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Cerulean Voice


Father of twin 4yo boys, partner of Arcelia, and so glad to be back.

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Berry Punch, her short-term memory in tatters, awakens one morning in Ponyville Hospital. It will take three of her best friends to help her remember what happened, and to assuage her recent doubts related to her close call.


Written as a gift to my buddy, Chrono_Ryono. Happy Birthday!

Rated teen for mild dark themes.

Featured in The Royal Guard's Fic Spotlight #8

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I JUST SPENT THREE HOURS LISTENING TO JETHRO TULL IN ANTICIPATION OF AQUA LUNG...
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My heart was not ready.:pinkiesad2:

I feel this, I really do...I pulled a friend through an open window last month after he jumped...Nearly broke his ankle, but I wasn't about to let him fall three stories to the pavement. :fluttercry:

Ceru..
You brought up so many buried emotions..:fluttershysad:
I need a cup of tea and a shower to contemplate life over once more..

Thank you for this. It opened my tear ducts forcefully and whipped them with the Lash of Feels till they bled mighty crystalline droplets of liquid pride.

And that's what happens when Ceru writes from the :heart:

~Dash The Stampede

4193762
Wow. Cool feedback, man :twilightsmile:
Honestly, Jethro Tull never entered my mind. The three OCs are meant to represent three of Chrono's followers, but only he will know which. There's something special about a lot of the spoken words, too. :ajsmug:

Also, I'm sorry about the epic feels. I didn't mean to make you cry, I promise! :derpyderp1:

4193855
No worries, Ceru. It was a beautiful read. I made something for you, Should be in your feed. :heart:

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>mfw that was an unplanned poem
:twilightblush:

Hoh, this isn't half bad.

Gonna have to keep an eye on you.

Dawww:heart:

Cerulean, you mushy-mushy you...

I hope he makes it through this and actually has something to say. I should draw him a birthday pic too... :rainbowderp:

Not bad. Not bad at all.:moustache:

4194034
That I be considered worthy.

4194676

You have my sword.

Aqua Lung = Cerulean Voice
Luminous Spark = Luminary
Minty Shake = Erm... Mondai Shunketsu? 007 Delta?

4196316
Here's the man of the day :pinkiehappy:
Looks like you snagged yourself a bonus packet of goodies :raritystarry:

This is a nice birthday present, and I'm totally not jealous.
The feels were there, and I felt them, but I actually thought you could have done a bit more with the story. Though, you said it was only a little something you whipped up, so I'm not too mad at you for not writing more.

Overall, a good read and worth my time, like everything you write. :raritywink:

Just a minor nitpick, and as far as I can remember, the only error I spotted.

I really hope things go well for you in future.

4196511

I really hope things go well for you in future.

We've spoken about this, but that's actually not an error, if anyone else questions it. Blame my Aussie dialect :trollestia:

Uwaahhh! I'm the worst friend ever. :fluttershbad:

This is why I'm not legally allowed within a hundred yards of an AA meeting.

Do love you, 4196316 . Even if I am a big mouthy jerk. We all do. Just lay back and let it permeate through you. :pinkiecrazy:

And I do hope things get better for you. Because you're utterly awesome and deserve it. And while I can't sit back and take some inventory of the skills you knock yourself for, one thing I do most certainly know is that you're an amazing friend. And that means a whole hell of a lot to me. And it's a really, really awesome trait to have.

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The length had me concerned but it actually wasn't that bad

4198069
Thanks, Mayhem :heart:
Making my birthday more special.

That story is really very well-written! Thank you so much for writing it... It was a great pleasure to read it and feel it.

4202018
Thanks for your comment, Ry and I appreciate it :twilightsmile:

This was really well done.
I felt a lot of sympathy for Berry in this. It really sucks when negativity gets a hold of you and you start to see yourself as worthless. Thinking that no one will care when you are gone is one of the most soul-crushing things that you can do to yourself.:fluttercry:

Thanks for the good read.

This doesn't have a sex rating. Damnit. I was hoping she'd taken it up the butt long and hard and she was concerned by how sore her anus felt.

Pass.

