, bawl their eyes out.
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I think it should've, no I don't hate Spike, but I think it would've been nice to see him prove his worth in this way.
I'm having troubles with the next chapter.
WARNING: For those who don't want spoliers, don't continue.
I've managed to get all the Mane 6's funeral speeches written down, but I'm having trouble with the structure of Applejack's funeral speech. I've decided to include the time he worked endlessly for her after she saved him and how he was honest when he told his friends that he was just glad they were safe. I would also like some help writing Starlight's funeral speech, because I'm having a bit of writers block on that.
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You need help with Starlight’s speech huh. Well I could help with that if you want.
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Sure, but put a spoiler over it please? I don't want anything revealed to anyone else.
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Okay then.
(Warning: Don't continue if you don't want spoilers)
Perhaps have her say stuff like how he was always there for her, and how he was always willing to help her and even after her many screw ups he still accepted her for who she was, and never stopped considering her as a friend.
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Thank you for the suggestions. Your points work perfectly.
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Cool, so when is chapter 2 coming out? Hopefully soon.
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I'm hoping it's finished by the 21st, but we'll see.
Omg, I am literally picturing their faces and it’s so bad.
Spike is that definition of a “ride or die”.
I feel like rarity is going to be so traumatized.
I didn’t even know ember could cry tears.
Thorax, it don’t matter if you a king, you can break down if you want to.
Why was it up?
What’s the difference?
You may have forgotten the Yaks, or Buffalos?
And Discord is absent? Then again. He did started this whole mess by forming the Legion Of Doom! 😤
I hope you learned your lesson discord you fucking bastard
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Discord Dies Search Party?
Where are Big Mac and the CMC? Aren't they Spike's best friends?
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Yeah and what about pee wee ( the Phoenix that Spike protected ) and little heartstrong?
I am so glad you gave Starlight a major role, her friendship with Spike is sort of overlooked a lot, so thank you for including her. Also wow you actually used my idea for Starlight’s speech. I’m honored, thank you for that. Now also I have some things to address, where is Discord? I think he would’ve showed up to the funeral, though you probably have something planned for him later. I really hope you aren’t too hard on the guy, he never meant for any of this to happen, I’m sure the guilt he carries is punishment enough.
That young huh, eh I guess that’s fair, he is whatever age you want him to be, but for me he is likely 14 or higher because he was allowed to participate in the Gauntlet Of Fire, and he was allowed to work at the School Of Friendship with EEA approval, also it’s confirmed he’s 7-10 years younger than Twilight in Pony years. I could be wrong but that is only my opinion.
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If you think about it he's probably hiding because you know who's going to blame him for what he did and what he cost so maybe he'll come out of hide and tell everybody is gone then probably he'll say something to him but it's just a guess
10631434 The author doing that, as much as we would like to see that happen, would dishonor and negate Spike's sacrifice.
Sometimes, in stories like this, as much as it hurts, the dead must STAY dead.
Or, as it says in the Bible, "No greater love hath any man (or dragon, in this case) than this, that he lay down his life for his friends".
Now we'll get to see what happens to the Legion of Doom™.
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You missed them too, 1jckun??!!
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Tempting?
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Tell that to the every Variant of Dragon Balls ( Earth, Namekian, Black Star, or Super Versions.).
Or Necromancy from probably Discord or even Twilight, IF they were that desperate enough.
10641122 I tend to ingore those, as I absolutely despise anything Dragonball related.
As to that, no.
Just... no.
For one, as much as she wants him back, I very much doubt that Twi would do that.
And I don't think Discord would, either.
As I said earlier, to bring Spike back after he gave his life to save those he loved would not only dishonor his sacrifice, but cheapen it, as well.
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Okay. You don't like Dragon Ball?! But, despise it??!! Jeez!!! Okay!
As for the rest of your Comment on about the Necromancy 'Option'. I did say 'probably', earlier. So, I also agree that Twilight, and even Discord wouldn't do that reckless. And as you said. Don't dishonor Spike's Heroic Sacrifice.
Just want to put in some Crazy What If Scenarios.
