“Saints have no moderation, nor do poets, only exhuberance.” ~Anne Sexton
First Light has been drinking Flim Flam Miracle Curative Tonic since the twin brothers first started selling it so that she can take to the skies once more to rejoin the weather team. She sees Applejack and Rainbow Dash and can't wait to tell them how happy she is.
(A story is like a puzzle. You give the pieces to the reader, and they put it together how they see fit.)
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Brilliant.
This was a magnificent read.
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Thank you. I wanted to experiment with the idea of symbolism like how it was back at the turn of the 19th and 20th century. There is such a wonderful diversity of symbolic imagery out there.
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Mission accomplished then, man. Very well-written and insightful.
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And, of course, there's nothing First Light can do about it, given that she can't fly. Not being able to fly makes her, too, vulnerable to predators. Though their predations are by fraud rather than force.
Yes, I caught the significance of the last two clauses of that last sentence. Her fear is that she will never get better, and that the ground will be the whole of her "road ahead."
Incidentally, this is the part of being a Pegasus that must really suck. You're totally-dependent for a major portion of your identity on relatively exposed and fragile organs, only one of which needs to be seriously injured to destroy one's ability to fly. I would bet a good percentage of flight-maimed Pegasi simply kill themselves.
This is one of the things that my Pegasi after the Shadow Wars won't miss about the "good old days" in Equestria, as among the consequences of the Shadow Wars was the general deployment of fully-functional prosthetics and medical regeneration.
Applejack owns her mistakes, which is one reason I love her as a character. But she may be taking on more than she can haul, as some damage cannot be repaired by a mere cash refund.
Ooh, that's bad ...
Oh, now this is horribly painful. Especially given how kind is Applejack. I'm not all that kind, and I would find this a terribly difficult thing to tell First Light. This is even more painful because Applejack is in part responsible for the situation, by lying through omission. In short, going against her own nature, and due to the same sort of conflict between Honesty and Kindness. -- she didn't want to hurt Granny Smith's feelings.
... and Dashie's heart is a lot softer than she lets on. This is true of my Rainbow Dash too -- it's why the rest of the Mane Six love her so much.
Not sure if this is a typo or an odd construction. What does Dashie mena by "need to be certain that there's a strong flyer?" Does she mean a strong flyer to handle the migration, so that a weak flyer, still-recovering from injury, couldn't do the job? (Which would be telling one white lie-by-omission to mitigate the effects of AJ's earlier white lie-by-omission). Or does she means something different?
Crap, she may have opened up stitches, injured herself worse. In addition, of course, to losing her false hopes.
Down that path lies death. Or a miraculous recovery. But with the first being more likely.
Scootaloo may be unable to fly. But she's not nothing.
This was a powerful and excellent story. You said some very important things about the damage that can be done by even well-meaning lies, and the nature of maiming and personal worth. Thank you for writing this.
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listened to them as they chattered at one another.
5118690 An awesome comment, as always.
Yes, maybe it is an awkward sentence structure, but you are correct, she was implying that she would cover for Applejack.
And typo fixed.
I didn't want to go too far in either direction as to whether she was deluding herself or not. This is the nature of faith - to persevere in the face of great odds. That's also why I used the Peter Pan reference - pegasi always have to have faith that they will be able to fly, and...
Crap, have to get ready for work. Thanks again.
This is a decent story with some good, if basic, symbolism.
It also has a description that uses a cookie-cutter quote as an extremely pretentious way of asking the reader to please notice symbolism and look for deeper meanings.
You know, I really should read more of your stuff. This was a great read.