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Manes
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Oh geeze.
Yeah I'm reading this. Brb.
I usually avoid the sex tag, but this story is amazing!
Much like
4360292 You read it that fast!
wow I mush have rushed this. hehe
That was quick.
I dunno, I'm not used to rushed sex scenes like that. I kind of wish there was an Incomplete tag on this, there's a lot more you can do with this particular idea.
i dont get it is the fluttershy in the basement the real fluttershy and the one making out with rarity is the changeling or is it the other way around
4360361
I just wanted to get the mature tag a go.
Like I said this my first time
4360363
Well the one making out with Rarity is the real one. I was thinking it should be the changeling instead, but I changed my mind.
4360369
Welcome to the sex club!
Slide in next to me and pick a plot, it's fertile land to plant your seed in.
4360379
Hell yeah!
4360328
When I'm in a rush, I can read fast. I usually don't like to though, this is definatly a story I want to reread when I have good time.
4360388
Best advice I can give, be detailed, take it slow, and be as visceral as possible. Describe every sense, every smell, touch or sight. At least for a good clop scene. Other than that, adjust for the amount of enjoyment you want the couple to have.
AND A PERSONAL NOTE
SINK THE SHIPS, CLEAR THE SEAS!
4360399
Will do
4360363
The personality of the changeling switched places with the personality of the real fluttershy. However, that changeling is now the shy one and Fluttershy is more Love hungry.
4360409
*cough*
Will*
4360415
Dammit I rushed it.
Dang, never thought you'd make a clop. Not sure if I'll read it :/ But hey, it's cool to see you trying all different things!
4360519
Yeah I wanted to see how bad I did
4360523 I'm sure you did fine, it's a cool idea. I just... I think I'll have to pass on this one. I'm trying to stay away from clop right now. Sorry!
4360539
No, it's cool. I understand
You really didn't want to write out that sex scene, huh?
Interesting concept, regardless.
4360624
Yeah I'm terrible with that so I rushed it.
Well, that sure was some mind-fuck (Hahaha)
I only have one thing to say:
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Wow, I liked it, it was darker than I expected, but I liked it. But what I really didn't expected was the sex scene.
4360378 I'm confused who is who, and also, is it possible to remove the black covering the latter half of your sentence?
I thought this would end like this
I think I was both far from and close to the truth
Fluttershy's characterization didn't bother me, really. Actually, I think Rarity did most, I think she should have been more suspicious and less willing
But I really liked the atmosphere and the way you showed stuff.
I wish there was a bit more to read in that, but the way it ends is actually satisfying. Me likeh
I could totally see a sequel where Fluttershy becomes a serial dater, only to get her preys into her basement, only to feed the changeling... if you ever feel like going dark again...
Uh... I don't get it.
So, she locked the changeling in her basement, then tricked Rarity down there to... What? Is the changeling killing its victims? Is that what all the blood is?
Or is she bringing Rarity down there to fuck the changeling, this feeding it? If that's the case... How is she benefiting... And how is it "dark" beyond the changeling being trapped?
Umm... interesting story. Here's my review. >>> Link To Review
i loved this story, i agree with 4360361 I would so read more of this
" might not be able
"Unfree" Isn't a word, friend. Try "Caged", perhaps?
6301770 Got it. Thanks!
Ok. I liked it
... Okay?
I don't get it...
The story dosent seem linked and,there is some problem with the telling of the story:
Chapter 1: The author's view
Chapter 2:The character's view
Now what I really dont get it is the point of the story.Whats the changeling got to do with Fluttershy if Rarity isK in it?or the other way around.I suggest that it is better to concentrate on one character first if you want some quality out of it.What does it mean?Fluttershy just goes out the next day just to meet her friend Rarity only to just bring her back for tea while the changeling just lies there in the cottage asking for Fluttershy to just close the damn door and buck him,or her,or it, or both,or never mind about it.I mean how does it change Fluttershy's life? There has to be a reason and a story to what really was the changeling's experience,then what happends to the both of them,then their life changing effects.Please,kind sir.Just put in something that if understandable and meaningfullness to this story.
As they say..
Nothing ever worth having was achieved without effort
-Theodore Rosevelt
You can has review!
I am confused at what the hell was going on and i am not the only one it seems