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Good Christian Ethesto


I have a lot of friends and I make a lot of money, my rhymes are so sweet 'cuz I dip 'em in honey.

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When Halo man is brought to Equestria, it's his job to do a bunch of stupid stuff. This is the story of that stupid stuff.


A humorous parody of halo crossovers where the main character is a generic multiplayer halo.

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I-I but... no. NO.... what have you--I don't even.

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Halo-man remind me of everyone who calls Link 'Zelda'... just because the game is The Legend of Zelda.
And I honestly found it strangely amusing (and fitting) to this story.

I'm sorry to seem like the bad guy, but I did not like it. It seems as if you did this last minute. But I did not thumb it down.

755168
Hey, thanks for the feedback, but yeah. This is pretty much just a joke. I'm not gonna' act like I'm good at writing xD

I like how people think submitting random garbage and claiming it "was meant to be bad" will get them off the hook. Then when people try to tell them how unoriginal they are for thinking this will be a clever way to make people either upset or laugh at how stupid something is, or how they wasted their time; they just think themselves cool and that everyone who opposes is just "mad" or "jelly."

There really is no point in submitting a story that you know is crap. All you're doing is lowering the quality of the site, and then trying to justify it. Sorry, but there is no justification.

755232
Woah kid, calm down. I like my story, and clearly a few other people do too. If I didn't like it, I wouldn't have posted it. I said I'm not good at writing because I know that I'm not, I can still try though. I don't really care if you don't like it, but maybe give an actual reason why you don't like it next time instead of typing out a long (obviously not proofread) comment about it.

My brain exploded from the sheer amount of win in this story.
My only hope is more chapters.

755298 The fact that you actually used text speak such as "lololol" in a story, let alone as the first word is enough to say that you should have had a proof reader, and you clearly didn't give a damn about this story.

This just really makes me want to play Halo with you... :trollestia:

This is one of those things.......

That i shouldn't like.

But the dumb-ass in me DOES like it....

But then I see mist being all butt-hurt and i understand his point...

But then the cynical part of me is like "ARRRRGGHHH ITS SHITTY AND HES HIDING BEHIND A "Oh its meant to be crap. " BITCH-WALL!!!!"

But then the fun part of me is like "OH GOD ITS SUPPOSED TO BE FUNNY!!! FUCK!!"

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755358
xD I've met a lot of people who use 'lololol' in regular conversations, therefore I can use it in a story. For example, me while stabbing people with the energy sword on halo. I said in the description that this is basically just a self insert of me while playing halo, so I can make my character say whatever I want. It's also a comedy and I, for one, find that kind of thing funny.
Thanks for the input anyways.

755395 This websites requirement states that it must be in English. Text Speak is not English. 'Nuff said.

755420
That's such a horrible argument that I'm not even sure that I should humor you, you're clearly just trolling at this point (which I'm fine with, I'm a comment whore).

Alas, I'll explain why that's stupid. For one, 'lol' is just an english acronym. Two, I'm willing to bet that most stories on this website have at least one non-english word in them. I don't see you complaining about those...

755449 There is a difference between using a non English word in an appropriate situation and being lazy.

Tell you what, I'll accept that bullshit argument if you go write an English essay and put the word "lol" in it, bring it back graded and see if the teacher approves of it.

Honestly, it's attitudes like yours that are degrading the English language. Acronyms originating from text speak are generally frowned upon in works of literature. Most acronyms in GENERAL are frowned upon actually. It's only appropriate to use them under certain circumstances. For starters you have to assume that the reader knows what they mean, and if you haven't established it, just because you think it's a universal acronym doesn't make it so. The fact that you are trying to DEFEND the usage of acronyms such as "lol" shows me that you not only don't know how to write, you also do not understand the English language that well.

Your logic essentially is saying we can use "ROFL" "LMAO" "TTYL" and such in a story. While we're at it, why not just use "u" instead of "you" after all it stands for "you" right?

755504
Hehe, I find it funny that you're trying to give me an english lecture because I used "text-speak" once in a 4,804 word story where I was literally quoting myself. If you're going to criticize me, at least find something legitimate to criticize me about.

This was strangely funny. I'm scared.

755548 Oh there's plenty more to get into, but that on it's own is enough to make me hang my head in shame. You do NOT want me to tear this story apart, trust me.

For starters the title is wrong. You capitalize every major word in the title. Generally the only exceptions are two letter words, and words like "the" which have no real meaning.

755557
I can acknowledge that there are plenty of problems with this, but a lot of them were intentional. For one, the plot is somewhat cliche. I'll admit that the whole 'use a spell to bring someone to Equestria' isn't original at all, but I did it because that makes a lot more sense than the character randomly teleporting or doing something stupid like that. Two, I intended to make this short so you don't get to see the ponies' personalities explained very much. It doesn't matter very much since you already know all about the characters (that's why you're here), but I suppose it is a problem. I'm sure there are other issues. I probably made some small grammar mistakes, but I'm happy with how this has turned out so far. You can waste your time nit picking at my story if you really want, I don't care.

