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SPark


I dabble in nearly everything. Sometimes that means I write pony stories. I chat about writing and other things on my Discord chat here: https://discord.gg/cz4mjDT


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Twilight Sparkle has had a crush on Princess Celestia for a very long time. When Celestia's own advice prompts her to confess her attraction, Twilight discovers a secret that Celestia has hidden for hundreds of years. With the fires of the sun itself separating them, can Twilight find a way for them to come together?

Cover art by NadnerbD

Huge amounts of editing by Jordanis

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 251 )

4416772 Er... hi.

Beautiful story, wonderful lines, and a sweet ending.

Just what I expect from you.

Good job!

4416853 Thank you. :twilightsmile:

Twilight winked at Celestia and ate another bite, closing her lips over the spoon and drawing it slowly out of her mouth before sensuously licking the spoon's bowl and handle clean.

Celestia set the table on fire.

β€œEarly Warning's Expert Extinguisher! I practiced until I could cast it in less than a second.” Twilight grinned triumphantly. β€œI told you I'd thought this through!”

Each of these three lines are pure gold.

Twilight you must stop. If you continue being sexy Celestia will kill us all with fire. And if Frankenstein has taught us anything, it's that FIRE BAD!

Your story is good and you should feel good.

4416871 In some ways, the epilogue is totally my favorite part of this. :twilightsmile:

4416976 :pinkiehappy:

4416994 As it is mine. I love the funny

I'll hold back on critique, other than to say that I really enjoyed this. It was very sweet, and the epilogue was a hilarious, perfect touch.

Well done! :twilightsmile:

4417043 I'm glad you enjoyed it.

(BTW, just read your Twi/Trixie story, it was cute.)

4417078 I did enjoy it! I'm looking forward to reading more of your work, too. :twilightsmile:

Thanks for the compliment! I'm glad you enjoyed mine as well. It's fluffy and directionless, but I enjoyed sharing it.

This story was adorable. The dessert scene though, that was hilarious.

You are the (Gender specific authoritative figure) of D'aww!:pinkiehappy:

4417295 Can I be the (Gender unspecific authority figure) of daww? I like being a man/woman of mystery. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

4417313 Sure thing my friend, I dub thee Ser SPark the Gender Unspecified Authoritative Figure of D'aww, and the Protector of Changelings.

4417313 I don't have any authority, but you get my vote for being the "(Gender specific authoritative figure) of D'aww"!

But I know what gender should go there! :trollestia:

I loved this. Great characterization, build-up, and even a touch of humor at the end.

4417335 Shhhhhhhhhhhh. :pinkiehappy:

4417326 Huzzah!

4417339 Thank you very much. :twilightsmile:

This story is great :pinkiegasp: just saying !!!:heart:
Please keep the great work up :twilightsmile:

Very nice, Twilight should have been labelled Mistress of the Impossible. I like it was nice and the epilogue was fun, that ending however was priceless especially if one imagines the scene out.

4417883 :twilightsmile: Thanks! I had a lot of fun writing the ending.

Great story :twilightsmile: Nicely fitting of Celestia's serious demeanor to have a problem like that. And both were very in-character, with Celestia being stern and not even considering trying to find a solution (since presumably she would have tried many things in the past), and for Twilight to be obsessive enough to research it anyway, even if only to confirm that it was impossible.

The burning table at the end was hilarious. Though if a little spoon licking can set Celestia off, I think Twilight is going to be getting a lot of use out of that extinguisher spell :rainbowlaugh:

BUT HOW COULD YOU STOP BEFORE THE KISS? It was supposed to be all mind blowing and warm and fuzzy and cause some amount of collateral damage despite precautions :twilightsheepish: Actually, a clop-tastic sequel would be awesome and hilarious to see what all happens during certain... activities :trollestia:

β€œYou seem to be suggesting we go straight to my workroom and, ah, test out your spell, to put it delicately.”

I was hoping Twilight would respond, "I've already tested it. I'm suggesting we go to your workroom and enjoy it." :trollestia:
But then I read her real response, and it's even better, not putting pressure on Celestia, but just proving that the option was available :heart:

This story is genius. Loved it from start to finish. Big ole' grin on my face right now.

4417919 :twilightsmile: Man, I love comments like this. Thank you! As for a clop sequel, I *almost* never write clop, so it's not likely. Though if somebody else wanted to take a stab at it, I wouldn't mind.

4417928 Thanks! :twilightsmile:

What an interesting story. Very well written, and it has a concept that I haven't really seen used before, yet makes sense. Very sweet ending, as well.

Also, I really want art of Twilight and Celestia both on fire in a furnace together.

4417974 Thanks! (And man, if somebody ever did draw that scene, I would absolutely keel over with joy! I thought about asking for it for the cover when I commissioned it, but two characters cost more, and I'm on a budget.)

4418018 If my art skills ever improve, I'd do it myself (if I remember). Right now, my art skills are too bad to even speak of.

normally I don't read shipfics but I liked this one.

4418172 Aww, thanks!

4417883

Sums it up for me. Loved the story, and I burst out laughing at that ending. Kudos! :rainbowlaugh:

That, was awsome. :rainbowdetermined2: Of course, it being awsome means that anything I would say to compliment it has already been said. Oh well. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the great work. Deus tecum.

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4418238 :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: Thanks guys! It is awesome that so many people are liking this. I was kind of worried for a while. (It got a lot of downvotes early on.)

Easily one of the best twilestia short stories I've read.:heart: I will definetly fave your story!
My fave part was when celestia set the table on fire haha:twilightblush:

4418351 Hee. Thanks! That seems to be a very popular moment.

Very nice indeed! This one is going into my Favourites without a moment of hesitation.

And, being the pedant that I am, I greatly appreciate the research that you have done into blast furnaces, the melting points of steel and iron, and ruby formation.

Well done!

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4418357 yes haha I was like ooo things just got spicy!
And I usually don't read a lot of " spicy" fiction
But I had to like that part it was too perfect:P

4418386 :pinkiehappy: Huzzah! Glad you liked it so much!

4418405
Thank you for writing it!

Have some lyrically appropriate music: :pinkiehappy:

:twilightblush: This is awesome, sweet, adorable, and amusing all at once. Very well written, and I like it alot.

Have a gold star!

Very nice. Great story, love the concept. Hopefully Celestia can drink now.

:derpytongue2: Nah. Thank you for being that 1 in 100 that makes rooting through all the clop-fics, Mary Sues, and horrid examples of poor writing and story telling worth it.

Can we have a sequel

You know, for as much research as you put into blast furnaces, you forgot to look up rubies. Rubies are red because of the presence of chromium, not because they're flawed. :twilightsmile:
(But then I'm just a pedantic ass, don't listen to me. Loved the story)

Twilight winked at Celestia and ate another bite, closing her lips over the spoon and drawing it slowly out of her mouth before sensuously licking the spoon's bowl and handle clean.

Celestia set the table on fire.

That is literally the best reaction i've seen.

Better than even Cleverbot.

Edit - This is story #3 of yours i've favorited. +1 Follower(s) get.

4418523
That may have been the flaw she was talking about. She did say she refined it at the molecular level (honestly though, at that point, a diamond might have been a better choice for crystal).

Also, beautiful story. I may have to use that heat-proof ring idea in a story of my own (not the exact one, but you know what I mean).:twilightsmile:

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