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Krickis


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This story is a sequel to The Open Road


Morning Glisten isn't really a good filly. She fights with other foals, and she doesn't really trust adults. Nopony would want to adopt somepony like her. So when Princesses Sunset, Fluttershy, and Twilight take an interest in her, she'll need to become someone else to win their love.


A story set in the Who We Become series.

Want to read this story but don't know everything that happened before it? You can brush up with a summary here!


This story wouldn’t be what it is without workshopping help from Wendy Gowak and Sapphire.
Proofread by Gowak, Sapphire, Moonlight, Krixwell, Eddie Grammar, Mind Jack, and w_brown7.
Cover art by Pasu-Chan.

Chapters (26)
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Comments ( 334 )

An excellent beginning. One can see why Sunset likes Morning. Just out of curiosity, was Sunset’s book, The Graveyard Book, by the celebrated author of The Sandmare?

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Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! And yes, it was indeed! I like sneaking in references to Neil Gaiman where I can, as he's my favorite author :scootangel:

JMP

Boy am I getting flashbacks to Looking Glass. Morning and Sunset weren't entirely the same, but I'm getting similar vibes. I do wonder what happened with Morning's mother that she felt forced to give her daughter up.

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Hehe yes, the Looking Glass parallels are pretty strong here. And we'll learn more about Morning's mother eventually, but it won't be for quite some time.

Oooo, I'm loving this new story! I wonder why Morning is so determined to not make friends, maybe it's abandonment issues? The fact that she was abandoned makes her afraid to make connections with other ponies, so she shuts herself off and turns to books. I'm intrigued to see how Sunset breaks down her walls and gets through to her.

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I'm intrigued to see how Sunset breaks down her walls and gets through to her.

I don't think it's too much of a spoiler to say "awkwardly" lmao, I'm really glad you're enjoying the story and asking questions about it, makes me feel all good that people are thinking about it critically. I hope that future chapters provide satisfying answers :ajsmug:

i can relate to Morning Glisten, she's keeping herself from caring about othe rponies, to keep from getting potentially hurt should they ever leave

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Indeed, it's not a good place for a little filly to be, but luckily for her Sunset can relate as well :raritywink:

Great chapter! Awesome start to the story with introducing Morning.

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Thank you, glad to hear it was worth reading a second time :raritywink:

Rather than be offended, Sunset just grinned. “Geez, you really do remind me of a certain other filly.”

filly Sunset?

But what about Cozy Glow? Can't somebody adopt her?

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I've seen several stories where Cozy Glow gets adopted. Plus like, she doesn't even exist in this universe :twilightsheepish:

Ooh, I'm excited! I've been looking forward to this! :pinkiehappy:

Also, thanks for making double weekly updates, I sure appreciate it^^

Despite the rain, the mare stopped to look at the building’s sign. It read ‘Small Steps Home for Orphaned Ponies’, a fittingly quaint name for the rural orphanage, she decided. The mare resumed walking towards the building.

If this orphanage specifically belongs to a pony named Small Steps, then there's an apostrophe missing. Otherwise, I just read this wrong.

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I'm glad people seem happy about the story so far! Looking forward to bringing this fic to you twice as fast :yay:

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It does not belong to a pony named Small Steps, that's just the name of the orphanage :twilightsheepish:

OH SO HER CUTIE MARK IS THE LOGO THE WHOLE TIME WELL DAMN

“Miss Ginger said!”

How unusual. I wonder why this is?

Patchouli

The heck does this even mean? Morning is right about it being a dumb name.

“Is it true you invented the radio?”

WAIT WHEN WAS THIS I DON'T REMEMBER EXACTLY BUT WASN'T THIS IN FINDING HOME? MAYBE?

You know, Morning's temperament is very interesting. I wonder why she is this way, especially when Small Steps seems nice enough. (Also, just a general question, but how old is she here?)

Cinnamon Twirl had told her that.

I wonder why this pony would tell her that, but more than that, I wonder why Cinnamon Twirl would return the kid she adopted. Just because Morning Glisten is pink doesn't mean she's a fucking accessory that can be dropped off whenever somepony is done with her.

