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Spoilers for S8E6

Scootaloo was overjoyed to discover the Cutie Map was sending her and her friends across Equestria for a friendship mission. It was her first time flying outside her dreams.

If she didn't do something, it would be her last.

Cover by Zutcha. Quick editing by Bitera.

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Short and sweet. I actually really like this idea given what we know of Scootaloo's flying right now. A bit sad, but still very cool idea :twilightsmile:

a vary sweet story.

Interesting concept. I feel it could use some more chapters to explore her life underwater, even if it's just a couple. I'm curious to know if you would have her stay or go back. The completed tag just doesn't feel fitting to me.

Wow, this didn’t take long!
You wouldn’t think a few thousand words could be so heavy, but there it is.

Nice alternative veiw on the episode! Good story!

How the fuck did you manage to write this so quickly + get a story image in less than 24 hours? o.O

Very well done, author. Have a Like and a Favorite.

I wrote it right after the episode and have some good artist friends. It's only 2.5k. It probably would've taken much longer if I wanted to tell more of Scootaloo's adventures.

Isn't it obvious? Starscribe is a story writing A.I. sent back from the future to kill Sarah Conors.

Is this really complete?

I draw fast. When I need to.

Of course thats what a murderous word slinging A.I. would say! Deflecting from the fact that they are programed to write amazing stories! :trollestia:

Edit: Oh yeah... and murder people. Good day sir!

Go here.
Look at the chapter publication dates.
Look inside the chapters to see that each of them has an illustration in it.
Notice that there's 48 of such chapters.
You may also check the comments to see that the story wasn't pre-written.
Now, you can spend the rest of your life pondering how they've managed to pull THAT off.
Like me. :pinkiecrazy:

I'm not sure how to feel here. On the one hand, the Cutie-Mark Crusaders breaking apart like this is kinda out there. It feels like a fundamental Law of the universe was is broken.

On the other, realistically speaking (snorts), Equestria is the kind of place that encourages self-discovery, and if Scootaloo truly feels she would be better off in Seaquestria... Well, there's going to be hurdles, but nothing mind-boggling. Scoots can adapt pretty well when push comes to shove, so I can see her fitting into Seaquestria eventually.

All in all... I think I like this story. An interesting take on the Broken Wings Scootaloo, and one I would certainly like to see fleshed out.

This was bittersweet and great. I wish you made sequel about Scootaloo new life in Seaquestria, and new friends she made there, and how CMC visit her sometimes. :scootangel:

Scootaloo actually lives with her 'aunts' according to the comics. Still, good story.

Actually you need to go even further than the comics for that particular invention. It's from a pony book called Ponyville Mysteries: Riddle of the Rusty Horseshoe.

But like many authors, I treat the canon as the show and only the show. I don't read the comics or any of the side books, so I can't really expect other people to either.

Texus #19 · Apr 22nd, 2018 · · 18 ·

Spoilers for S8E6

This isn't actually a thing right?, that the cutie mark map I don't really like even takes the cutie mark curssaiders on a mission now?
While I like the show, the map is one of the things I question once in a while, I'm just not that type of that that just consumes all the stuff without complaining/thinking about certain stuff.

It is. It does. The map rules everyone with a butt tattoo now. :pinkiecrazy:

Since the magic works on ponies, I wonder if Scoots could get special permission for one of those necklaces from Queen Novo, after a time.

My heart broke, my heart just seriously broke here. Nice job author.

The symptoms you describe sound like a case of the feels. Keep back, it's extremely contagious!

Oh... Too late...

Makes me wonder how RD would take it?

It breaks my heart every time Scootaloo is reminded that she can't fly in the show.

Eeyup. This fic was pretty inevitable. Nice read tho.

Yeah, was wondering about that too.

Especially since Dash's, ya know, the Element of Loyalty. :rainbowderp:

Oh, hm, aye. That's a question. Might be a followup (whether or not it's written) with Rainbow visiting to talk to her? Hm. Did Scootaloo ask them to pass a message to Rainbow during that night on shore? I'd guess Rainbow's likely to understand having to grab the moment before it got away, but I hope that Scootaloo didn't send no word specifically to her.

Constantly being surrounded by molasses-like substance (784 times thicker than usual) that impedes your every move while you "fly" and stops you from quick acceleration must be very annoying, especially after already experiencing rush of speed and sharp turns on a scooter.

All these comments have given me an idea for another chapter. I might just write it.

And thus begins the adventures of Tunaloo, the chicken of the sea...

Oh, nice! :D

Possibly, though seapony biology and magic might also come in there. After all, pegasi already laugh at aerodynamics as we know them, so why should our world's hydrodynamics be ironclad?

Understood i mean Rainbow would likely still wanna see her little buddy and too hear she might not see her as much as she did might throw her for a loop

Usually for me it takes about an hour for every 1k words, add to that planning, which might take anything from "a few months of procrastination" to "omg I got the best idea ever and need to write it NOW", and add some time for proofreading, so a 2,5k fic is totally doable if you don't have other stuff to do. :twilightsmile:

Well some are more experienced than me then. I actually end up rewriting my stuff so many times that it can take well over a day for me to complete even a short story.

I've always found that after a certain point all the polish and rewrites you do only serve to make you more frustrated and unhappy with a fic. Usually the thing that comes to mind first for you is probably the best version.

An excellent bit of heartfelt drama... though I suspect Scoots will soon learn that the kelp isn't always greener. Still, I think most pegasi in her situation would take the opportunity to finally move in three dimensions with even less reluctance.

That said, while some people are wondering how Dash will take this news, I'm wondering more about Cheerilee. Silverstream isn't the only one who may need a permission slip...

But yeah, in all seriousness, great Scootafeels.

Hm. Well done.

This is well worth more chapters.

So...do you recommend that author, or nah?

I don't but she's really working hard to get better.

Sad and sweet. I wonder if the show will ever address this again, like it did in Flight to the Finish.

I have refrained from leaving responses in a while.

At this point, I think I know what's happening conceptually alone. Doesn't always deter me.

I think the next thing I write... will not be based on this.

I will, I think, revisit that man I briefly mentioned in one of me own works.

I don't think abandoning your blood is wise. It's not that hard a choice. I might encounter cerebral palsy, but I'm not going to Sweden knowing that's the only place they'll offer robotic cars.


nice and cute story, i have to say that it's nice to avoid the cliche of "hero gives up awesome oppurtunity to keeping living their old life"

but as a personal thing, i prefer transformation sequences be written with a little more detail, then again i got kind of a fetish for that thing so.....

I would like a sequel story elaborating on Scootaloo's time in Seaquestria and maybe flesh the seaponys/hippogriffs/the-writers-were-high-when-they-wrote the-movie out a little more,

Seaquestria is a terrible pun BTW

I thought about a more detailed TF scene, but ultimately I couldn't think of a way to justify it happening. After she went back and forth so many times for the episode, it just didn't make sense for her to focus on it.


You know what I just realized?

running errands must suck for a sea-pony/hippogriff/can't-they-just-come-up-with-a-name-to-always-call-themselves-in-both-forms

Ohhhh this was good. Sequal please!!!!!

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