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Twilight Sparkle has obtained the combined power of all four princesses of Equestria. Wielding this power, she confronts Lord Tirek, but the result of their fight is a tie. When he holds her friends hostage, she is forced to make a difficult choice.

All is not lost, however: one force remains in Equestria that could give her the edge she needs to defeat her foe, save her friends, and restore the world. She need only retrieve it from Zecora and place it around her neck...


Runner-up (one-shots category) in the Twyrant's Kingdom Competition.

Story inspiration: Corruption of a Desperate Mare, by Chris Wöhrer.

Edited by NightWolf289, AugieDog, and Prak. Thanks also to Pascoite for his WRITE review.

Rated teen for gore and dark themes.

Featured on:
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The Royal Guard's Fic Spotlight #10.

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Comments ( 267 )

Well...what could possibly go wrong?:duck:
Ok let's dig into this.

I might have to join on the bandwagon and write something later today regarding my views of the season finale, because... ugh. I loved that they gave us a proper finale for once, don't get me wrong, and overall I thought it was a huge improvement to what they'd been doing. But certain things bugged the SHIT out of me.

I might be forced to read this, just to see Twilight do something intelligent for the season's conclusion. But first, somepony needs to resign his post (you'll see what I mean later tonight).

Why not? But I haven't finished season four.... so I'll have to add this to watch later for now. And for a moment... I was hoping for a pact with Sombra. But this works too! I'll dive in later.

You could probably submit this into my contest.

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Cool! Thanks a bunch for adding my story to the group. I was getting lost with all of the folder navigation stuff :twilightblush:

4377683 Eh, maybe it is a bit too complicated...

Very well twilight you have now converted to the dark side.:ajbemused:
Here is a welcomebasket with some cider, cookies and a giftcard for dark ropes.
Emperor Palpatine sends his regards.

It's the first story I've ever read where Twilight's corruption by Alicorn Amulet was believiable. :twilightsmile:This was most enjoyable, how about sequel?:duck:

4377759
Wow, thanks!
I have zero idea how I'd do a sequel, though. Twi's pretty much cemented herself as an invincible, immortal leader at this point.
Hmmm... Perhaps I could have a lamentation/contemplating of suicide sequel? But I feel that would be taking it a little too dark, even for me.

Sequel necessary. Alternate ending. ANYTHING TO MAKE THIS BADASS EXPERIENCE LAST LONGER!!!

Hell, even the Empire of the Rising Sun from Command and Conquer: Red Alert 3 showing up out of thin air and smashing Twilight would be awesome! Anything, even if it's just a scene with Twilight taking a shit, would make this longer, and make the awesomeness longer!

4377813
Sitting at my laptop right now, chuckling my bum off. :rainbowlaugh:
Thank you for enjoying it so much! :heart:

4377772
You know there are still other princesses left. They will escape Tartarus eventually and I think they'd have their powers back after thousand years or so. I doubt they'd be happy with how Twilight rule their kingdom.
It's just my idea but I hope you consider that.:twilightsheepish: I'd love to see something like that.

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No need to thank me, I'm pretty sure Roger Ebert would have given this thing a high score if it were a film!

4377825
This sounds... somewhat plausible.
I would wager that Cadance has long since kicked the bucket and dissolved into dust by then, though.

4377831 I don't think we really know if Cadance is immortal or not.

4377835
I think fact that Tirek known about her says something.:duck:

4377850 This is true.

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I tend to go with the logic that we have seen Cadance in younger form, both in the show and the comics. She ascended to princesshood from a simple pegasus, like Twilight, in the book Twilight Sparkle and the Crystal Heart Spell when she was a young mare, not much older than the CMC.

The theory that I and The Descendant in particular go by is that the Crystal Princess reincarnates repeatedly instead of being immortal.

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the Crystal Princess reincarnates repeatedly instead of being immortal.

:derpyderp1: Well that is interesting theory. I don't consider comics cannon and I have just read few first of them, so I don't know this story about the Crystal Heart Spell.
Her being shown younger in the show? Well, let's just say the way you keep your mane can completly change how you look.:raritywink:

4377893
Ah, that was an honest mistake. Thank you for pointing that out :twilightsmile:
Fixed!

After reading through it again, I can see what you meant by something I would write. Altogether, I think you finished it quite nicely

4377772
That's right up my alley, though.:trollestia:

“—or die. There can only be one princess in Equestria!”

