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SPark


I dabble in everything. Sometimes that means I write ponies. I have a Patreon and a Discord.

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When Princess Celestia asks Twilight to make an official, royal visit to Romaneia, Twilight dreads the inevitable succession of dry, boring diplomatic events. The charming Lord Bela soon wins her over, but Twilight is about to discover that all is not as it seems in Bela's apparently peaceful castle. (A story inspired by Carmilla, Dracula, and other classic vampire tales.)

Written for the BadassTwilight = Total Domination Twilight's Nightmare Halloween contest.

(Spoilers in comments.)

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 63 )

Dark yet enjoyable, Twilight killing Bela was the biggest highlight. Well done, SPark. :twilightsmile:

5166186 Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

That was amazing!:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

5166317 Heee. Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

Not too bad. Seemed fast paced, but it's a one shot, so it kinda has to be. Although, you did use feet several times, when did ponies grow feet? :trollestia:

5166355 :facehoof: Uhm........... ponies have feet. They have hooves on their feet, instead of toes like we have, but they are still feet.

... I was hoping the ponies of Stalliongrad were going to invade Equestria via airborne, and the main six would have to become the 'Fighting Wolverines'...

Fight could have been more climactic, and Twiledtia was meh, but otherwise great story!

The Belmont clad would be proud of Twilight.

Trust Twilight to decide there is no harm in being thorough about disposing of Bela's remains! Brilliant.

5166633 :twilightsmile: I had fun writing that bit. I had fun with all the old vampire lore references, really.

Very nice! Also, thanks for recommending Carmilla--I've read (and loved) Dracula, but I never heard of Carmilla before.

Now we need a bonus chapter of twilight breaking the ice to her friends in her awkward way after planning it in great detail.

5166687 It's a fun read! Although it's practically pornographic (at least by the standards of the era) in some places. It is, of course, written very differently from a modern story, but I enjoyed it. There are tons and tons of great old vampire stories out there, I have several different collections of them now. :twilightsmile:

5166692 Ha ha ha! Well, I have no plans to write it, but I can just picture how adorkable Twi would be doing that.

Cute, simple and by god why couldnt you have her Count Von Count him? I love that part of tge myths...

5166863 Er... sorry, the thing that comes to mind when I hear "Count Von Count" is the Sesame St. character. I have this feeling that's not what you had in mind, though... :pinkiecrazy:

5166882 Oh no it was. The spilled grain or rice counting. Its like right behind harvest your pumbkins or theyll turn.vampiric that makes me wonder how wierd ancient eastern europe was.

I hope Simare Belmont makes an appearance here at some point.

Tons of fun! :pinkiehappy:

5167118 Ah, I see what you mean! It's not really as dramatic as a battle, though, to side-track somebody with grains. :twilightsmile:

5167160 Well, this one is complete, so I won't be adding anything else to it, sorry!

5167161 Thank you! :twilightsmile: It is always kind of warm and fuzzy when one of my favorite authors likes my stuff. (And I really need to finish reading the Luna Cypher one of these days... My unread chapters have gotten out of control lately.)

5167239 I know...but it would make a great prank for Rainbow to mess with her with.

5167346 Ha ha ha! OMG. It'd probably be Twilight's own fault too, Rainbow wouldn't know something like that, but I can just see Twilight lecturing her pedantically about it, and then Rainbow figuring out that it would make a great prank.

5167368 She and Pinkie would coat Ponyville in rice. Twilight would be catatonic once they were done. Only problem would be Fluttershy. Dont mpst animals react pretty badly to Vampires? I know Dracula had his wolf pack or the gypsys were werewolves but Did ole Van Helsing use animals at one pijnt against him?

5167396 I can't recall animals being used against him. I seem to recall dogs hating him, but he also had control over rats as well as wolves.

5167405 Terriers they sicked Terriers on tge rats at his hideout! Still just found this a fun little VampLight story.

5167414 Well, I'm glad you liked it so much! :twilightsmile: I've been itching to do another vampire fic for ages.

This was a good story! But the twilestia felt VERY forced. It just happened. Wham. Nothing in the story building it up.
Oh well.

All in all; SEQL PLS

The Twilight/Celestia shipping wasn't just forced and unnecessary, it was also out of the blue, without background. The rest of the story was good, though.

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5168388 Apparently my hints towards it were too subtle. :facehoof:

Twilestia seemed kind of forced, but otherwise I really liked it. :pinkiehappy:

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I mean, anatomically, sure, the ankle & foot is a huge part of a pony's leg, but colloquially, we'd consider foot = hoof, even if the bone structure says toes = hoof.

So it's kinda like, both sides are right. I personally think saying a pony is 'light on her feet' or something similar is out of place, but I can accept an argument can be made for either side!

5170323 Well, I personally tend to feel that "ponyisms" are a bit overused in the fandom. The show uses both "everyone" and "everypony", for example, and I feel that this is perfectly appropriate. Always using the exact same word for the same thing makes for boring writing. English is delightfully full of synonyms that let one add variety, and dumping them all out in favor of never-ending pony puns and ponyfications of all words just feels like a waste. So I use both "hooves" and "feet", just as I also do things like using both "shoulders" and "withers", and of course both "everyone" and "everypony." It just seems like better, less repetitive writing. :twilightsmile:

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Horseshoes and horseapples! Or something. I have no idea where I am going with this comment. I mean, I agree, 'hoof' can grow old, but I feel there must be a better way than just substituting feet :twilightsmile:

5170871 He he he. "Horseshoes" would probably work in at least a few contexts! Anyway, I am not a fanatic about this, people can do what they want, but I am personally going to keep using "feet" etc. in my writing. :twilightsmile:

You don't really find Dracula related vampire stories anymore. I am glad you stuck to the old vampires rather than using the more modern ones. Thumbs Up!

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I think this is where I post the gif of Futurama's Fry going WE ARE ENEMIES NOW :rainbowwild:

(But not really enemies, tis just amicable disagreement!)

It has all the makings of a good story so cute I love this :heart::heart::heart:

1: Brilliant little story, loved it.

2: Any chance of seeing a sequel about Twilight researching a cure for vampirism?
Also who doesn't want to see the sheer awkwardness of Pinkie's inevitable Vampire Party? :pinkiehappy:

5182631 Ha ha ha! I have no specific plans for a sequel, but if I ever do get an idea for a decent plot, I would love to come back to this setting. (And a Pinkie Party would almost have to be included.)

Ha ha! I love this! The mind control was done beautifully as well. Juicy vampony fic.

5232070 Thank you!

5270951 :pinkiehappy: Thank you! I had this odd suspicion that I might, though, given nobody else entered.

You realise, of course, that Dracula's castle was in Transylvania, Hungary, and not Transylvania, Romania.

5270988 Uhm.... what? :rainbowhuh:

I'll agree that the romance felt a bit tacked on, but romance rarely makes a story worse. I enjoyed it. I especially enjoyed seeing Celestia actually do something.

i felt that the ending was to abrupt here, but that might just be me.

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