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Creating an outfit for a magician is an intimate process. Which leaves Trixie, Great and Powerful though she is, with a problem. Can she trust Rarity to keep her secret? And, even if she can, can she open up enough to someone else to go through with it?

That Rarity is the prettiest girl in school doesn’t help matters.


While written entirely by me, the ideas for this story were workshopped on Discord, mostly between me and Darkstarling. We started with a blank slate and came up with this story together.
Proofread by Moonlight and Krixwell
Cover art by Overlordneon

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 54 )

I hope this is ok for me to ask are you going to have rarity and trixie dance together ?

9969519
I am indeed! It’s on the cover for a reason :raritywink:

9969523
What kind of dance are you going to have them doing ?

9969525
I gotta be honest, I know very little about dancing :twilightblush: It’s lively jazz music, I couldn’t say much beyond that lol

It's finally here!!! And it's adorable! (I'm glad there's some new Neon art as the cover too; has she made her return yet?)

9969528
Ok I didn't know if you was going to have them slow dance together ?

9969531
Thank you, glad you’re enjoying it :yay:
Neon isn’t publically back yet, but she’s planning on coming back soonish. She’ll be resuming her ongoing projects when she does (Princess Moms and Modern MYTH Agency). I’ve seen some of the stuff she’s been working on during her hiatus and it’s pretty fantastic :raritystarry:

9969532
Nah, no slow dancing. This is more of an uptempo jazz dancing sorta fic :ajsmug:

JMP

Will this looks cute so far. And well, cute is definitely a nice contrast to Who We Become. Poor Trixie, though. Thinking that only her mom will ever love her...

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Yeah, I figured this would be a nice pick-me-up after Playing House lol. And indeed, poor Trixie... if only there were someone around to show her she’s wrong... :raritywink:

This was a very good balance of cute and intimate. I was thinking during parts of it that the progression of their relationship was going a little fast, but taken as a whole I think it works. It works with how the story started and when considering both of them have a sort of all or nothing type of personality. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.

Cover art was totally worth the wait btw. It's great.

Even so, it needed to be done. She’d put off having anyone work on the outfit for far too long, and it was starting to impact her performances. And that was simply unacceptable.

Priorities!

Rarity broke into a grin and Trixie was left pondering how many different ways the girl could possibly smile within a single conversation. Not that she minded; bafflingly, not everyone at Canterlot High showed such welcoming reactions to Trixie’s presence.

As we'll see later, keeping up the front even with herself.

“More private?” Rarity looked at Flash’s band and then back to Trixie, wearing a puzzled expression. “But there’s hardly anyone here, and they aren’t in the way in the slightest. Why could you possibly… unless…” Rarity tore her eyes away from Trixie’s and held her notepad up, hiding part of her face behind it. “Er, what kind of outfit did you want me to design again? You should know I don’t work on, how shall we say, lingerie?”

If nothing else she'd need a brand name. Rarity's Secret? Hidden Diamond? The mind boggles.

Trixie shoved the outfit back in her bag. “Well, if you won’t meet your client’s needs, I’ll just have to find someone who will.”

Rude...

“Well, yes… It’s certainly not the one I would have chosen, but beggars can’t be choosers, as they say. It was my dad’s before he got a… newer station wagon.”

You can just heart her voice for this line so clearly, with the deep disgust.

Rarity put a finger to her mouth. “Hmm, that is short notice… Tell you what, I’ll even give you a special deal. If you’ll give me the honor of designing your newest stage ensemble, I’ll mend this one for free. That way you’ll have it for this weekend’s show, and have a more dazzling one for the next after that.”

Trixie, you do realize she just upsold you right? I'm reminded of a line from The Demense of the Reluctant Twilight Sparkle. Paraphrased: "You really want the Element of Generosity to negotiate for you? You were watching us in there right?" "Yes. I just saw her sell you three dresses at a discount when you didn't plan to buy any and leave you feeling like you were the one who got a deal."

Rarity is terrifying. As it should be.

Rarity broke into a smile. “Most dazzling girl, you say?”

They do say not to lie because honest people have less to keep track of...

“But they are!” Trixie said, her eyes instantly darting to Rarity’s. “The thrill of the audience, the wonder and excitement, it’s all magic! The tricks may not be real, but the illusion is, and it’s a magician’s sacred duty to maintain that illusion at any cost!”

