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Lunaria


On a one way trip to the moon

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Having settled down in a small coastal town, Tirek, Chrysalis, and Cozy Glow now live together. They might not be family, but they were certainly more than friends. Having been given a chance at redemption, the three decided to leave their past behind.

But sometimes the past has a bad habit of seeking you out.

One sunny day a purple princess comes seeking them out. She brings mementos of the past, but more importantly, memories Cozy Glow wished she'd never have to relive.


Cover art by: Mychelle (FimFic)

Written for the 3rd Annual Cozy Glow Short Story Contest.

Prompts used:
-Twilight Sparkle gathers Cozy’s belongings for disposal. One object surprises her.
-Life was great until mom started barking like a dog.

Special thanks to Perfectly Insane for pre-reading and helping!

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 17 )

Good start, looking forward to the other chapters.

Interesting start. I'm excited for more!

the story is interesting and raises many questions and innuendos, but the only answers I would like to know now are "how many years have passed since the finale?" and "How old is Cozy now?"

Perfectly Insane
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Thank you for letting me help you on this you wonderful individual.

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More like thank you for taking your time to help me. :heart::raritywink:

ok, it turns out a really sad fate for the characters, but I'm glad that everything seems to end well. (Although I haven't read the final chapter yet.)

Yes, the ending of the story is very nice and sweet. I liked this story and would not mind seeing a few more windows from the life of this unusual family.

I blame Twilight!

For some reason I really want to play a soap opera dramatic reveal cue.

Insane in the membrane.

Things are getting interesting.

'taken so much coxing from' - coaxing

Ouch, yeah, stuff like that could warp a kid.

'Evening deflate back' - deflated

D'awwww, maybe she too can have a happy ending.

Now they just need to lock Chryssie and Thorax up in a windowless room. Whether they make up or Thorax gets the beating of his life, it'll stop be amusing.

'it right now:"' - it right now."

Hmm... an interesting origin story for her mark.

I really love this story overall! I do like an adult reformed Cozy scenario and this is done really well.

This was surprisingly sweet. I like how you wrote Chrysalis in the flashback portion. It really sold the fact that she hadn't gone through whatever character development she went through between then and the main plot.

And Cozy's interactions with her former partners in crime turned a adopted parents really were well done and pretty enjoyable to read. I like how the former villains don't seem to have consciously decided to be all nice for it's own sake, so much as they just seem to have retired and settled down. And have just naturally grown into better people from there without completely losing their "edge". Gives it a bit more believable than in stories where they just do a 180 after one moment of realization.

And Cozy's drama with confronting her mother and by extension, her past, was pretty engaging and heartwarming.

I know it's probably intentional because it's not that important to the story but I am mobile curious what evening glows condition is. I mean I have my guesses but I don't know if that's the one you were going for if you were going in for one in particular.

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