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“What all the wise men promised has not happened, and what all the damned fools said would happen has come to pass.” ― William Lamb Melbourne

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There is a ghost haunting the corridors of Ponyville's newest dwelling, the princess's Castle of Friendship. It is a ghost without voice, or hoof, or spectral limb to cast strange shadows upon crystalline walls.

But it's not the ghost of a pony. It's not a person at all.

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Comments ( 21 )

Excellent work. Love the concept.

RBDash47
Site Blogger

Ooh boy, you actually wrote it!

It seems odd that Twilight discourages that kind of visitor. Seems like that's a long-term friendship lesson in the waiting.

That's a really moving concept, starting out creepy and getting sweet at the end.

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Thank you. This was from some transient prompt someone tossed out in the #writing-help channel of FiMFiction Discord server. Let's see...

Broken Rose - Dec. 1st at 11:04 PM H---, I'd read a story which had literally nobody as the character.

Very neat and mysterious. Ghost livrarr y would have never thought of thF.

RBDash47
Site Blogger

I actually got around to reading it. What a lovely piece! Very well done.

PresentPerfect
Author Interviewer

Marvelous! Truly original.

Beautiful and touching, a great send-off to such a big part of Twilight's first years in Ponyville.

I will say though that I found the line about Equestria's troubled (paper) publishing industry distracting. Not that it couldn't be the case for other reasons--but it seemed like it was meant as a parallel to the modern Western case, the major factors of which seem not to apply to Equestria.

The prose is rather purple at times—perhaps appropriate, given the Castle's regular inhabitants—but aside from that, a fascinating tale of the paranormal in a land far more familiar with the supernatural. It's an important distinction. Thank you for this.

Wow, I actually started crying at the end. Well done.:twilightsmile:

Very interesting idea, and quite touching, congratulations for making my über favorites shelf. Well written, a narrative that makes sense, and results in making Twilight's castle even more interesting. I've always liked the idea that it's alive on some level, but never considered the library capable of the same. Very nice work.

I could see the first half of this story becoming part of a canon episode in Season 8. The subject matter of the second half is, unfortunately, not something Hasbro is likely to put into one of their scripts.

Well done!

Very reminiscent of Cold in Gardez's place stories. Very cool concept.

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Lost Cities? I love those, thank you for the comparison! :twilightsmile:

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Yup, Lost Cities.

Noc
Noc #19 · March 4th · · ·

I want to like this. It certainly seems original, and the writing is solid. But … I’ve just read it, and I have absolutely no idea what I just read, concretely speaking. First the Oak library starts taking over the castle, then it turns into a place for dying ponies to wander off to, and then we’re far into the future (judging by how Twilight’s suddenly known as the “Dusk Princess”), and … what?

I’ll give this a like, because it feels jerkish not to, but it comes with great confusion.

You've seen it already, but full review here. In brief: a fascinating concept I haven't seen anywhere before. The "Dusk Princess" stuff is irritating, but for the most part it's a really interesting look at the nature of loss. Faved.

This was stunning.

While I have to echo the comments about the strange concept of Twilight becoming so uncaring that she wouldn't encourage anyone to come to her castle (or her library), the ending swept it away. When I saw the twilight lands beyond the windows, I immediately thought of the midnight shores of Death's Domain in Discworld.

Eerily beautiful and powerfully evocative. Well done. Well done, indeed.

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