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Toon4Thought


I'm a guy who's new to fanfic writing and intends to write about ideas I am really interested in. Yeah, that's about it.

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Princess Twilight Sparkle has granted her student, Starlight Glimmer, a few extra days in the mirror world to get to know everyone – and hopefully learn a couple lessons of her own along the way. With newfound friends like Sunset Shimmer by her side, she’ll have nothing to worry about while she explores the strange sights that await her.
...Right?

Takes place directly after "Mirror Magic", but viewing that isn't required to properly follow what happens here.

Proofread and Edited by ChudoJogurt.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 59 )

Looking pretty good so far. Can't wait to see what Starlight thinks of this world's Spike...

I wonder how did Cadence (EqG) became Crystal Prep Principal?

Hmm, I wonder if there's any possibility of encountering the Shadowbolts here?

Nonetheless, this is a GREAT start to Starlight's 3 to 4 day visit to the human world!!

Looking good so far!

Comment posted by DeletedAccount555 deleted Jul 9th, 2017

I liked it so far. I will keep track of this story.

I find myself intrigued....

Following and upvoted :pinkiehappy:

Please, continue. I'd like to see where this is going.

Comment posted by Toon4Thought deleted Jul 15th, 2017

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Well, it's a good thing I uploaded my second chapter just now then. :)

Seeing that Juniper is making a small return here, nice add in.

Overall, great end to the first day!

And now the second day.

Sorry guys, but I'm going to have to skip this weekend on the release schedule. To put things simply, I've been quite busy with a lot of things in real life last week (though I will have more time for sure after next week) and that, along with chapter 3 requiring more revising than the previous two, has prevented me from finishing it in a satisfactory manner on time. It should be done by next Saturday though, and because of the extra time there shouldn't be any more delays after this point.

Thanks for your patience.

She ignored it for at first, figuring it was the little voices she would occasionally hear in her head again.

Does Twilight know about this? Because I think that's probably something she'd want to know. :rainbowlaugh:

Suddenly, several large hardcover books landed on the desk with a solid thud. Giving them a quick glance, she noted that most of them had to do with meteorology and astrology.

Astrology is the practice of using stellar positioning (current and at birth) to predict the future. The complicated rules of astrology put it more in the realm of divination type magic than science, and while Star Glim might find such study fascinating, Sunset probably wanted to show her a book on Astronomy, to get her comfortable with the idea that celestial movement (and weather) happen without the influence of people.

Starlight would be interested to meet Spike's alternate form.

Was it just me or did the video game they were playing seems similar to brawlhala?

Gotta love Super Smash Bros.
Next time
Dawn of the third day
24 hours remain
*insert Clock Town theme here*

Starlight, Starlight, Starlight...when you're facing with playing a new fighting game you aren't familiar with, you do what I do: mash random buttons until you get results.

You'd be surprised how well that works. Heck, sometimes I even manage to do things the more experienced player next to me didn't even know you could do.

Unfortunately, I can never tell them how I did it...because I was just mashing random buttons, not paying attention to what ones I'm actually pressing. :rainbowlaugh:

Wow. Good chapter.

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Thanks. I was wondering how well this would be received after how lighthearted the rest of the story has been.

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Can't be all sunshine n' roses. There's bound to be a little conflict between two strong personalities who have struggled. I'm almost a little let down that Sunset didn't get to have her "words" with Starlight. Almost. :twilightsmile:

Can you imagine Flurry Heart found the mirror portal?

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She'd have to sneak all the way from the Crystal Empire. Not likely anytime soon, I think. About the only way I could see it happening would be if it was by accident. But if she flew through the mirror, she'd land as a baby on the other side. I imagine Twilight would be charging right behind, so the outcome would be minimal. At worst, SciTwi might wind up with all sorts of unanswered questions why a girl supposedly not more than five years older than her charged out of the portal holding a baby girl. And if she's dating Timber, does that give her ideas? :twilightsmile:

Has Starlight met Ray?

