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Chrysalis is dying, and with her, the last of the Changeling race... but there might be a way to avoid extinction.

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Wait...if she's a chrysalis...

Then won't she transform into a butterfly or something? :rainbowkiss:

Oh, so Wanderer_D published a new story?

Well, it's not like I wanted to sleep anyways. :trixieshiftleft:

Nice work Wanderer!

*favwite* :moustache:

So... Creepy. And then Twilight ruled all of Equestria.

Neat idea, well executed. 10/10, would beg for sequel (even if I'm not sure how well it'd work) again.

A dislike this late at ni--...morning?

Twilight wants friends. Friends like her.

I can't tell if this is a happy story or if it belongs in the C'Thulu mythos... :unsuresweetie:

Very interesting, but I am left wondering so much at the end.

Still, good story!

Huh. Seems like Chrysalis could have infiltrated Canterlot easily enough with a train full of changeling-converted ponies...

*thumbs up*

Something seems off about this. Twilight seems stronger mentally then to give in that quickly regardless of biological feelings...It's nicely written just seems too off for me to really like it.

Nicely done :ajsmug: , kind of surprised there aren't more stories like this.

Noooooooo, please don't tell me that I'm the only one noticing that Twilight just hinted all over the place.
SHE ALREADY CONVERTED PONYVILLE TO THE CAUSE! That sneaky Unico-er, Changeling.
:twilightsmile:

An intriguing idea but a little too fast-paced. If the transformation had been more gradual and Twilight slowly succumbed to her new changeling instincts a la Jeff Goldblum in The Fly, that would have made for some truly terrifying reading and the overall impact would have been greater..

That said, this was nicely written and I did get a chill out of it. If you ever decide to expand upon it, I'd love to see what else you can come up with.

You did it again, D. Another great one.

Loved the implications in the end of the story! Certainly moved fast, didn't she?? Ha! :rainbowlaugh:

This is definitely interesting. I'd actually be quite interested to see an interim of what happened after Twilight's realization, but before Celestia's arrival. ...Hmm. Might call for an interquel, perhaps? *laughs* Eh, regardless, another awesome read!

I love this, a lot. :pinkiehappy:
One thing, though?
Cool it with the ellipses. :ajbemused:
It was like, "Word... word... word..." and I get you wanted to show that they were speaking slowly, but there are other ways to do that. It gets frustrating after a while to see the same thing over and over again. :unsuresweetie:
But I truly do love the story. Brava! :raritystarry:

"No! I need to fight the changelings!"

"No, Twilight, you are the changelings."

And then Twilight was the changelings.

I think Twilight gave in far to quickly to her changeling instincts. Though besides that great story.

Oh... I had to read that twice before I got it.
Sweetie's magic is green.
Rarity wasn't looking at Celestia when she said "your highness".
Clever girl....

This feels slightly rushed at places, especially Twilight's transformation... but the combination of heartwarming creepiness makes up for it! It's like an episode of... Twilight Zone! :twilightblush:

For the love of god, and all that is holy, my an-
Moar.

Daww, and so the swarm lived happily ever after.

Ah, this was brilliant. The gentle ebb of resistance versus her new instincts as she progressed into her new species, all the foreshadowing with subtle mentions of what happened and is to come, combined with a unique concept really made this story great. Bravo sir, bravo~ :ajsmug:

OOh! Guessing game! Where is my head? Splattered all around me!

Wuzzat? A fic written by Wanderer D? Well that's an automatic +1 and another story added to the read it later list...

NTL

The last part was very subtle and creepy. I like it :pinkiehappy:

I wonder how pinkie handled her transformation - that would be interesting to read by itself.

I also feel it was rushed. There should be a paragraph of shocked protest right between "her horn had taken the jagged appearance of Chrysalis’ own" and “All of that... is it something you feel all the time?”

Other than that, this is a completely effective horror story. The pull of her vampiric hunger vs her love for her friends.

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I like that idea. Write about it.

I approve.
A nice sweet story, with a happy ending.
If I had a seal of approval, I would give you it. :pinkiehappy:

Great more stories I'm going to be tracking.......I'm going to be unable to get away from my Laptop at this rate with the hope of new updates.....OH WELL!