Sunset chuckled. “Because I’m a weird old lady. Now, what are we gonna play?”

How old is Sunset at this point that she's calling herself an old lady, even in jest? Is this long after the last book or shortly after it?

Holy shit, Morning is an adorable little snarkster! This is already off to a gripping start! And whoops, I guess I'm taking Kaleido's job with my comment here. Oops.

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Morning is six years old (it came up twice in this chapter, for once I'm not at fault for leaving info out haha)

Offhand I want to say this takes place something like six months after The Open Road? Kinda forget tbh and I'd have to check my timeline doc to be sure :twilightsheepish: Sunset is, I believe, 37.

The radio was invented in Finding Home, yes. And we'll learn a little more about Cinnamon Twirl and what happened with her and Morning soon. Glad you're enjoying the story, and I hope you like what's to come!

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I must not have caught that, then! My bad!

Sweet another story on the adventures of sunset how will this go well we'll just have to read and find out. It was a little sad how morning's mother gave her up but the whole time I was reading I kept thinking how it paralleled sunset a little to much maybe that's why she took an interest in her, maybe this little filly will help heal a certain unicorn mare and maybe get adopted by a certain trio. Excellent start can't wait to read more

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Patchouli is a kind of plant with a strong smell that's used to make perfumes. IOW, it's basically a name like Big Macintosh, just for a different species of plant.

So much mystery and emotion in less than 600 words.
The mother is surrendering the infant, without the proper process being undertaken for reasons I don't know, in a place I don't know, to ponies I don't know, thinking her Morning Glisten would be better off without her (and possibly would never get adopted from the place) for unknown reasons.

I also coincidentally don't know how to change the sentence:

The mare didn’t want her last memory of daughter to be of her crying as she gave her up.

Without adding another 'her' after 'last memory of'. But then you would have four lots of 'her' in one sentence which is arguably stranger.

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Just cranking up the mystery in this fic :yay:

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Yeah, Sunset sees herself in this filly already, and that could just spark something in her... :raritywink:

So we've got a 6 year old Morning Glisten who doesn't think much of herself or anypony around her due to bad life experiences. But she is certainly not bad. She is imaginative logical and observant, likes fiction and will fight for her books, and judging by the description of the story itself, will fight for many other reasons too. she is insecure about her current abilities with magic. And might jump to conclusions a bit too fast.

All in all she is yet another good OC in the WWB series.

I wonder why Sunset was only there for the weekend?
And, why there was a book on changelings in the first place? To prepare the young for war. Or just because they exist in the magical world so why not write them into adventure books.
Guess we will find out soon enough.

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The book on changelings is just because they exist and are kinda a genetically evil monster as far as ponies are concerned. I'm sure there are many books about ponies fighting off changelings. Your other questions will be answered in time :raritywink: Glad you liked Morning Glisten, I'm always a little unsure about introducing new OCs, and this time I'm introducing her as the main character in a new story so it's even more uncertain!

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How about by cutting the sentence off at 'crying'? You lose one of the 'her's and the emotion of the sentence isn't lessened in any way. It fact it might be made better. It seems to me that a mother's fear of their child crying being the last she sees of them makes for a strong enough sentence on its own, especially here where the specific reason is just reiterating something said many times already. Besides, it works better in my opinion if you don't limit the meaning of the sentence by mentioning the specific circumstance of this particular parting.

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An orphanage with that kind of name doesn't really seem right if it's not named after the founder. Maybe it's just me and my limited knowledge on the kind of naming conventions commonly used for such establishments. I admit my only exposure to that kind of name is the fictional orphanage 'Foster's Home for Imaginary Friends', which is named after its founder.

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Yeah, I'll go with that. Thank you for the suggestion :twilightsmile:

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I like the orphanage name as is. I could imagine that being a name for a real life orphanage (if orphanages were still a thing) and one would never assume a real live person would be named Small Steps :twilightsheepish:

Thanks for writing chapters twice as fast. I know that it can be hard (especially when your brain 'stops working' and you have no ideas) and take up a lot of your time. I have a hard time being patient, even with knowing this. Thanks again! :twilightsmile:

Well, well. This is a nice start, I'm excited to see where this goes.