I love how her commitment to her art comes through here.

“No,” Trixie answered too quickly. “Trixie just likes how her night light casts stars and moons over her room.”

The best kind.

There was no hiding her laughter this time. Hearing that accent come out of Rarity was just too amusing not to. Before she could reign it in and apologize for laughing, Rarity joined in with her own laughter. “I can’t believe you made me do that!” she said with her regular accent returning.

I really love this idea.

Trixie looked down and folded her hands in her lap. “Trixie is… gay.”

Trixie really REALLY won't back down from a challenge will she. And I suppose once she's already trusting Rarity with the secrets of her magic... Really glad Rarity handles this well.

“No! Trixie can still win!” Trixie fished around her thoughts for something truly shocking, something that would be sure to top anything Rarity could throw at her. She found just the thing. “Trixie doesn’t believe anyone but her mom will ever love her!”

Trixie... :pinkiesad2: :raritycry:

“Don’t push your luck.”

Yep, that's still Trixie alright.

But no time to mope about it. She may not be at school, but she was still out in public, and that meant her head must be held high. Regardless of how she felt, Trixie must forever appear to be Great and Powerful.

Poor Trixie. She puts so much on herself. Needing to keep up a facade all the time is so hard. Fortunately Rarity IS your friend now. You've shared important secrets and everything. It'll be okay, you don't have to do this alone anymore.

The distaste in her father’s car choice was apparent in her voice, and if she had any tact, Trixie wouldn’t have commented. Thankfully she didn’t, and allowed herself to laugh openly.

"If she had any tact"
Ha
bursts out laughing

I love this story. The tone, the dialogues... It starts great, can't wait to read the rest. Well done ^^

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If it were a longer story, the progression probably would've gone slower, but with only three chapters to work with things had to move pretty briskly. I do agree that their personality types make it work okay, though. And I'm glad you like the cover, I'm super in love with it :raritystarry:

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Ooh, I love play by play comments :pinkiehappy: Especially flattering that you left such a big comment for a story that you've already read and responded to before it ever hit Fimfiction.

Trixie, you do realize she just upsold you right?

Lol I think of that every time I read this bit. Rarity is quite the savvy business woman.

9969775
Well like it says, thankfully she didn't :rainbowlaugh:

9969893
Hehehe now if only being my writing partner gave you early access to every one of my stories so you could just read them at your leisure. Wait... :unsuresweetie:

Rarity took a deep breath. “My accent is fake.”

Ah-HA! Seriously, what the heck is her accent supposed to be, anyway?

9969941
I'm unsure, honestly. Between that and the fact that no one else in her family shares her accent, it just seemed amusing that it could be fake lol

9969950
I noticed that in flashbacks, filly Rarity doesn't have the accent, which lends more credence to that theory.

9969941
Mid-Atlantic. It was invented in the forties or fifties IIRC, and spread to (mostly) women throughout the entertainment industry. The idea is that you’re supposed to sound like you were so rich that you spent your childhood and youth bouncing between boarding schools on both sides of the pond. Thus, Mid-Atlantic — you sound like you were raised somewhere in the middle of the Atlantic Ocean.

I’m constantly amazed when I hear my 13 year old daughter talking, and she mentions that so-and-so are gay or trans like she’s talking about them getting a new haircut. It’s just not a thing anyone cares about. And we live in fucking Texas.

Maybe it’s partly because she’s in a Gifted and Talented magnate, but the school is half and half GT and Mundanes. I just remember the very few kids who were out in high school when I was young, and all the shit they had to put up with. I can’t even imagine the hell a kid coming out in middle school would’ve had to live with.

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Indeed, younger generations seem more accepting than ours was (I’m assuming we’re somewhat close, though if you have a daughter in middle school you’re probably a bit older. I’m 29, incidentally). I’ve always expected that to be the case. The rise of internet culture has not been exclusively good of course, but it’s done wonders for getting people more accepted than they used to be.

9969909
Never said I would wait for the official publication <.<

9970039
I did not know that. Thanks! I just thought of that accent as 'Posh' in a non-English way.

Very nice so far. I do love Trixie and Rarity's interactions and conversation. Looking forward to more.

