I hope that you’ve opened this particular tome looking for a guide to the life of a traveling hero, presented through the story of a young unicorn rising up to defeat the disembodied spirit of a powerful and evil archmage.
If you’re not interested, you’re in the wrong section of the library for cookbooks, and for the record, I’m very sorry for the life you must live.
My name is Mortal Coil, and this is the beginning of the most important story in the history of Equestria.
A Price of Loyalty story.
Chapters (54)
Glad to see this up, I've been looking forward to it for months.
Ah, the life of Morty. Now we begin to understand why he's such an complex character.
A note from the Editor:
I hope you enjoy this one, dear readers. There's been a lot of work here from several members of the talent behind the rest of the Price of Loyalty stories. Hats off to Loyal for his effort in crafting a large chunk of this story before publishing what you can already see. We are well on track for the planned update schedule and I hope you'll join us in a wonderfully in depth look at one of the more... interesting characters in this universe.
Morty is an asshole, but an asshole that's fun to read about!
Great work as always, LL. I know this will be a great story. (Because I've read a fair chunk of it.
) (But even if I hadn't I'd still be assured of its quality.)
To all the other readers, new or old, I hope you enjoy this fantastic tale! And another round of applause for LL!
Yep. That old windbag is as ambitious (and unhinged) as ever.
Gonna say it. With a name like 'Mortal Coil' - HE'S GONNA DIE!!!
Probably.
Finshed the chapter. Scratch that.
Am I the only one that thinks 'The Would-be-hero' is a cliche?
The name that is.
WHAT THE HELL?!?!?!?!?
Wintershimmer is really twisted. Shit!
And now I understand the 'sex' tag.
It's staff, staves is the plural.
Noooooo! Neeeeeeed more chapterssssss! Noooooo!
Clever.
Wintershimmer, you absolute scum...
Hmmm, this certainly is an interesting story. Keep the good work up.
Looks like you dropped a closing italic tag.
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It was the slash in the tag, but yes. Refresh; I fixed it almost immediately.
Really liking this...but, shouldn't I have got a notification that another chapter had been added, since I'm following you?
Hang on, do I need to be 'tracking' this story to be getting notifications about updates? I think that's it.
7212860 "Stave" is also an acceptable synonym for "staff" (here's the definition), but it's an unusual enough usage that it easily leads to misunderstanding or the feeling it's wrong, like you've had, so I do think using it isn't the best idea.
I read Wintershimmer's lines in Bruce Dern's voice. Is that odd?
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That's actually pretty reasonable. Admittedly, I write him imagining Peter Cushing, but either way works well.
It might just be me, but I think you had him name her in the narration before he could actually name her.
NOW... TO BRING AN AGE OLD YOUTUBE COMMENTS TRADITION TO FIMFICTION....
Second!
Helluva way to wake up.
I've really been enjoying this story so far. It's very clever and keeps my attention, not an easy feat with A.D.D.
Onward
Those two get along like a house on fire.
That was a good fight all around.
Unfortunately, Silhouette is still likely nearby somewhere.
"faze"
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You're bad.
7319041 And not in a good way.
I approve. I approve very much.
Goooooooooooooood. Now more!!! (Beacause, like I said, it's really good).
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Here is a simpler one:
"Glue two Möbius strips together into a tube"
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Glue? What are you, some kind of carnivorous barbarian pegasus? Besides, Gale would have no idea what a Möbius...
... there are those two dots again. Those damnable dots.
I don't understand the 'I already cast two spells' part.
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From Ch. 1.
Morty used one of his spells for that day seancing Wintershimmer, and another breaking Wintershimmer's grip on Gale. Thus, the next time he casts a spell, he'll pass out from exhaustion.
7405752 Ahhhhhh.....Forgot about that.
So his solution is to wait it out with the bell acting as an barrier.....
Stupidly suicidal or genius?
Morty! You're an intelligent, well-read scholar! How can you not recognise Discord?! You disappoint me, Mortal.
Saved by the bell?
Aaaaaaaand bombshell dropped.
I really love this story. Like alot.
Oh Morty.. if you only knew..
Winterspell, huh? Interesting that I remember that name...
Oh, I am hanging on every word of this. Good show good show.
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There will be more coming, eventually. Per my earlier blog post, I've gotten enough of my wedding planning done that I can be back to writing this, but progress is still slow.
I'd give you a date to expect new content if I had one, but for now, I'll just let you know to watch this space.
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Note from the Editor (not the author): Loyal's actually done a fair bit more, and is still going. I've advised him to finish the rest before updating on a fixed schedule. I suspect you'll like it.
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Come! Join us in Discord...
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This is a Price of Loyalty story. EVERYPONY dies... at least once.
8103028 ...Dusk I've been in the discord since EFNW last year.