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Oh lol, the whole thing is already written and took seven months to do. I decided I didn't want people to take that long to read it, so I wrote the whole thing, then decided on the twice a week update schedule so people could read it at a quicker pace. So I didn't actually write it twice as fast, I just wrote it while I was posting other stories :ajsmug:

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Thank you, I'm looking forward to sharing future chapters as well :yay:

Oooh! I don't think I ever got around to prereading this. Excellent work! Very emotional stuff.

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Yeah, the prologue and epilogue were written just days before the story was posted :twilightsheepish: Glad you enjoyed it!

I know I already said this, but Morning and Sunset have such an adorable connection. Even after already reading all this, I still wanna read more.

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Thank you so much! I'm surprised you decided to reread, but I'm very flattered :yay:

This is great! I may have read all of WWB in the past week or so :twilightsheepish:. I just want to say I love it so far and I really want to see where it goes! :heart:

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That's awesome! It's always amazing to hear from people that have binged the series, I'm really glad you've been enjoying it!

i imagine there is going to be some tense moments between them. and by them i mean Everypony

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Well it's a Krickis fic, so... probably :derpytongue2:

JMP

Glad to see Sunset being very mature about everything. She's come a long way. I do wonder how Twilight and Fluttershy are going to react to Morning.

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We'll see Twilight and Fluttershy interact with Morning very soon! And yeah, Sunset's come a long way in this series, she's finally at the point where she can handle these things :twilightsmile:

That wad a nice tender moment kind of chapter nice to see sunset now at least talking about kids but boy even I can see the gleam in velvet's eyes she so wants to be a grandma.

But even if it was a short visit, it really solidified something in Sunset’s mind. She’d been trying to figure out if she wanted to adopt a kid first and worry about figuring out which kid to adopt afterwards, but she realized for all the sense that made, it was backwards for her.

Sunset didn’t know if she wanted to adopt a kid, and she might never know. But she knew that in a short time, she’d formed a bond with one kid in particular, and that she wanted to do what she could for that little filly.

Did Sunset want to adopt a foal? She didn’t know. But did she want to adopt Morning Glisten? The more time went by, and the more time they spent together, the more Sunset thought that she wanted to do just that.

come on sunny we all know what your decisions gonna be get twilight and fluttershy out there to meet her so they can fall in love with her and do this adoption. Great chapter looking forward to reading more.

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Velvet has Flurry Heart already, so truly her drive for grandchildren is insatiable :derpyderp1:

Lol yeah predicable story is predictable, but even if the adoption is obvious, they still have at least a little ways to go before they finalize that decision :twilightsheepish:

Not to mention aside from the occasional business trip, Twilight and Sunset worked from home, and Fluttershy was always walking distance.

Fluttershy was always within walking distance.


This whole chapter feels like a nice summary of how far the characters have come, and how much they have learnt from each other about how to get along and deal with things in calm steady ways.
So as much as I'm sure they will be tested in the future, (by whatever the mysterious storyline turns out to be in this one) right now my confidence that they will succeed, is at the max.

This is a lovely, wholesome chapter. I love the fact that Sunset is seriously considering adopting Morning, but I can understand her reservations about it. But seeing them start to bond and spend time getting to know each other makes my heart happy :twilightsmile:

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I mean it's a Krickis story, so it's not like it'll be all smooth sailing (though 130k words of happiness sounds boring anyway lol), but this is probably my happiest novel-length fic so things won't get too bad in this one :scootangel:

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I'm glad, happiness isn't exactly my strong suit so it's nice to hear I'm doing good with it :yay:

JMP

Poor kid. Too used to being abandoned that's hard for her to see when others actually care about her. Too used to adults not listening to her so she's shocked when someone does. That she can't accept her own feelings. That she doesn't seem to really know her own feelings.

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