She set the remaining torso of the shredded pony back on the ground.

“And that princess will be me!”

I'm getting a Luna vibe here.

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Desired effect achieved. :yay:

Lesson for Tirek: never mess with anypony who has the magic of four alicorns, the equestrian equivalent of the One Ring, and OCD for a good measure...

Ummm...Twilight? You done goofed.:derpytongue2:

Oh look, this seems interesting. Hm... 'Gore' tag. I hate Gore tag. Ah, it must be just Tirek's execution, nothing bad will happen to the good guys.


After reading: I'm so stupid. :facehoof:

4378167
Shhhhh.....
*strokes comforting hand through SP's hair*
It's an AU. It didn't really happen. Everything is fine. :twilightsmile:

4378172 *sighs in relief*

(Heh, this is the first time someone called me SP. I expected it to happen months ago. Have people ever called you CV?)

4378140
The One Ring, the full power of the dark side of the Force, Sayan level 3 and the fury of Krypton all mixed into one is more like it.

4378474
So basically, when she walks, the planet's foundations shake. When she speaks, the mountains fall. When she farts... okay, nevermind... :trollestia:

Somewhere, beyond Equestria, Emperor Palpatine sits at his throne in the Death Star 2, when he suddenly senses the imbalance Twilight has caused.

"Well, shit."

Here's hoping Shining Armour turns up soon. He's the only person she has left in this world. The only one who can convince her to cast aside such dark ways.

Sorry to point this out, but there's an error in your chapter name: Ascension to Omnipotence.

People overuse this term way too much. Omnipotence isn't just powerful, it's ultimate power. If Twilight had omnipotence, she would be able to be everywhere in the universe at once and destroy everything and create a new world in half a millisecond.

A correct chapter name could be Ascension to great power; something like that. You saying Twilight is omnipotent is making her an equal to God from the Bible.

Sorry if I sound like a snob. Just saying since you're a Christian.

4377772
You could write about how Twilight gets overthrown?
I would totally read that!

HOLY SHIT! THAT WAS AWESOME, AND DESERVES EXCESSIVE USE OF CAPS LOCK!!! :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

Twilight Sparkle cast Doom.

I know where you got that idea from. Don't even deny. :raritywink:

4378877 I think it's a good chapter name. She could be on the way there, thus the name "Ascension".

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I just wanted a cool chapter title. It seemed legit. Besides, she practically is God now. Just tell me a single other being in that universe with the power of eight alicorns rolled into one... PTS is the God of the New World. A world where she is now literally the only one who can control any aspect of the land, the environment, even the day and night cycle.
I really don't think calling her omnipotent is unrealistic at all. But if you are technically right, then yay you?
That aside, did you enjoy it?
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Thank you. I've been waiting for someone to catch that. :scootangel:
4379164
Who the hell would be stupid enough to even try? No other being has any magic left within them.

4379428
Think about this: Who made Equestria? If it is a God, then surely he is still alive, and he is surely more powerful than Twilight. That aside: yes, the story was pretty good.

4379442
Are we heading into Fausticornian territory here?
Hmmm....
*scratches overlong beard*

4379428
That is where the fun could come from.

What about all the blank flanks? Would Tirek be able to get there magic even though they don't have CMs?

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We can, sure. If you'd like to do so, I see no problem in that.

ooh, goosebumps. :rainbowderp:

Too bad everyone was killed off, could have been grounds for a sequel if you hadn't. Oh well.

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Yes, it was really intended for there to be no plausible future for Equestria under Twi's shiny new invincible hooves.
Not one in which she isn't calling the shots, anyway.

eh, didn't really like this, not my cup of tea.

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That's okay. I wrote this knowing it would be iffy for a few people.
Thanks for checking it out, though.

Am I a sick bastard for wanting more of this? I quite like this side of Twilight, to be honest. :twilightsheepish:

Well, that was kind of depressing, but it makes sense in a way since absolute power corrupts absolutely. Though, I will say it was wordlessly sad to see everyone die such horrible deaths, but I'm glad you didn't show Tirek killing them. That would have been unbearable to read! :raritycry:

But, overall, I found the story to be marvelous! :raritystarry:

(Is that word even appropriate for this kind of story?)

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