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Foehn


Occasionally, I even write.

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Some say the world is black and white, others shades of grey.
The truth is, as always, somewhere in-between.
In which a precocious filly contemplates context.


Now with a dramatic reading by Plundersteed!

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Comments ( 23 )

Hm, no character tagged. On purpose, I take it? :trixieshiftleft:

Oh, that was so amazing. Especially how you put all of it into the words you used and how you paced them in such a specific order, leaving breaks where need be, and possibly where others may not have.
I wish I could write like that.

This is great!
It deserves to be seen by more people!

I agree this has to be seen by more people! :pinkiesmile:

(was that octavia in the story?,,,)

That was... curious.

I feel as if the point of the story is really how children don't understand what may be happening around them. Whether it be good or bad, they can't understand the morality.

Sifting through the different points in the story, I'm pretty sure that's the point. I suppose it is sad, from the character's point of view.

A child's motivation seldom corresponds to that of the parents; as a parent myself (and now a grandparent), I've had to deal with this on an essential level for many years. (And indeed, when I was a youngster, too many years ago, I almost never saw things the same way as the grownups.) You've captured that bafflement very well here.

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Yep, that was Octavia in the story. I refrained from tagging her both because I thought that her identity would be sufficiently self-evident (via cover image and description of her within) and hence a tag would detract from any subtlety there, and also because, by and large, the story is not about Octavia as a character, insomuch as it uses her character as a template to explore various ideas.


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I was hesitant about tagging the story 'Sad', because I felt that the story, in and of itself, is not a particularly saddening one; however, as you noted, it is from Octavia's perspective. I'm still up in the air over whether or not that was the right choice, but I needed to tag the story something

Thank you all for the kind words, I wasn't expecting this positive a reception!

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From an outside perspective, I feel that it would count as Slice of Life or Random.

But for the first person, Sad seems to fit well enough, even if in reality, it's not necessarily sad. Perhaps Sad-Slice of Life is the best way to tag it. It's not a sadfic, but it's not simply just slice of life either.

What's impressive is that your story got passed without character tags. Moderation's failed me on having insufficient short descriptions for crying out loud.

I liked it.
You did a pretty good job with a story this short.
Kudos to you.

Great story.
Interesting perspective of the conflict between someone's (/somepony's) personal talents which make them unique, and their desire to fit in and be normal.
Write more! :D

A high-quality dramatic reading of this neat little story:

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It's inspiring to have someone enjoy one's work so much as to put in the time and effort to do a reading of it.

This made my day.

Thank you.

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Maybe at some point we'll read more about this Ruby character.

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Fantastic. I'm so very glad Plunder Steed read this. :)

I wrote a review of this story. It can be found here.

Oh wow. I am so very glad I stumbled on this. You have one hell of a way with words.

It's a good thing they had that one teacher there. Having somepony who communicate music to her on a level she could understand must have been a saving grace in a world she didn't understand.

Interesting bit with the school play there. The fantastic performance didn't get the enthusiastic response you would imagine; instead of ponies praising a pony for such outstanding skill at such a young age, they got upset that their children were upstaged by the professional-level performance of a prodigy.
But the parents do have a point, of a sort--putting any sort of blame or pressure on her is wrong, but any ordinary foal, no matter how skilled, will look bad when put up in comparison like that. Ponies like Octavia on an entirely different level when it comes to their specialty; it's like throwing a professional card player into an amateur tournament.

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Cheers! Sorry for the month-late response; life's been a little busy.

Holy sweet mother of Luna. I am so glad that I picked up this piece. Foehn, this was beautifully well done. I don't know how you managed to capture that much... feeling and manage to like... never quite fully express what was going on but still paint it in colours that people can understand. Maybe I'm reading into this, but holy crap did you do a good job writing what it is like to be a child with selective mutism who is struggling to figure out how to express themselves after something like a move. If I'm reading too deeply into that, I'm sorry, but goodness. This was gorgeous, and I'm so happy to have found it. Excellent work!

Comment posted by Foehn deleted Dec 16th, 2018

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Spot on with the interpretation - I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the SA review!

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