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The stories clog up my brain and prevent me from thinking about anything else until I write them down. True story.

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The doctor pronounced it officially: Scootaloo will never fly. However, Rainbow Dash and Applejack introduce her to another pony who has a story they hope Scootaloo can relate to.


Sequel: The Ponies in the Caves

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As both a fan of Scootaloo and Vinyl Scratch I heartily approve of this story.

Very nice! And an interesting idea that Redheart was a Royal Guard.

You know, I hate that idea, that "somepony will never x, medicine can't help". Seriously, what about Twilight? She's a fucking alicorn, she gave wings to Rarity even when she wasn't. And what about Discord, who can make pigs fly with a snap of his fingers?

Still a good story.

I definitely approve. While I'm not a fan of the idea of the idea not even a goddess like Celestia being unable to help, as that just seems like forced power lossage for a plot, everything on in -including the interesting ideas behind Vinyl and Redheart's pasts- is definitely worth the read.

This is a sweet story.

Well, a FiMFiction tale officially made me tear up... :pinkiesad2:
As a big fan of both these ponies, I've always held out hope that one day Scoots will fly, and that Vinyl simply doesn't talk much/hasn't yet on camera, but I gotta say, I loved this story regardless.
Only a few minor errors still remain; I'd focus on cleaning up that run-on sentence where Vinyl's accident is described, but it was still extremely descriptive... especially the unnerving medical procedure that followed. Great job! I actually learned something new from that!
It's also a really touching piece about moving on from one's disabilities and not letting it define them, as well as accepting those who are disabled. I think the message here would make Lauren Faust proud. :scootangel:

Also, part of me really wants to know what the "whoopie cushion incident" was... care to explain, Rainbow Dash? :rainbowhuh:

I'd also kinda like to know how things might go down if Vinyl stopped by the hospital, now that she's grown, to thank Nurse Redheart. :twilightblush::heart:

What I liked most about this was how Redheart and the other soldiers were portrayed. Redheart as a vet is an interesting idea, and the thought of her dealing with this as a rookie fresh out of basic is a poignant one. That she kept her cool until she could spare a moment to vomit is something I've heard many times from soldiers. They train you so that you lose your crap afterwards when it's safe to do so.

Is this your first story here? If so, well done. Redheart being a Guard is an interesting idea I haven't seen before.

Thanks to all. I agree with the “Celestia could,” but set myself the opposite initial condition for the purposes of the exercise. I was pleased with this for something I banged out in the Sky Club during a long layover...

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Yes, first story. Thanks.

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If I can think of a whopee cushion incident, I’ll be sure to write it up. For now, it’s just a Noodle Incident.

This is a great story, but the gore is so disgusting.

However, this is still a great story nonetheless.

You’re cutie mark is a red cross.

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Nice fic.
It plays a little loose with ages all around but it works.

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Confound it! I thought I squelched all those.

Thanks!

Vinyl definitely didn't lose her ego.

Oh, and Scootaloo has been shown to be a land flyer and not too shabby in the water.

I came here looking for a Scootaloo story, but ended up with a pleasant surprise. Interesting headcanon that DJ Pon3 lost her voice. Rubbing off what some commenters said, it's kind of tough to balance that magic can/can't do in the MLP universe, and I think it's up to the writer how "magical" they want to make it. Well done.

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Thanks! I appreciate it.

As a singer, Vinyl's story hit me hard in the feels. Sad, but really heartwarming at the same time.

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Thanks! This wasn't meant to be a happy story, but I hope people found it hopeful. I appreciate your words.

This was a good story. There's still a few typos (mainly around the formatting of quotations), but in general, this is a well-thought-through, engaging story. Good work. (And feel free to send me a PM if you want me to tell you what I spotted.)

Wow. I checked out this story because I was bored, but..................ended up being hit with feels. This is...............really good. I really love the concept. I think this gets a favorite from me..............

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Big thanks! Glad you enjoyed.

Come for the Scootaloo, stay for the Vinyl tale, now that's a switcharoo I can like :twilightsmile:

She threw magic wildly, trying to catch herself, but she didn't have the raw power to levitate herself. Her magic glowed around her back hoof, it snapped upward and her knee dislocated with a pop everypony heard, the cable was caught on a pile of lumber and arrested the remainder of her forward momentum, and she swung down like a pendulum. Her sunglasses fell off, flying on their own parabolic arc away, away and under the stage and she turned her head slightly to watch them go and she saw the superstructure of the stage coming towards her and she saw she was going to hit face first and the smash to the nose would hurt, might kill, she really didn't want to break her face and taking it on the chest would hurt like Tartarus but wouldn't kill, and she was upside down so she cut her spell and let herself fall an extra few inches but the microphone cable caught her and arrested her fall and a four-by-four wooden crossbar, part of the stage's support structure, was coming to meet her and it was going to miss her nose if she tilted her nose up an extra inch and a broken jaw might hurt and might cost her a semester of voice lessons at the conservatory but nopony died from a broken jaw and——

This is a bit too long and run-on for a paragraph, but of course, this is your first story, plus I suppose it does convey the urgency and escalation? :twilightsheepish:

"Are you trying to show me someone who has it worse, so I stop feeling sorry for myself? No offense, but that's kinda crappy of a bunch of adults to pile on me the very day I got the news. Shouldn't I get one day of self-pity?"

This was one moment that stuck out to me, though. Scootaloo's a kid, and of course she'll, well, be a little blunt about it, not necessarily in a nice way. So, nice touch!

Is Ponniard a pun on something?

My favourite part was the run-on sentence when Vinyl gets injured. I didn't register that she gained her cutie mark until Scootaloo mentioned it, though.

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Thank you!

Ponniard is a ponification of Juilliard.

The run-on sentence was an attempt to try to write slow-motion, with undertones of terror and panic. I'm glad it worked for you!

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I forgot to say "thank you!" for the comment.

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