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Caramel wakes up and goes to work.

It's a normal day, like any other.

It's raining.

But the sun's still shining.

And that's alright.

Thanks to Holo, Sir Rustbucket, Loopy Legend, and Midnight Legend for editing.

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Rated Everyone.

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Awesome story! And welcome back!:pinkiehappy:

I missed you.

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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the story! :yay:

Missed you guys too. :twilightsmile:

Depression sucks so bad, but the worst part is... you start to feel comfortable in it. Like, after a while you begin to find safety in it, and get mad at people who try and cheer you up. Don't they know it's so muh easier to just stay in the rain? At least there, it's safe.

Damn good story, Seedy. :ajsmug:

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Exactly. We don't have control over when it rains, but we can choose to walk in it, or walk where it isn't, to some degree.

Thanks, Jake. :ajsmug:

Holy shit... This hits close...

Well done. Well done indeed.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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OO! Almost forgot:
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It really is nice to see you back in action. We all missed you.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Really?! :pinkiegasp: Awesome! Thanks! :twilightsheepish:

It's really good to be back. I missed you guys.

At first I thought it was mare troubles. I don't understand depression, and to be honest, I hope I never will. I can imagine this story is more powerful if you do though.

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I hope you never do either. It's rough sometimes.

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I can imagine this story is more powerful if you do though.

Your imagination does not lead you astray.

Damn. Talk about a triumphant return. This is probably my new favorite story from you, and that's saying something. There are lots of stories out there that, while they mean well, end up treating depression in a really hammy or sentimental way, but this is such an honest and clear-cut representation of depression and what actually goes down that it made my eyes well up.

I was especially impressed by the fact that you managed to take such a quote-on-quote "cliché" motif as rain when conveying his depressed state and make it work that damn well. It was very prevalent, mentioned consistently throughout the story, and yet did not seem obtrusive whatsoever. I also appreciated the fact that you only hinted at the reasons for his depression and did not make anything so blatantly obvious. I think that will end up helping this story relate to a wider audience, and I'm glad you wrote it that way.

In the line of criticism... honestly? I got nothing. As far as I can see, the writing is basically impeccable, and the subject of depression itself was handled admirably. I know you probably don't like it when somebody has no real constructive criticism to offer, but I personally couldn't find anything I didn't like.

You'd better believe that I'm favoriting this one. Thanks a ton for writing this.

~Arwhale

A fabulous story by a fabulous author! But what else did I expect?

Seriously, like quite a few people here, I've had my share of downer times, but I perk up pretty quick, and it's stuff like that letter that usually do the trick.

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Damn. :rainbowderp: I'm glad you enjoyed this so much! Thanks for the review, my friend! :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed! :twilightsmile:

Same with me. Sometimes, the little things are the things that matter the most.

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Thanks my friend! It's good to be back! :moustache:

Unfortunately for me, I've been there, so I know what poor Caramel was going through. And I really didn't have a specific trigger: it was just there, having found a point of entry where I was weakest.

That said, it's a lovely story, as I have learned to expect from you.

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Mine always has a trigger, but it takes a while to go away even when the trigger is removed.

Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

First day back. First new story up in a long while. Naturally, it makes the Featured Box. :twilightsmile: You called this an experiment. I say your experiment succeeded. It's interesting that it seems in the end the rain is a manifestation of Caramel's depression. This was a very interesting story with an interesting concept. Keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

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Featured? Dang! Didn't expect that!

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it and glad to be back. :twilightsmile:

Oh. My. God. the feeeeels

I have pretty severe depression and this resonated with me... so well. So well-written. So much great imagery. <3

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Thanks! Glad it resonated with you. And thanks for the follow! :twilightsmile:

Interesting read. I express my emotions in a very different way to Caramel, but the story was so masterfully written that I could definitely empathize. :twilightsmile:

Good to see you're back, Bad Seed.

PS.

Instead, he simply laid there on his belly

It should be lay.

Sorry, but I couldn't help myself. :twilightblush:

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Thanks! I'm glad to be back! :pinkiehappy:

And thanks, fixed! :twilightsmile:

I can't give a proper review because of how choked up I am. I've been feeling like this for a while now, and this story really got to me. It was just...excellence. Every little detail and nuance, was so powerful. So well executed.