Why does no one tell me when a good Berry Punch story comes out? :raritydespair:

Well done, not bad at all.

hi hi

I've never liked the fan interpretations of Berry Punch as a drunk. However, this is an excellent story, taking something awful and making something positive out of it. :twilightsmile:

4203323
Thank you. I, too, tire of seeing her used and abused as a drunkard, and I really wanted to portray her as an actual troubled soul rather than just a mare who loves the turps too much.
I'm glad you enjoyed it :twilightsmile:

The feels are nice in this story. Well done. :yay:

This was the perfect kind of bittersweet. :rainbowkiss:

4216518 pleased you enjoyed it :yay:
I was aiming for that middle ground.

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It's even more bittersweet since the person the story was written for/about is still borderline suicidal (due to a worthless life) and always will be.:rainbowlaugh:

Well, this is how it goes, I guess.
Thank you guys. :heart:

Someone gets depressed and jumps off their balcony, but... well, I don't care about any of these characters. I don't know them. So why do I care about Berry Punch doing this?

I just never connected with the story because I hold no connection with the central character - whether she lives or dies means nothing to me, and the reveal of her wanting to off herself just kind of felt... eh. I didn't care.

4504946
That's okay. This is the only fic I've written where it was only intended for a select few viewers.
Honestly, I'm surprised it took anyone so long to call out the disconnect. Thank you for the read. :twilightsmile:

4504969
You're welcome! I haven't really read a whole bunch of your stories; read this one because of the Royal Guard post. Have a couple marked RL though, so I'll have to get to them at some point.

4505008
That would mean a lot to me. I hope my other efforts manage to at least not bore you to death :twilightsheepish:

This is quite a good short story. It has what I want from a small piece like this.

My lone complaint aside from a couple very minor grammatical things as that "buck" is not a swear word. Now if you'll excuse me, I have to go farm my girlfriend.

You ever get that feel where a story is nice, but it just doesn't do anything for you? I feel like you could have done more with this, though I'm not exactly sure what, which I know is extremely unuseful. Still, you get a a star and green thumb. :unsuresweetie:

4535556
I know what you mean. There's a lot that I could have done with this, but in all honesty I wasn't really too concerned with the possibilities. It's just a little piece of encouragement for a friend of mine and that's all I ever meant for it to be. :twilightsmile:
Ta for the watch, too. :yay:

4535577 Me watching you means you are required by law to write a 100 word guest slashfic for THIS anthology. :raritywink:

4504946

That actually makes sense. The character in question is me, and people wouldn't really care if I lived or died IRL either. (Is that unintentional brilliance on CV's part?):rainbowlaugh:

4203323
>"fan"
Read up on your WoG. That was the team's intention when she was introduced.

5036599

What the heck does an ethnic slur for australians have to do with anything?

5036805
Word of God. Statements from the creators. Her little punch bowl drinking scene was a "she's an alcoholic" joke.

5036805
Gotta say, that gave me a chuckle.
Berry Punch confirmed Greek. :coolphoto:

5036934

No, it wasn't. Sabrina Alberghetti was a storyboard artist on that episode, not a writer, director or producer. Those people would have been Meghan McCarthy, Jayson Thiessen & James Wootton, and Lauren Faust, in that order. Sabrina's drunk joke was cut out, by "the team," because they didn't find it appropriate. Lauren Faust herself stated that she picked the name Pinot Noir for the character because she liked the drink. Liking a drink and being an alcoholic are two completely different things though.

Fluttershy was originally an Earth Pony, and Pinkie Pie a pegasus, in the creator's intention, but just because someone thought about it once, doesn't make it the case.

5037038
She was still a part of the production team, is she not? If Berry can't be an alcoholic based on a member of the production team using her as an alcoholic, then Derpy can't be derpy, as that was originally an animator joke.

5037690

Now you're just equivocating between possibility and intent.

Anyone is welcome to whatever headcanon they would like. However at the end of the day, Alberghetti proposed a drunk pony, and others on the production team who had the authority to do so, vetoed it, leaving us with a pony drinking from a punchbowl, neither belching or staggering. Anything else is a fan interpretation.

If someone wants to think that Princess Celestia is actually a Queen and that Princess Cadence is actually a wingless unicorn, because Lauren Faust originally wanted them to be, that is entirely up to them.

If someone wants to think that Derpy Hooves is a mailmare who travels through time and space in a police box with her unicorn daughter Dinky and a stallion with no formal name other than "Doctor," that's up to them too.

I like this story because it has honest compassion for people with mental health issues, rather than making fun of them. It's as much about hope and possibility as it is about failure and personal weakness.

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I just came back to this story and reread this comment. It warmed my :heart:
Thank you. :twilightsmile:

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