10641172 Okay, maybe "despise" was more than a bit strong.
I'm just NOT all that much into anime and I tend to react pretty... strongly... to it in most cases.
Trust me, though, I don't get as vitriolic about it, and it's variations, as I do to anything and everything Power Rangers.
Can-NOT stand that show!
Sorry if I came on a bit strongly about it.
Thinking back, yeah, you DID say that.
*nods*
Indeed, and there's nothing wrong with that.
I have to wonder what's going to happen to the Legion of doom after this, though.
Guess we'll just have to wait and see.
Unless I somehow missed that being mentioned in this chapter, that is.
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Your Opinion. And I'm actually a Fan for DB/DBZ/DB GT/DB Super/DB FighterZ/Xenoverse 1 and 2. While I agree that DB Heroes is a bit Silly.
And while I also Love Power Rangers. It can get Confusing with the MANY DIFFERENT Teams??!! And So much Dinosaurs, Samurai, Ninja Ranger Types??!! 😵
At least S.P.D is the only Space Police/Cop Theme Power Rangers or Mystic Force with Magic/Warlock/Witches.
As for the Legion Of Doom. I hope they screwed themselves, and get a Worst Punishment! Way Worse Than Death itself!!!
I'm more concerned with Discord. He is Guilt Ridden like Everypony/Everyone. BUT, he indirectly caused Spike's Death by freeing and forming the Legion Of Doom in the first place.
So the main 6 and Starlight along with ember and thorax made it back to the castle of friendship and all of them are still moaning and crying until 3 days later they had a funeral for him and there was a lot of familiar faces there to say their piece and everything everybody was very emotional after the ceremony was done the unveiled the statue of him for his bravery and sacrifice it will be a long time for anybody to recover but they will never forget Spike who save them all
Just a little quick one here I noticed the absence of the Yaks and the Buffaloes and little hearts strong should be there because she was pretty close to spike from the last episode and I'm surprised smolder friends did not comfort her they should I mean it's cool that garble was there for her but the other young 6 should be with her as well
should be family.
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Fixed that. Thank you.
Update: as of 1/22, Big Mac, the CMC, and Peewee are now included in the funeral chapter. I apologize for not including them the first time, I had a memory blank.
10642109 Thanks.
And that's your right, just as it's mine to NOT like 'em.
And yeah, that's what gets me about PR, other than that I just outright don't like the series.
Saban (or WHOEVER the heck owns 'em right now) has reached the point that they're running out of ideas for it, and it's starting to pull a "Simpsons".
As in, it's been around WAY too long and just needs to go bye-bye for good.
My opinion, you understand.
As to the Legion of Doom's punishment, agreed.
And as I've heard it said, sometimes there are WAY worse things in life than death.
But as I said, we'll see what happens to them in the story.
And soon, I hope.
Yeah, me, too.
I hope Flutters and the girls can help him with his guilt, or he MAY end up doing something drastic.
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Don't forget Big Mac, CMC, and even Pee Wee the Phoenix.
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Edit: Never mind. You added them in. Thanks!
Damn, is all of equestria here? Also, isn’t colt and gentlecolts the same thing?
Damn
I’m shocked, too. I didn’t even think she’d make it up there.
Wait, the others aren’t gonna react to this or did they already know?
Is there an error here?
Damn, you know it’s serious, then.
Are you kidding me? This man, spike had his own harem.
Calling it now, this girl ember about to lose it.
Called it.
Not gonna lie, I was not expecting that.
Yup, she gonna take it hard.
Again, called it.
What, they ain’t gonna say nothing?
Ok, this is probably the cleanest funeral I’ve ever seen.
Ok, now he has two statues and I can’t decide which one is better.
Oh snap, they got man as prince spike. Nice to know they recognize my man. I wonder what would have happened if they had put “princess spike”?
Wait, what mistake did she make? Shouldn’t she be telling all this to discord? Because, I’m guessing he’s still there.
Dang, the dorms that big?
Did they?
(Hopefully this comment gives everyone a break from the feels. I tried my best to make as many funny comments as I could.)