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I don't think it would quite work for me to try and incorporate elements from the shorts in here, since I began posting this story before any of those came out. Especially given one of them gave us a canon look at Sunset's apartment, mere weeks after I came up with my own interpretation. Ah well.

So Starlight finally meets the other Spike. That meeting was better than I expected.

I loved every chapter, I can't wait to see what you come up with next

Sequel time!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I ship Starlight and Sunset SO DARN HARD!!!!

For your first story, it's really good. I enjoyed every chapter!

Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

Very very nice. Would have liked to have had a bit more of the Celestia/Sunset interaction shown, but eh. It's an epilogue.

Have a like! :twilightsmile:

That was a very cute and satisfying short. Have a Favorite!

“See, not even Trixie is as fabulous as the Great and Powerful Trixie!”

Now see, that's a quote worthy of hanging up on a wall or something. :rainbowlaugh:

I think that's one thing that Starlight and Sunset have a lot in common: Anxiety. Both of them (for different reasons) have loads on their shoulders and fear relapses.

At some point, someone needs to deprogramme Pinkie of her need to make 'movie nicknames' out of everyone's names.

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Yeah, it was really fun to explore how similar yet different the two are as I was writing this. It's a good part of why I made this fic in the first place (that, and I found EqG Starlight very adorable).

Yeah, I think that the Season 6 finale was probably the best Starlight episode that they've done so far, all the more because of the completely out-of-left-field conclusion that nonetheless made sense.

I think that Juniper very nearly nerdgasmed out when she found that the ponies were real!

“By the way, was what ya said true about the village and forcing away their talents?”

Oh yes; she even took the other six of you hostage after stripping them of their 'talents'.
Which...would've likely caused a war between Our Town and Equestria & Crystal Empire, if Princess Twilight Sparkle, Former Student of Princess Celestia, sister to the Crystal Empire's Prince-Consort Shining Armour and dear friend and rescuer of both Princess Luna and Princess Mi Amore Cadenza, had failed to return.
I also would not have wanted to see Discord's reaction to Fluttershy being harmed. :fluttershyouch:

But I really meant it when I said that all of those girls are such great friendship teachers, and I have no doubt they will do everything in their power to help you feel comfortable.

MLP: EqG Holiday Special. Ouch.

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Considering the Mirror is now in Twilight's Castle, Ponyville, and Flurry lives in the Crystal Empire, which is to the far north...yeah, no.
Not at all likely.

Other foals, like Pound and Pumpkin Cake, would be more likely (they actually live in Ponyville), but still unlikely because their parents would've told them "Princess's Castle is off-limits".

 “Only the most scrumptious and sweet coffee drink you’ll ever taste!”

Eh, hot chocolate for me, thanks - that, or tea.
Not a fan of coffee, myself - I don't like the taste or the smell.

something so warm and vicious.

I believe you wanted "viscous", Toon4Thought.

Omnifox that is actually a really good point!

Agreed! Sequel time! :P

This seems like a decent start to what should be some excellent friendshipping.

She was amazed at just how many large cinemas lied in this one facility

Without even going to check to see if you used the right lie/lay, it sounds awkward as is. So to dodge the problem altogether, I'd just use "were." It's not an exciting word, but it gets the job done in this instance, and the resulting sentence flows well.

but Starlight still found it jarring just how forceful her companion suddenly became

It certainly was jarring. Hmmm.

“Anyway,” Sunset continued, “Before we do that

When you have continued dialogue like this, where the dialogue tag is in the middle of a sentence of dialogue, you don't capitalize the resumed dialogue. So in this case, "Before" should be lowercase. Alternatively, since only the introductory clause was finished before the sentence got interrupted, you could replace the comma before "Before" with a period and then leave "Before" capitalized.


I'm glad Starlight finally spoke up. Communication is a very important part of friendship. It's a good lesson to learn.

Starlight winced.

:rainbowlaugh:

That went an unexpected direction. Huh.

Maybe she would find it in her heart to forgive her?

Pretty sure that should be "me"

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