I agree with most that you might need to slow it down a bit, seems like you are racing to the end when it would be fun to see the details of each encounter as the other mane six were changed. Buuuuuttttt other than that pretty good story so I'll be waiting with baited breath -wonders if baiting my breath is suppose to help draw things in.......oh must get cookie bait I love those~- :pinkiecrazy:

Fantastic fic I say. What a strange yet unique and well written concept. :twilightsmile:

You know, in all sincerity, I don't think this ending is creepy at all. It's obvious that Twilight's been converting her friends and fellow ponies into changelings, but they don't seem to be mindless drones. In fact, the way the story was writen, I think they're probably quite content to be assimilated into a love-sharing collective. They're all still individuals, but they're united in a deep bond that isn't knowable for non-changelings. :twilightsmile:

Well written:pinkiehappy:

Good job on this story. In my opinion the best thing to do is make a sequel, just an a opinion though.

You've got another good one here, Wanderer. It did feel a little rushed in places, though I will give some of that to the fact that Chrysalis was clearly on her last legs due to her wounds, so of necessity she rushed Twilight's induction to the barest of essentials in explanation of how a Changeling functions. Actually, in the long run, that could very well be what keeps Twilight and her new hive from going the way of the old Swarm. Twilight's got an enormous store of willpower, and she's seen what can happen to a changeling who lets their instinct to feed on external love sources get the best of their intellect. (Of course, to her thinking now, I'm pretty sure that Friendship is not just Magic, it's Hive. And we all know that you can never have too many friends.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Queen_Chrysalis.png ) The truly scary thought I have in all this is that it's entirely possible that the Elements of Harmony are likely to work even better for their new Changeling Bearers than they did for the old Pony versions. :moustache:

Damn! :trollestia: Let's see how it goes this time. :twilightangry2:

It feels very "Twilight Zone" (lol puns), but not light horror. The idea of everyone being a changeling is supposed to be the horror part, I think, but you made it sound pretty cool, not terrifying.

great story. a sequel to this would probably be also good. Celestia and luna figure it out that Twilight is now a changeling and have converted Ponyville

Wanderer, i don't know how you do it but every single one of your stories is an instant favorite of mine.

Twilight is best Changeing queen! Awesome story here.

Oh my gosh seeing the transformation of Ponyville would be INCREDIBLE. Just saying. Also Liked/Favorited.

Really, it didn't seem all that dark to me. I don't know why, but it never seemed like twilight truly gave in, but rather worked around her instincts. I don't know, probably just me.

I see the word "Twilight" and "Transormation" in the comments....:pinkiegasp: HURRAY:pinkiehappy: For some reason mind control is my kinda thing in fics. Lol

What else is there to say, other than "Great story, keep it up!" :yay:
I really love such happy-sad stories, they remind me of "A Ticket to Tranai" by Robert Sheckley -- a great little set of stories in a similar spirit :pinkiehappy:

awesome:pinkiehappy::raritystarry: definitely creepy!:pinkiecrazy: while i did love it a lot, i do get that familiar feeling of: MOAR!!!:twilightsheepish:
if you would continue this you could just have the next chapter be a "one week ago" and write about how she slowly converted the town. then you could make it into another awesome adventure/dark type story:rainbowkiss:

I'm surprised no one else has said it yet, but I'd really like to know what a dragon looks like in changeling form(non-shapeshifted of course). Especially a grown dragon, I bet it would look awesome.

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These kind of stories are meant for you to want more. Those are the best kind -- you feel on edge and want so much more, it jars the imagination to go through all the crazy scenarios that can happen.

A sequel is what we want, but we don't need it. It wouldn't be what we had hoped for, even if it was triple AAA -- everypony needs something else from it.

I want a sequel...but I don't if she doesn't rule equestria:fluttercry:. I just REALLY want to see that....

I enjoyed it! It could have been longer, but it was paced fairly well for what it was.

I don't have any real criticism for it, and didn't notice any particularly noticeable errors. Thanks for entertaining me!

only one question... WHY COULDN'T THERE BE MOAR?!!

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