755608 The fact that you acknowledge there are problems and they were INTENTIONAL and that you are openly admitting you're going to ignore critique tells me that you don't understand the first thing about writing.

It's 1% composition, 99% revision.

755575
There, fixed the title. Thanks for that. I didn't even notice that I did it wrong :D

755620
Did you not read that this is intended to be short or did you just ignore that for the sake of your argument? I was planning on making this story about 9-10k words so I ignored things that would take well over 30k words to achieve. It's obvious that you're just trying to find something to argue about, you've already made it clear that you don't like the story. Like I already stated, I like how this turned out, most of what I did was intentional, and other people seem to enjoy it. Get off my balls.

755649 I plan on it. I made the mistake of assuming you cared about your story and that you wanted to be a writer. My apologies, I'll leave you be.

755660
Hehe, I see you there tryin' to hurt my feels. I'm sorry that you didn't like it, but you really never provided any solid argument as to why it was bad that wasn't based entirely on your opinion. I appreciate the constructive feedback, I wouldn't have noticed the title was wrong if you hadn't mentioned it, however I'm not striving to make this some work of literary gold. It's a comedy about halo for God's sake... It's meant to be short and funny (at least for people who understand all the references). If you point out a typo or grammar mistake or something that just doesn't make any sense I'll fix it...


Also thanks for commenting everyone, I enjoy said comments. Like I stated earlier, I'm a comment whore.

755710 Actually I'm not. If I wanted to hurt your feelings I could find many more creative ways to do so. I'm stating how I actually feel about you. You're welcome for pointing out the error.

Another one you may want to think about is the over usage of brackets. It feels like you're giving us a commentary of the story as we read it.

755721
I noticed the same thing while reading this, there are a lot of brackets in the first dozen or so paragraphs. I was thinking about getting rid of some of them but I wasn't entirely sure how to do that without just completely removing what I had typed there. I did kind of want it to seem like Halo man was telling the story from his perspective which is why I ignored that at the time. I guess I'll go back and try to make it look less brackety though.

755771 Also consider that just because people that are reading this are probably Halo fans doesn't mean they know what a DRM is. Might want to point out what it is at some point.

755795
I had that in the brackets with the (it's a gun!) thing, but I took it out a second ago. In the next sentence it says that it fires bullet so I assume that other people can assume that it's a gun based on that.

755801 Fair enough.

Six, or some random Multiplayer Spartan? Really looks like it's the latter, but it might be the former just for funnies.
755083 How do you always manage to make me laugh?

I find this very funny! I don't know why but I do!:pinkiehappy:

Moar please.:moustache:

756533
:rainbowkiss: Glad you like it. I really wasn't sure what people would think of this while I was writing it.

756567
I don't know what to say so I'll just spam ponymoticons
:pinkiehappy: :twilightsmile: :twilightsheepish: :rainbowkiss:
thanks!

As man has reached twords the hevens, we have always strived for greatness. In the fields of art, music, art and music, rare achievements always being strived for... In the pantheon of writing their is a new member, taking it's rightfully place among the great works made by men like Dante and Lewis carol. And halo man has taken this place

755795 it says DMR not DRM...
755801 dude this is quite good and also quite terrifying with the intentional T-bagging... More?:pinkiesad2:

757624 Are you arguing semantics?

Oh god! I think I will die because of all the laughter! I can see a picture of a spartan pressing something like a beef jerky against his visor!:pinkiehappy:
Please continue writing this.:moustache:

759172
Rofl, now I have a good idea of what to make the cover picture... If I ever make one...

759185

I saw him Pushing a cake in and our of his visor while looking at like "dafuq is dis shit" (not that you can tell anyway)

755801 Hey... Hey bro... LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL I UPPED IT AND WATCHED YOU LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL YUMADMISTYTROLL? TROLOLOLOLOL. I IS SMART? MIST IS BUTTHURT LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL.

I actually read the whole comment argument too. I'm retarded. :rainbowlaugh:

759185 ROFLCOPTER. We need it. NAOW. also. we NEED MOOOOOOOOOAAAAARRRRRR.

Now he can get back to killing fish. Like a sir.

FIRST! Fuck. second....

764266 Side note... where in the hell did you get such an awesome name from? That one story on the featured billboard?

Cool story by the way, bro. Also.... BP. Killing off fish since 1993.

Mother fucking monocle Just awsome

I swear to Bungie, I he finds a top-hat it will be TF2 all over again!
Hats
:moustache:

765908 Exactly what I was thinking. Towering Pillar of Hats time!

That 'Spiderman' quote is going in my quote book as something I should live my life by. Halo man was kind of a dick in this chapter though. But we all know he didn't mean it.

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