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I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :twilightsmile:

And thanks for the follow. :twilightsheepish:

4104625 You're quite welcome :twilightsmile: Looking forward to reading more of your stories!

Absolutely phenomenal work!

Sometimes, all it takes is one voice to bring in the sunshine.


...Well...granted, it was more than just the mare from outside of the country who was talking to Caramel, but my point still stands.

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Yup, that's the point I was trying to make. :twilightsmile:

That was something wonderful, tear-jerking, and astoundingly written.

I've never had depression that stong, but when I was younger I certainly had those harsh moments when all the fun seemed to just bleed out of life. It took me a long time to being who I am today, and all you can really do is whatever you can when life feels that way. This reminded me of that old struggle I had, and really tugged at my heartstrings. Truly beautiful.

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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and that you overcame your struggle. :twilightsmile:

I can honestly say that I am not depressed in the usual "normal" way. My life isn't sunshine and lollipops by any means. I can't begin to describe what you and various others are going through, but I can empathize and "fake" understanding and nod and tell you that I at least will be there for you or anyone else.

This story was amazing and I definitely enjoyed this one. All it takes is a moment of understanding to bring about a small smile. That somewhat is how I met Evan. I can say that I wasn't depressed, but I started out annoyed with him. At least till he showed a knowledge of video games and various information about various games. It isn't the same I know, but that small moment of understanding can go a long LONG way to changing a view point

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Thanks! Yeah, I hope you never have to understand what this kind of stuff feels like. But you're right... Even the smallest gesture can go a long way to helping someone start on the right path. Glad to hear you met a friend that way. :twilightsmile:

That was... scarily reminiscent of my life.

That was really good. Reading this made me really feel the whole spectrum of Caramel's emotions: his anger, exasperation, fatigue and this senseless emptiness. Wow. That was amazing and so... close to real live. Just in what dark and grim cracks did you find a material for such an accurate description of a depression?

My live lately is cloudless, not that it's happiness and joy all the time, but the sun is shining for me and I am luxuriating in it's warm beams, surrounded to perpetual peace, quiet and my infinite laziness. So it was nice and refreshing to shift into someone depressive and sad for alive, to overcome my small boredom. I've never had something that was even near that thing. And I probably won't. But nevertheless, I think this was very, very true. Somehow.(:rainbowhuh:What the garbage am I writing?)

For some reason, when I read up to the place where Caramel was speaking with Big Mac, I thought that he would lash out at Caramel and punch him in the muzzle, and after that would give him a good yelling for him to stop being so blind for the bright side of live or something like that. Not sure if it would helped him though.

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Unfortunately, there are a lot of people who experience this. Luckily, that means we are not alone.

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Thanks! I'm glad the emotions were conveyed well. Good to be in the sunshine. It feels warm. :twilightsmile:

As for Big Mac, I like to think he's pretty smart, and knew that Caramel had to come around on his own terms

i loved it. kind of a bit close to the vest or the chest or however the saying goes, but it was amazing.

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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

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well, it's hard not to like a good piece of literature.

Wonderfully written story. I was pretty depressed when I decided to read this and I think it's because of that reason I really enjoyed it. All the emotions and stages caramel went through were just spot on, or at least they were for me. Also the ending, those last few lines even picked up my spirits. This story really deserves more attention.

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Thanks. I'm glad it picked up your spirits at the end. :twilightsmile:

That was incredibly calming. :pinkiesad2:

This was the story equivalent of laying in a bathtub in a melancholy mood and finally getting up, drying off, getting dressed, and facing the day.

Thanks for writing it.

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You're welcome! Glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

Wow. Very amazingly written. I think I'm one of those people who always walks where the rain isn't, but I can still relate to this because someone who's very close to me experiences this all the time. I think it kinda helps me understand just a little, how she feels.

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Thanks! I'm glad it could be of some understanding. :twilightsmile:

I love this type of story you've written, I'd give it a Depressing tag but I figure thats for each person to decide. The hopefulness aura it gave in the end was nice if a little odd for me though as it usually takes something a bit more personal to get me, someone who's suffered from chronic depression, to feel the sunshine again. Nevertheless I thought it was a sweet story, well written and well told, thank you.

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Thanks! Yeah, I felt that "Slice of Life" was a better tag than "Sad" here, but that's just my take. :twilightsmile:

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But my eyes won't soon be turnin' red...

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Link is broken. :fluttercry:

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