Interesting, and fairly touching. I understand this is not part of WWB, but it certainly carries that air of interpersonal intrigue characteristic to WWB. It'll be interesting to see how this plays out(even if it so obviously will end in romance; the journey is every bit as important as the destination, yes?).

Ah the game of 'will Krickis make me like a character that I formerly didn't take much of a shine to by using the art of fan fiction' continues.

This new contestant's name is Trixie and only time will tell if she will join the ranks of Celestia, Applejack, Rarity and OC's in general; or if I'm doomed the be indifferent to Trixie forever.

Oh and another comment said about this being a tad rushed, but I didn't think so.

9970331
Thank you :scootangel: I think the two of them work quite well together. I’m looking forward to bringing more to y’all :twilightsmile:

9970335
Well, they say write what you know... :ajsmug:

9970394
Well, it’s still me writing it, so I do expect there would be some similarities. I’m largely interested in the same types of things whether I’m writing WWB or something else lol

9970432
I used to hate Trixie but then she grew on me. Hopefully she’ll do the same to you over the course of the fic, but then it is rather a shorter fic, so I don’t know if it’ll really have the time (egotistical bun that I am, I have every confidence that I could win you over on a longer fic with more time for character development). Glad you felt the pacing was good as well :pinkiesmile:

Ooh! I'm glad I found this! Two of my favorite characters, and my favorite thing, romance!

9970335
Hehe, that's usually how I write Trixie too.

9970535
Awesome! Hope I do the characters and the ship justice :twilightsmile:

What a cute story, highlighting a lot of the similarities between Rarity and Trixie.

I have to confess, when I started this story I was 100% sure that Trixie's secret was that she was a futa. I mean, a secret that only your tailor has to know?

9970879
Thank you! I always thought these two characters had a lot of potential together, because yeah, they’re very similar in some ways.

Amusingly, while the idea of making Trixie trans never came up, the idea of making Rarity trans did. I ultimately decided against it just because I’ve got a story about a character being trans coming out soon already, so I decided to not have a super big queer angle on this one.

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I hope this is ok for me to ask will they kiss in the story ?

9971084
Hehe you know it’s more fun to wait and see what happens :derpytongue2: But they just might... :raritywink:

Love this story so far! The dynamic between these two characters is fantastic to read and I do hope you keep this story up! I've already set it to my tracking so I know the moment you update it! Anyways love the story so far these two have some great interactions so it's nice to see that explored.

I am sad that Trixie wasn't Trans, and is just gay. I mean just having characters be lesbian and/or bisexual is pretty tame in this fandom.

HOWEVER the story is very cute and I WOULD enjoy reading more, so that is something I can live with!

9971400
Thank you, I'm also loving the dynamic between these characters. It was a lot of fun to work with them, and hopefully that transfers into being a lot of fun to read! No worries about me keeping this story up, I already finished it and it'll update on Sundays over the next two weeks :raritywink:

9971485
I have other trans stories, and a wealth of queer content in general. Just wasn't the way I wanted to go in this particular fic. Glad you're still enjoying the fic, in any event :ajsmug:

You know, I would not have thought of those two together before this. And yet having read it, it does make sense.

Great and Powerful sense.

Will have to read this later tonight, but this looks like a lovely little romance you've got brewing here.

Good luck with it! :raritystarry:

9972115
I'm glad you think so. Despite not being a big ship, I think they work extremely well together :scootangel:

9972495
Thank you, and I hope you enjoy it when you read :twilightsmile:

I really don't think I can find anything bad to say about this story. Everything about it I LOVED! The way it was written in a way that told of Trixie's inner dialogue through a third-person limited lens was done amazingly, the dialogue between Rarity and Trixie was pulled off nearly masterfully with perfect interpretations of either character. Let alone the chemistry and the style that kept me reading and rendered me incapable of looking away. I seriously look forward to more of this! :raritywink:

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I’m thrilled you enjoyed it so much! I’m extra happy to hear you liked the way I do third-person limited, it’s always super cool to get comments about the way I write instead of just the story itself :raritystarry: I look forward to bringing more of this story to you, and I hope you enjoy the rest of it just as much as this first chapter :scootangel:

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May I request something for the story if that's ok ?

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This story is already completely written, I'm just updating it weekly because I work with a content buffer :twilightsheepish:

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Transatlantic: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mid-Atlantic_accent

(Or Mid-Atlantic, which is a synonym I just learned)

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