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Rambling Writer

Our job is not to give readers what they want; our job is to show them things they never imagined. --Walt Williams


The problem with being an explorer in this day and age is that unexplored lands are few and far between. Almost everything's been charted, catalogued, analyzed, and what have you. But that's an almost; there are still those rare, blank spots in the maps, inexplicable, untouched by hooves, unsurveyed. One of those corners is Needle Vale in the far north. Supposedly cursed, yet everyone who's gone in has come back out. It has more stories about it than Celestia herself, yet every single adventuring group that's gone in has found nothing. Thanks to a nonstop snowstorm that's been blowing for centuries, no one's even been able to map it out.

Daring Do thinks there are too many stories about it to be a coincidence. Something is inside there. The source of the legends and of the snowstorm. And no one has a will quite as strong as Daring's (or so she tells herself). With a small team at her back, Daring makes a decision: she will go into Needle Vale, she will withstand the storm, and she will discover what’s going on in there.

But, as Daring is about to find out, there's a reason no one’s been able to pin down what's going on in that valley. Not everything that lies in the dark corners of the earth should be studied.

Loosely inspired by Annihilation. Has a dramatic reading done by Quinch.

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 85 )

Why does the story have an EG tag instead of a MLP:FiM one?

Well, now I feel like an idiot. Fixed.

Oh, hey, that movie was trippy as hell.


A bit on the nose.

By Annihilation, do you mean the book or the movie? The book was a lot weirder.

The movie. I haven't read the book, although I've been thinking about it. Was it good-weird?

Very good weird, and a fast read too.
The book is more literary than the movie, because the book is a book about books in the same way the movie is a movie about movies. They both still capture that sense of exploring an alien landscape you get from stories like Roadside Picnic/Stalker. It isn't easy to describe without giving it all away.

Loosely inspired by Annihilation.

Having read a synopsis for the movie, does this mean everybeing is going to die or be replaced by some kind of copy?

...wait. Everyone who went to the Needle returned. Or did they?

...Fallende's a copy, isn't she. Might not even know it.

Okay, so, having just watched the movie to get even a remote idea of what this story could be about, I've gotta say—I love it so far. It always feels like something is just so absolutely wrong, but at the same time, not, and it's creeping me the hell out.

So far, from the descriptions alone, the wolves seem normal, but I digress. With the winds and snow shrouding their vision, what if they aren't? What if they are and this story is just making me overthink?

I'm surprised this story has so little traffic given how well it's written. But either way, you've earned a fan of it and I'm looking forward to seeing its completion.

Now this is getting weird...:pinkiegasp:

Oh. Ohhh. Ohhhhh. Oh, I see now. I retract the entirety of my previous statement. This, this is the "Glimmer" of the Needle Vale.

This is where shit goes downhill.

God, you really turned my head upside down and now I can't wait to see where you take me.

...okay, getting creepier...

Why in all that's right in the world do you break the clear and very obvious trap?

Space and time in flux, a mysterious facility, totally abandoned. Looks like we're about to find out why, and the anticipation is killing me.

Hmm. Not gonna be one of those things where they walk out of the bunker and it's 300 years in the future or five days in the past (and their equipment is all gone), is it...?

Oh crap. Forget Stalwart, Rangifera is just gone. Hopefully Daring wrote about her in the journal and finds out soon.

The story has me hooked so far {never heard of the movie, so yay for absent expectations?}. Love the banter too.

Hoo boy, poop's starting to get real surreal.

Huh. Is the spire a hypnoglyph?

I'm just wondering if the mirror-flipping extends to the molecular level. Amino acids and carbohydrates tend to be chiral. Stalwart might starve to death eating as much as she likes.

It's not just that she's gone. Her speech patterns (and perhaps other personality aspects) have been straight out absorbed by Fallende.

Oh, that makes more sense. I thought something was up with how she was talking, but somehow didn't make the connection.

Annnnd Stalwart is down, cosumed by the pillar by the looks of it . That leaves only three left. Or maby two.

Subtle, real subtle.

Another one bites the dust...

I felt the need to add some tags to the story, because I can’t see how this could end well.:fluttershyouch:

All things considered, they might have just found the missing faculty ponies.

...Well, what I said. Left me a lot of unanswered questions, but still a good story.

As with all who had come before, when Daring Do left Needle Vale, she brought nothing out with her.

Ooooh, that deliciously infuriating ambiguity.

A brilliant piece of mystery. Frustrating, but I applaud you that much more for it.

I have a few reading suggestions for you fine folks.

"At The Mountains Of Madness" by H.P. Lovecraft.
"Who Goes There?" by John W. Campbell Jr.
"The Shining" by Stephen King.

"They're here already! You're next!" Thanks, now I am thinking of "Invasion Of The Body Snatchers".

Just like the bunker in "Lost".

I think I can see the ending coming. I'll let y'all know if I was right.

Well, my theory a few chapters back was incorrect.

Thumbs up and faved. This is a quality story, and you get bonus points for me not accurately predicting the ending.

My god that was incredible.

Princess Luna: HEY! GET OUT OF MY ROOM!
Daring Doing: Well, if it's Your room, Princess, then why is Princess Celestia's cutie mark on the door?
Princess Luna: HER WHAT!

Luna ran toward the entryway and upon arrival her jaw nearly hit the floor.

Princess Luna: THAT B¡!¡!...

Princess Luna: But to leave such a huge emblem, the door must have hit Celestia in the plot on her way out! HUZZAH!! CINDERS, DEAR SISTER, REDUCED TO CINDERS ART THOU!!
Windrose: I think She means, "Burned! Oh, you just got burned, sister!" At least, I think that's want she meant...

I found that.

And now I'm going to be searching all of the upcoming chapters for more, not knowing whether it'll be futile. Or whether it'll even explain anything.

Congratulations on getting into my head.

Absolutely amazing story!

The audiobook version is complete!

Very well done with a twilight zone feel : )

I've always liked this plot line, but I've never used it myself because I couldn't figure out how to explain the causality in any way that made sense...

Found what? Is something hidden in here?

There's a point in this chapter where it looks like there's a spacing mistake between paragraphs. It isn't a mistake.

I'm able to (barely) see it when I look at my laptop's LCD screen at a very sharp angle from below. It's probably easier to locate if you look at the page's source code.

“I walked up behind you, my questioning questor,” said Fallende. “What’s up with Stalwart?”

It slowly dawned on me her speech had changed. Now I'm rereading the chapter before I even finished it to see what else has changed with the group.

Oooooooooh! Yes, I did see it!

“I couldn’t think enough to care!”

Whenever someone makes too much noise while in pain or frightened, this is exactly how I feel. It makes me want to put my hand over their mouth... or knock them out... or start shrieking right back at them.

Wow, just, wow. Does nothing also mean no one, though? Many would say yes though a lot would say no

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