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Chapter 13


"How efficiently inefficient of you." - Typoglyphic

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This story is a sequel to Eyes in the Abyss


"Redemption in a long way gone. Not a road found, but earned."

Once, she was a powerful queen. Feared by all, loved by none. Refined through years of violence and bloodshed, she had become one of the few beings in history to have challenged the royal sisters and survive. Empires had fallen before her. Ages had come and passed without touching her regal beauty. She had been magnificent.

Chrysalis was no longer that queen.

Now, she bowed and scraped before pony commoners by day, and endured the moon princess' torture by night. Such is her burden. Such was the price of weakness. But the nightmares only grow worse, and in time she came to suspect that they were something much more sinister than Equestrian punishment.

With the princess Luna's help, she finally turns to face the demons that have pursued her for so long.

A Silent Canterlot awaits...

Written by: Chapter: 13.
Edited by: Airy Words and Typoglyphic.
Assisted by: Scarheart.

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Silent Canterlot? Could it be? Oh yes, it certainly could. This is gonna be interesting. :)

The anger in Chrysalis surges.

Attack of the Present Tense!

Coming to a theater near you!

7765011 Ah, crap! Well, I'll keep it in there as an easter egg, though I am not happy about it. Gonna yell at my editor for that.

<Yelling at self intensifies>

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7765140 I mean, you didn't really ask me to double-check it before you uploaded it. I can do that if you want, you know.

7767026 Oops...

~ Chapter: 13

Aww, that changed Chryssie permanently into an earth pony? That sucks. :/ I hope she goes back to being a changeling eventually.

I totally expect this to go swimmingly.

*prepares a shotgun for when Dahlia appears*

So, it's this in continuity with the other stories? If not, does it happen post season 2 or 6 finale? If the latter, I hope she meets Thorax and bucks him in the groin. :D

7767849 Do you hate how your comment didn't get a response?

Written by: Michael A.

Why not use your user name?

7803607 Habit, and it goes without saying.

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So Luna cursed her to be a pony? Well, hopefully this reverted get back to normal for good.

Nuuuuuuu, Chryssie was supposed to be the badass fighter!

The monster came and its name is... Bob.

7803604 A bit, yeah.

7804657 Oops, sorry about that. Thought I responded. It takes place after the previous story, almost a year later. Thorax may make an appearance. The pervious story, Eyes in the Abyss, takes place a few months after "A Canterlot Wedding", but doesn't use any cannon afterward. Well, I didn't take any of it into account, that is.

Again, sorry for not responding earlier. Usually I'm good at that.

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7804657 And who is to say Chryssie isn't going the be a badass fighter? She just hasn't had her chance, yet. This world they find themselves in works in strange ways. It will let them shine, before it breaks them.

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7805175 Aaaaah, alright. And it's alright, I'll just drown my sorrow in hard liquor.

7805181 Yay!

Also, still hoping that the ponification isn't permanent.

And I totally forgot to list typos I noticed in the pervious post. Forgot some of them by now.

Birth should be berth.

Sacred should be scarred.

7805847 I'm a scotch man, myself. To late responses!

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The creature had no fur, only sacred flesh.

scarred?

Duuuuuuude you need to continue writing this. This is amazing.

Silent Canterlot.

Hoo boy. Here we go...

8725713 I wrote it as a gag, but then couldn't bring myself to take it out.

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Why are you rewriting this?

8727227 Had a hard time with the direction and characterization of the original version. Fleshed out the characters and have a better outline for the plot in the rewrite.

The original chapters can be found in my scrap story: Chapter: 13

~ Chapter: 13

Interesting. I look forward to reading more.

Is it me, or have I already read thie same thing before? About Chrys fighting a blind monster, and Luna dying? I swear to god I did.
Keep writing.

Is this story dead or what?

10114658 I'm working on it!!!

Oooh, that's a very ominous cliff-hanger to leave off on.

Just so people know, this isn't dead -- I'm just having a hard time writing anything that I feel will stick. Probably thrown away about 100k of temp chapters or story arcs. I know where I want to go, just not how I want to get there.

Anywho, again, I'm working on it.

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Just so people know, this isn't dead

:heart: :heart: :heart:

The creature reacted immediately, turning in her direction and changing once more.

Charging?

Comment posted by Matrix11335 deleted May 20th, 2021

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Hello from 2022

11387147 Yes, yes. I know. It's hard to get anything I feel is right after so long. Need to finish.

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Found you!
Took me forever to find this again.
For some reason I was thinking it was Celestia that Chrysalis was trapped with, not Luna: and that's why I could never find it.
And now that I'm writing this and thinking about it... I know EXACTLY what happened...
I accidentally mixed my old memory of this from 2019 with an ever older forgotten idea I had long ago that was similar to this... ooops...

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I might kinda know how this feels... I have SO many ideas and concepts. Even some prototype scripts...
But I haven't been able to follow through on any of them...

It's too bad this hasn't gotten any further chapters, I'm really loving what's been written so far.
Regardless, thanks for putting this to paper so to speak, greatly enjoyed even in its incomplete form

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